Free Verse Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Paper Tigers"A collection of free verse poems
33 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
The struggle between parents and their children who are struggling to become who they are is depicted well in your poem. She is free verse, you are sonnet. Both are beautiful in their own way. Interesting chose of verse to get your message across.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2014
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The struggle between parents and their children who are struggling to become who they are is depicted well in your poem. She is free verse, you are sonnet. Both are beautiful in their own way. Interesting chose of verse to get your message across.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2014
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Judging by some of the responses to this poem, it is seldom an easy rite of passage. Many thanks for reviewing!
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So I have heard and sometime observed.
Comment from Treischel
An intriguing treatment of a poetic generation gap juxtaposed between formal format and free verse. Very touching and real in its context. Nicely cloaked in metaphor and imagery.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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An intriguing treatment of a poetic generation gap juxtaposed between formal format and free verse. Very touching and real in its context. Nicely cloaked in metaphor and imagery.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Tom, for dropping by and for your kind review.
Comment from Glasstruth
We all fear some kind of paper tiger. Maybe it's our parents, conformity of society, and so on. Yet, we must learn to fly on our own. Love the ending:
"In free, unrhymed verse
Not the straitjacket of the formal sonnet
So much preferred by her parent."
Thought provoking and well written. Les
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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We all fear some kind of paper tiger. Maybe it's our parents, conformity of society, and so on. Yet, we must learn to fly on our own. Love the ending:
"In free, unrhymed verse
Not the straitjacket of the formal sonnet
So much preferred by her parent."
Thought provoking and well written. Les
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Les, for dropping by and for your kind review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Tony, this is simply amazingly beautiful, and such insightful musing - not a lot of parents are capable of such deep and profound understanding of their relationships with their children. What a free verse - masterful in every way! I wish I had a six for it!!!
OUTSTANDING!!! ****************!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Tony, this is simply amazingly beautiful, and such insightful musing - not a lot of parents are capable of such deep and profound understanding of their relationships with their children. What a free verse - masterful in every way! I wish I had a six for it!!!
OUTSTANDING!!! ****************!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Dawn, for dropping by and for your kind review and virtual six!
Comment from ravenblack
My daughter has finally graduated from Bieber and his ilk to Cobain (Nirvana). I actually saw them before they hit it big, a ten dollar show at the Metro for their first album. Anyway, a devotee of the sonnet, but really, you are enough of the cool dad to switch it up to free verse now and then. And of course, all paper tigers exchanged were burning bright in the forest of the night. She must write her own life and though enticing flames burn- were you making a Blake reference?- we must let them go their own way. At least your daughter did not dye her hair fire engine red (yep. 14 and she is already trying to be a tiger).
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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My daughter has finally graduated from Bieber and his ilk to Cobain (Nirvana). I actually saw them before they hit it big, a ten dollar show at the Metro for their first album. Anyway, a devotee of the sonnet, but really, you are enough of the cool dad to switch it up to free verse now and then. And of course, all paper tigers exchanged were burning bright in the forest of the night. She must write her own life and though enticing flames burn- were you making a Blake reference?- we must let them go their own way. At least your daughter did not dye her hair fire engine red (yep. 14 and she is already trying to be a tiger).
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Ravenblack, for dropping by and for your kind review. I wasn't thinking of Blake at the time! An interesting connection.
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"Tiger tiger burning bright/in the forests of the night..."
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Tony,
Having raised a daughter, this piece strikes home. It's so hard to watch them make mistakes and go through the tram of puberty, but soon they blossom into young women, and return the love you felt so often was ignored. Great job describing the ill effects of raising a daughter... loved your reference to the masks we wear. Best wishes, and good luck, Bill
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Hello Tony,
Having raised a daughter, this piece strikes home. It's so hard to watch them make mistakes and go through the tram of puberty, but soon they blossom into young women, and return the love you felt so often was ignored. Great job describing the ill effects of raising a daughter... loved your reference to the masks we wear. Best wishes, and good luck, Bill
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Bill, for dropping by and for your empathetic review.
Comment from c_lucas
Young people are often thwarted by each other parents. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Young people are often thwarted by each other parents. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Charlie, for dropping by and for your kind review.
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You're welcome, Tony. Charlie
Comment from Tonulak
The phrase "paper tiger" is best remembered as what Mao refered to the USA as. A really lovely poem with great insight for the parent and the child. Stunningwrite--Ted
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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The phrase "paper tiger" is best remembered as what Mao refered to the USA as. A really lovely poem with great insight for the parent and the child. Stunningwrite--Ted
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Ted, for dropping by and for your kind review.
Comment from Domino 2
Excellent reminiscing free verse, Tony, of wilder times in younger days. At least you had some (as I did), though many miss the boat and grow old before their time.
Top metaphors.
With respect, I think this may benefit from a few line spaces for easier reading, and to allow the reader to pause and ponder more. Maybe also consider all lower case, no punctuation (unless proper nouns) and short sharp lines.
No wish to offend, and that's just my humble opinion.
Excellent and very enjoyable write.
Best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Excellent reminiscing free verse, Tony, of wilder times in younger days. At least you had some (as I did), though many miss the boat and grow old before their time.
Top metaphors.
With respect, I think this may benefit from a few line spaces for easier reading, and to allow the reader to pause and ponder more. Maybe also consider all lower case, no punctuation (unless proper nouns) and short sharp lines.
No wish to offend, and that's just my humble opinion.
Excellent and very enjoyable write.
Best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Ray, for dropping by and for your kind review.
Comment from LIJ Red
The language is straightforward, the form seems to be free
verse, and the message a familiar one stated clearly. I see no major errors in grammar or spelling. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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The language is straightforward, the form seems to be free
verse, and the message a familiar one stated clearly. I see no major errors in grammar or spelling. Excellent work.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks, LIJ Red, for dropping by and for your kind review.