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Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Clear! - part 2"Brothers fight for faith ... and for their lives.
7 total reviews
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
A very write dear Deb. I mean, the hospital scenery and all, you just create a perfect image of everything. This is GOOD!.
You've written well.
Over to the next chapter!
Blessings and good health.
More grace, more ink!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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A very write dear Deb. I mean, the hospital scenery and all, you just create a perfect image of everything. This is GOOD!.
You've written well.
Over to the next chapter!
Blessings and good health.
More grace, more ink!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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You're making me smile, big time! So pleased that you are enjoying the read!
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh this is so intense! Everyone was so surprised that Jack had prayed. At least now he is back with God, I'm sure Cody will live. But Jack must keep his faith and get Cody back to normal. This chapter was another great one. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Oh this is so intense! Everyone was so surprised that Jack had prayed. At least now he is back with God, I'm sure Cody will live. But Jack must keep his faith and get Cody back to normal. This chapter was another great one. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Well, Sandra, Jack is a Texas boy, so nothing is easy with him. (Trust me -- I"m married to one, was raised around them and have two of my own! lol) But a little birdie told me that he's going to come around. :)
Thank you, sweet friend,
Deb
Comment from Margaret Bednar
I like it because of the "head-hopping". It gives it more depth, more heart. I am completely taken with everything - your attention to setting and dialogue are top-notch!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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I like it because of the "head-hopping". It gives it more depth, more heart. I am completely taken with everything - your attention to setting and dialogue are top-notch!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Good! I LIKE head-hopping. lol. And I like Laine. She just isn't getting a lot of 'front page' time. Appreciate your input, Margaret.
Blessings!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
The miraculous prayer brings Cody back to life, exactly like in the Bible:"Ask, and you'll receive" . The prayer of a brother is stronger than any other words.Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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The miraculous prayer brings Cody back to life, exactly like in the Bible:"Ask, and you'll receive" . The prayer of a brother is stronger than any other words.Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Those Biblical miracles still happen. We often don't recognize them or write them off to our own abilities, but God is still working every day. :)
Thank you for reviewing so faithfully, Iza.
Be blessed,
Deb
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
The different points of view do not trouble me at all because that is the real way life, trauma, emotional pain, etc. occur. You need to switch POV to keep the story lined up.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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The different points of view do not trouble me at all because that is the real way life, trauma, emotional pain, etc. occur. You need to switch POV to keep the story lined up.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Thank you, Rebecca. UP until now, there was almost no point to do that, so I was worried it would feel weird. lol. Appreciate you!
Be blessed,
Deb
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You're welcome.
Comment from royowen
I like the way you've got Jack making a prayer, not like him, and it's amazing how God turns, He turned up in my life, with not known Christians in my family or really friends, when I needed Him. This may be fiction, but that's how God turns, the ways of God, are amazing brilliant episode Deb, blessings, Roy
Typo : Mclolland 2 Caught by her (intent) gaze. Intense?
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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I like the way you've got Jack making a prayer, not like him, and it's amazing how God turns, He turned up in my life, with not known Christians in my family or really friends, when I needed Him. This may be fiction, but that's how God turns, the ways of God, are amazing brilliant episode Deb, blessings, Roy
Typo : Mclolland 2 Caught by her (intent) gaze. Intense?
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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God always shows up just in time, doesn't He. He truly is amazing.
I'll run over there and fix those errors. How could I misspell McClellan? That's one of my kid's last names! lol
Thank you, Roy. :)
Blessings,
Deb
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It happens Deb,
Comment from lyenochka
Hooray! Jack finally turned to God and prayed! A dramatic turn and so I hope that this is also a turning point in Jack's walk with the Lord.
"Rachael shuddered and Jack " (you have it spelled 'Rachel' later. just stick with one.)
"McClollan. Come on ... come on." (McClellan)
"" HIs words fell " (His)
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Hooray! Jack finally turned to God and prayed! A dramatic turn and so I hope that this is also a turning point in Jack's walk with the Lord.
"Rachael shuddered and Jack " (you have it spelled 'Rachel' later. just stick with one.)
"McClollan. Come on ... come on." (McClellan)
"" HIs words fell " (His)
Comment Written 27-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Augh! And I read through it three times and STILL missed those errors. lol. No such thing as self-editing, I believe. :)
Thank you, Helen.
Blessings,
Deb