Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Teddy Bear"A collection of my children's poems
194 total reviews
Comment from Marie666
This is a beautiful piece of writing, well written.
It has passion and rhythm written in it and I absolutely love it.
I advise you to keep it up and write more poetry.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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This is a beautiful piece of writing, well written.
It has passion and rhythm written in it and I absolutely love it.
I advise you to keep it up and write more poetry.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Marie for your kind words.
Comment from sgalletti
Absolutely lovely! Incredible meter and rhyme, beautiful imagery, and, lots of fun message. Very upbeat. I loved it! Best of luck in the contest. Sue
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Absolutely lovely! Incredible meter and rhyme, beautiful imagery, and, lots of fun message. Very upbeat. I loved it! Best of luck in the contest. Sue
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Sue. I seem to have struck a chord with a few teddy -lovers. I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing!
Comment from missy98writer
Mystery Poet.
Your poem is delightful and creative poem you cleverly scribed and your words are rich in imagery painting a picture in the readers head. Flows great down the page. Your writing packs a fanciful narrative from a child's view point about playing pirate with his or her Teddy bear. The art work you used is adorable and priceless. You excellently used rhyme, imagination, alliteration and metaphor in your poem. I enjoyed the lines: ""Mummy, my Teddy and I will be playing Outside in the garden," I hear Molly saying. "We'll prob'ly be busy; I hope you don't mind. There's pirates to battle and treasure to find." $"Blackbeard again!" I think with a chuckle. "Oh where is my swash? Oh, where is my buckle?" The morning flies past in the blink of an eye." I love your poem and its fun message about childhood and using imagination. Your poem to me was like a breath of refresh air for a weary soul. I'd recommend your whimsical poem to other reviewers. Thanks for sharing and have a fabulous day. Missy.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Mystery Poet.
Your poem is delightful and creative poem you cleverly scribed and your words are rich in imagery painting a picture in the readers head. Flows great down the page. Your writing packs a fanciful narrative from a child's view point about playing pirate with his or her Teddy bear. The art work you used is adorable and priceless. You excellently used rhyme, imagination, alliteration and metaphor in your poem. I enjoyed the lines: ""Mummy, my Teddy and I will be playing Outside in the garden," I hear Molly saying. "We'll prob'ly be busy; I hope you don't mind. There's pirates to battle and treasure to find." $"Blackbeard again!" I think with a chuckle. "Oh where is my swash? Oh, where is my buckle?" The morning flies past in the blink of an eye." I love your poem and its fun message about childhood and using imagination. Your poem to me was like a breath of refresh air for a weary soul. I'd recommend your whimsical poem to other reviewers. Thanks for sharing and have a fabulous day. Missy.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Missy. So glad you enjoyed the adventures of Ted.
Comment from sibhus
What agreat poem. This was so much fun, and I could really see Ted and Molly out on the seas. Your rhymes work very well portraying the adventures of your swashbuckleing crew. Great rhythm too, that bounces along like a happy little tune. Again great poem, and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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What agreat poem. This was so much fun, and I could really see Ted and Molly out on the seas. Your rhymes work very well portraying the adventures of your swashbuckleing crew. Great rhythm too, that bounces along like a happy little tune. Again great poem, and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed this fanciful little piece.
Comment from Piccalily Potter
I like the a-a-b-b-c-c rhyme scheme and this is a sweet poem. I like the way you have written it through the eyes of a teddy bear. Thank you for sharing this with us and good luck in your contest entry.
Piccalily Potter
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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I like the a-a-b-b-c-c rhyme scheme and this is a sweet poem. I like the way you have written it through the eyes of a teddy bear. Thank you for sharing this with us and good luck in your contest entry.
Piccalily Potter
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you - and welcome to FanStory. I have just read your 'Evil is...' story - great work - look forward to more.
Comment from robyn corum
This is precious, in all the way a little girl's poem is supposed to be precious and many more. The rhyming is spot-on in every way and the imagination in off the charts. I love it!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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This is precious, in all the way a little girl's poem is supposed to be precious and many more. The rhyming is spot-on in every way and the imagination in off the charts. I love it!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thanks so much for the kind words and the six stars! Glad you enjoyed it.
Is it a worry that a grumpy old man can produce a cute little girls' poem?
Comment from Akarva
A cute nice poem on the life of a Teddy bear. It was interesting and I thoroughly enjoyed reading about it's adventures during the day.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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A cute nice poem on the life of a Teddy bear. It was interesting and I thoroughly enjoyed reading about it's adventures during the day.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you.
I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing!
Comment from Eleanor Buron
I really like this story poem and particularly like the human emotion of a little bit of jealousy that the teddy bear feels towrds Jemima, the one-eyed doll. Cute and well done.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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I really like this story poem and particularly like the human emotion of a little bit of jealousy that the teddy bear feels towrds Jemima, the one-eyed doll. Cute and well done.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you - you are the first to comment on that line...
I am thinking of a sequel - Jemima's story...
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I hope there is a sequel. Good poem.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a very clever little poem. It was cute to tell of it from the viewpoint of the teddy bear. Well written with good use of personalzition!!! DEbbie
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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This is a very clever little poem. It was cute to tell of it from the viewpoint of the teddy bear. Well written with good use of personalzition!!! DEbbie
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you, Debbie.
I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing!
Comment from volunteer angel
This is so cute! The imagination of children can't be beat. Your poem showed such action and excitement. I laughed over the line "There's jam on my jacket and mud on my nose".. I voted for you in the contest. Hugs and good luck! V.A.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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This is so cute! The imagination of children can't be beat. Your poem showed such action and excitement. I laughed over the line "There's jam on my jacket and mud on my nose".. I voted for you in the contest. Hugs and good luck! V.A.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you, Angel, for the kind words and the vote - it has obviously struck a chord with all the teddy-lovers out there.
I actually patched this together in haste with the deadline only minutes away, so the outcome was pleasing!
