To Leap With Abandon
25 Word Sonnet11 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This twenty-five-word poem, To Leap with Abandon, finds the message here to be to endeavor without limits. decisions we often temper with hesitation or second-guessing ourselves. Commitment leads to success.
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This twenty-five-word poem, To Leap with Abandon, finds the message here to be to endeavor without limits. decisions we often temper with hesitation or second-guessing ourselves. Commitment leads to success.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2018
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
I like your response to this writing prompt and contest. This is a great romantic poem. My favorite line: "I jumped; not fell" which I believe many readers can relate to. Good luck in the contest.
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I like your response to this writing prompt and contest. This is a great romantic poem. My favorite line: "I jumped; not fell" which I believe many readers can relate to. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2018
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Friend!
Very creative.
More of a trochaic feel as opposed to iambic in a number of lines.
But again, very creative. Now about that leaping off a waterfall for love...those were the days... :)
Best Wishes!
diane
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Hello Friend!
Very creative.
More of a trochaic feel as opposed to iambic in a number of lines.
But again, very creative. Now about that leaping off a waterfall for love...those were the days... :)
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 28-Jul-2018
Comment from RFL
This is lovely, author. The words and the image create a beautiful harmony together. And putting the 25 words in the form of a sonnet was brilliant (in the British sense of the word, of course. :) Best of luck in the contest. RFL
P.S. Don't have my sixth star back yet, but I can vote. :)
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This is lovely, author. The words and the image create a beautiful harmony together. And putting the 25 words in the form of a sonnet was brilliant (in the British sense of the word, of course. :) Best of luck in the contest. RFL
P.S. Don't have my sixth star back yet, but I can vote. :)
Comment Written 28-Jul-2018
Comment from phill doran
Hello Anon
Great writing. Taking the challenge and adding your own challenge to it - very inventive, creative and it works (for me).
You may even have a whole new form: " A MacSonnet", the tag line being "If poetry be the fast-food of love, whatever. Next!" Complete with all trimmings like - as you point out - feminine endings to go.
I would not worry about the contest, rather start your own. The form is great.
The content also works - the format is limiting but there is a thought here and the syntax hasn't been wrenched to express it.
I wish you well with your further writing. I enjoyed this piece.
cheers
phill
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Hello Anon
Great writing. Taking the challenge and adding your own challenge to it - very inventive, creative and it works (for me).
You may even have a whole new form: " A MacSonnet", the tag line being "If poetry be the fast-food of love, whatever. Next!" Complete with all trimmings like - as you point out - feminine endings to go.
I would not worry about the contest, rather start your own. The form is great.
The content also works - the format is limiting but there is a thought here and the syntax hasn't been wrenched to express it.
I wish you well with your further writing. I enjoyed this piece.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 28-Jul-2018
Comment from Annika Fiercely
What a fun idea, think you pulled it off really well! Like the sonnet's younger sister))
Extremely effective use of 25 words; has very good rhythm and a strong meaning. Very good.
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What a fun idea, think you pulled it off really well! Like the sonnet's younger sister))
Extremely effective use of 25 words; has very good rhythm and a strong meaning. Very good.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2018
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
The moving water fall truly supports your writing and brings the whole experience together. You really did create an iambic feel. Well done. This is not as easy task and you met the challenge brilliantly.
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The moving water fall truly supports your writing and brings the whole experience together. You really did create an iambic feel. Well done. This is not as easy task and you met the challenge brilliantly.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2018
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your quick fire words seem to mimick the waterfall and speed of the water, if one was to jump, I doubt they would survive, but your words are fresh, youthful and entertaining, love Dolly x
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Your quick fire words seem to mimick the waterfall and speed of the water, if one was to jump, I doubt they would survive, but your words are fresh, youthful and entertaining, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Jul-2018
Comment from Lady Jane
This poem is STUNNING! The imagery/visuals the poem created with the dripping verbiage down the screen was sheer perfection. The purposeful words, those 25 pieces of poetic genius, made this poem a winner in my book. The entire package is well delivered and no errors present. Well done, writer. Good luck in the contest.
Janelle
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This poem is STUNNING! The imagery/visuals the poem created with the dripping verbiage down the screen was sheer perfection. The purposeful words, those 25 pieces of poetic genius, made this poem a winner in my book. The entire package is well delivered and no errors present. Well done, writer. Good luck in the contest.
Janelle
Comment Written 28-Jul-2018
Comment from Donka Kristeva
This poem has creativity, good rhyme and rhythm and an uplifting message. All seems to have a purpose: the water falling, the jump and the art work.
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This poem has creativity, good rhyme and rhythm and an uplifting message. All seems to have a purpose: the water falling, the jump and the art work.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2018