Christine's Poems
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Comment from MacMhuirich
I wonder if Michaelangelo had the same love for his statue?. Nice humour with good rhyming made it a joy to read. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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I wonder if Michaelangelo had the same love for his statue?. Nice humour with good rhyming made it a joy to read. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 23-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2015
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Thank you John for having a read and reviewing my poem abour David glad hou like it and thanks for yor best wishes woth Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hi..Neat write and I can feel the energy of this sort of invisible fiery force field around the statue protected by your wrath..heh heh.. It greets visitors, hear the giggles, he shocks everyone with his nakedness. That's awesome. I'm wondering how did you have it shipped over? Cheers.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Hi..Neat write and I can feel the energy of this sort of invisible fiery force field around the statue protected by your wrath..heh heh.. It greets visitors, hear the giggles, he shocks everyone with his nakedness. That's awesome. I'm wondering how did you have it shipped over? Cheers.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Hi Benjamin. Thank for reading my poem about David and yes he is fiercely guarded a bit of a joke in my household. I bought him on a holiday and actually carried him as hand luggage in 1977 ( the photo probably make him look bigger but he is about 60cm tall )and solid marble with the artist name carved in the statue so I think by todays standards he would be quite valuable. anyway I am very fond of him . Appreciate your time to read this and for your comments Cheers Christine😃
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Thanks Chrissy for that. Cheers.
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you're welcome😃
Comment from Story teller123
This poem was really good and well written! I really enjoyed reading it! I have not been on this website for too long, but I already love it! I have read some good stories and poems!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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This poem was really good and well written! I really enjoyed reading it! I have not been on this website for too long, but I already love it! I have read some good stories and poems!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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Hi Story teller 123 Thank you so much for you great review and comments for my poem. I havent neen her too long either but it is very addictive and a lot of fun and you will meet some great poets and writer here so enjoyable to read and give review also. try some contests they are challenging and you can learn heaps. Welcomeand Cheers
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You're welcome! I love this website! I have entered two of the story contests. They are challenging, which I love! I have been writing outside of my comfort zone which I love! It opens up a variety of stories to write. I want to be an author, so this is very good practice I feel like!
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I will keep an eye for your posts have fun and enjoy I am Cheers
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Shame you can't use him as a grave marker. Seriously, he'd be with you and remind visitors of how it proudly stood in your home.
Fun contest and lots of people are enjoying writing about obscure things.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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Shame you can't use him as a grave marker. Seriously, he'd be with you and remind visitors of how it proudly stood in your home.
Fun contest and lots of people are enjoying writing about obscure things.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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Hi Spritual Echo . Thanks for reading and reviewing my poem . a grave marker would be nice but he would get stolen lol good suggestion, but no one of my children will get him. yes I suppose one can write about anything should be fun to see them all. with thanks Cheers
Comment from PoemsOfDD
A fun writing prompt. It has a story to it and I can feel the admiration that Statue David holds. A comment if I may. The second to last sentence there is a spelling mistake with the word "Ans so...." 'And so.....'
Well done ant thank you for sharing. Good luck.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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A fun writing prompt. It has a story to it and I can feel the admiration that Statue David holds. A comment if I may. The second to last sentence there is a spelling mistake with the word "Ans so...." 'And so.....'
Well done ant thank you for sharing. Good luck.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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Thank you PoemsOfDD for having a read and then giving me you review and helpful suggestion I will revisit and correct the mistake. I do love the statue and all my family think it's quite funny lol Cheers to you
Comment from Nosha17
I love Michaelangelo, the Art of Florence, the masters, I deeply respect your wish to preserve your beloved statue. Good touch of humour, excellent rhyming and topic for your poem. Couple of things, in the title, line 1 and last line it should be statue. Verse 3, 'Cause (abbreviation of because) Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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I love Michaelangelo, the Art of Florence, the masters, I deeply respect your wish to preserve your beloved statue. Good touch of humour, excellent rhyming and topic for your poem. Couple of things, in the title, line 1 and last line it should be statue. Verse 3, 'Cause (abbreviation of because) Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 21-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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God I'm stupid sometimes I can't believe I spelt statue incorrectly, so thank you so much and I will correct this immediately before it goes out to the multitude, so really appreciate your great review and rating despite this error. had a bit of fun and yes he is my pride and joy . but the real one is magnificant and Loved seeing it also. a big Cheers to you
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"Ans" in next to last line should be "And".
In notes "travelling' would read better as "travel".
"we" should be capitalized.
"everywhere" should have a comma after "everywhere".
"on" should be "one".
"houses" should have a comma after it.
"broke it" should have a period after "it".
"So" should be capitalized.
"bit" should be "but".
"thinkI' should be "think I'.
"drwa" should be "draw".
"poem" should have a period after it.
Well written tribute to this statue you cherish. Typical Mum stuff to have one special thing that they consider theirs that everyone else knows to leave alone OR ELSE! Should, with these edits corrected, by a good contest entry.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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"Ans" in next to last line should be "And".
In notes "travelling' would read better as "travel".
"we" should be capitalized.
"everywhere" should have a comma after "everywhere".
"on" should be "one".
"houses" should have a comma after it.
"broke it" should have a period after "it".
"So" should be capitalized.
"bit" should be "but".
"thinkI' should be "think I'.
"drwa" should be "draw".
"poem" should have a period after it.
Well written tribute to this statue you cherish. Typical Mum stuff to have one special thing that they consider theirs that everyone else knows to leave alone OR ELSE! Should, with these edits corrected, by a good contest entry.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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thank you so much Brett for your review and suggestions I have used them all and now it reads better I hope lol. appreciate you eagle eye and comments With Cheers