A Need For a Crutch
sixty word story19 total reviews
Comment from CobiDawn
This one gave me goose bumps. I read it over a second time because I read it too fast initially. I like the image and how you elude to noone knowing how warren got into the homeless shelter. Makes me wonder what comes next.
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This one gave me goose bumps. I read it over a second time because I read it too fast initially. I like the image and how you elude to noone knowing how warren got into the homeless shelter. Makes me wonder what comes next.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
Comment from pbomar1115
Many times into day's world, charitable people expect something in return from downtrodden people. Weary from bad samaritans, the downtrodden promptly rejects their help. But there's something momentary about rejecting the voice of the good. Only the downtrodden recognizes it through experiences and knows when it is time to surrender. The short story is very moving.
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Many times into day's world, charitable people expect something in return from downtrodden people. Weary from bad samaritans, the downtrodden promptly rejects their help. But there's something momentary about rejecting the voice of the good. Only the downtrodden recognizes it through experiences and knows when it is time to surrender. The short story is very moving.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2015
Comment from Irish Goat
Nice spiritual piece on human goodwill and kindness. Well articulated in the 60 words. Poignant and emotionally evocative. Should resonate with most folks as the weather cools and more people are alone, cold and needing an angel. Well done
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Nice spiritual piece on human goodwill and kindness. Well articulated in the 60 words. Poignant and emotionally evocative. Should resonate with most folks as the weather cools and more people are alone, cold and needing an angel. Well done
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
Comment from Michaelk
Nicely done. I thought the stranger was a cop at first when he said, 'I'm taking you in.'
Excellent use of so few words. Nothing wasted.
Nice 'good chills' ending.
Well done, congrats on the win.
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Nicely done. I thought the stranger was a cop at first when he said, 'I'm taking you in.'
Excellent use of so few words. Nothing wasted.
Nice 'good chills' ending.
Well done, congrats on the win.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2015
Comment from patcelaw
I have been involved for almost 2 years with pacific garden Mission in Chicago, IL and even had my life story done by them as a radio drama. If you go to my profile you can find the link to find and hear my story on the computer.
Patricia
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I have been involved for almost 2 years with pacific garden Mission in Chicago, IL and even had my life story done by them as a radio drama. If you go to my profile you can find the link to find and hear my story on the computer.
Patricia
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
Comment from Leineco
Very nicely done. In this complete scenario the reader is lead to envision the dire weather conditions, the main characters belligerent attitude and the act of kindness extended. As well as being left to ponder whether this was human or heavenly intervention :-)
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Very nicely done. In this complete scenario the reader is lead to envision the dire weather conditions, the main characters belligerent attitude and the act of kindness extended. As well as being left to ponder whether this was human or heavenly intervention :-)
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
Comment from LIJ Red
Excellent flash fiction, but I saw two typos. The period after angel needs to be a comma on the other side of the quote mark, and voluteer in the last line is probably volunteer.
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Excellent flash fiction, but I saw two typos. The period after angel needs to be a comma on the other side of the quote mark, and voluteer in the last line is probably volunteer.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
Comment from ericawrites
This is a lovely story, very uplifting and
a really good response to the writing
prompt.
The picture complements it perfectly.
Well done, best wishes in the contest.
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This is a lovely story, very uplifting and
a really good response to the writing
prompt.
The picture complements it perfectly.
Well done, best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
Comment from Dean Kuch
Every time we hear a bell rings an angel gets their wings. Although there was no bell above the door ringing when Warren and his guardian angel entered, I'll bet 'cha ten to one that Warren's angel earned his wings THAT day.
Good micro fiction, well told.
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
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Every time we hear a bell rings an angel gets their wings. Although there was no bell above the door ringing when Warren and his guardian angel entered, I'll bet 'cha ten to one that Warren's angel earned his wings THAT day.
Good micro fiction, well told.
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello :)
Heartfelt flash fiction, you got my attention in less than 60 words. Good job! I think it is really hard to do flash fiction, especially 60 words. Well done.
Gypsy
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Hello :)
Heartfelt flash fiction, you got my attention in less than 60 words. Good job! I think it is really hard to do flash fiction, especially 60 words. Well done.
Gypsy
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015