Comment from elizvinod

Excellent

Truly, we are finding out new technologies and GPS systems now but these geese have been doing it every year. We can learn beautiful and informative things by closely watching the nature. Very Good Poem. Keep It Up.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014

Thanks for this insightful and understanding review. I appreciate all you said and the generous rating. :-) Carolyn

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

I like that these natural perfections give us a handle to link creation to God's perfect design. You've done thsi with a beautiful image, a well known rhythm from nature, and a lovely 5-7-5 styled poem. The parise og God in teh satori line seems pretty perfect to me.
Good luck with this.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014

Thanks so much for the encouraging comments, so glad you liked the poem. God is awesome... :-) Carolyn

Comment from linsbm

Excellent

Great Satori: God's perfect System. Amazing photo perfect for your grand message. The first and second lines in consistency with the conclusion of this beautiful poem. An excellent entry to the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2014

Thank you linsbm for your most encouraging comments. I am so glad you enjoyed Across the night sky. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

I remember sitting in the evening and counting the time I would hear the geese and ducks fly overhead to their nightly haunt. Now it is so early as winter approaches. Lovely picture and well chosen words to convey your message. Good luck in the contest. Faye

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2014

Thanks Faye as usual for your wonderful review and best wishes.
:-) Carolyn

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

A lovely 5-7-5 for this contest. Romantic images in lines 1 and 2 are followed by that clever GPS line to punch home the admiration for the natural instincts of these and other creatures.

Good luck in the contest.

Steve

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014

Thanks Steve for this wonderful review. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This is a very true and straight to the point poem that the author has created with this piece of work. All of God's creations are wonderful and nature can be absolutely amazing.

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014

Thank you so much Tom for this wonderful review. :-) Carolyn

reply by Tomes Johnston on 09-Nov-2014

My pleasure

Comment from Cajungirl

Excellent

I am always in awe when it comes to the nature's animals. It is such a wonderful thing to see how they have the instinct to survive. How they come together for the greater-good and survival of their species. We, humans, can learn much for mother nature. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014

Thank you V for this fine review and thoughtful comments. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Benny Beeharry

Excellent

Hi Carolyn

This is a beautiful wring , although short, seems to bring forth the faith with which it was written. Gods perfect system....absolutely beautiful phrase. The geese almost never leave those systems. And i think we ought also as human keep this system.
Well done.
Benny beeharry

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014

We all look to our navigation systems in our cars. GPS.. I just thought of Gods perfect system, which beats any technology. I am happy you enjoyed this one Benny.
:-) Carolyn

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

HI Carolyn, this is my favorite bird...I could watch them all day...it is amazing the way the fly...and take turns with the lead geese...very well written...and I love the picture...Luff Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014

Thanks dear sweet lady, so glad you enjoyed this one. Hope you are having a great weekend. Love, Carolyn

reply by l.raven on 08-Nov-2014

you Too...you are so welcome...Carolyn...luff

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

I liked your notes about the GPS system and wish you could work that as the last line, but God's GPS system has one too many syllables. Good use of consonance with across and geese. rhyme with fly and sky, alliteration with formation fly.

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014

Had I not decided to enter this contest and shorten another poem I had going, those words would have been there. Great insight Shari. Thank you so much. :-) Carolyn