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Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this poem contains several nuances of the tradition, meaning, and purpose for the holy holiday that we have become undeserving benefactors. Emmanuel-God with us. This is a fresh and meaningful way to say it. Nice. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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Mikey, this poem contains several nuances of the tradition, meaning, and purpose for the holy holiday that we have become undeserving benefactors. Emmanuel-God with us. This is a fresh and meaningful way to say it. Nice. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 27-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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That is great to hear. I was hoping it would be taken just like you describe. Big smile, mikey
Comment from Merriweather
Had I six stars I would visit them upon you, as your Christmas poem is so deserving. I enjoyed reminiscing about Christmases past in memory, through your warm, inviting images. I especially liked your accompanying picture as it portrayed a time where Christmas was not an abundance of toys, electronics, and confused values. I love the reference to children pretending sleep and the floorboards creaking. The "s" alliteration makes one feel the silence creeping in the room where all is in readiness. In your poem, you describe the traditional Christmas we all love - bright lights, ribbons, wrapped packages. I think it very skillful of you to bring the reader back to the present, to your old green jacket full of wear..... You end your poem with a contentment that is rare in our modern day. You languish in the house bright with sounds of cheer, where hearts are near and dear. Your ending celebrates the true meaning of Christmas, the birth of Christ. Your shouts of Christmas, Christmas are shouts of joy that the special day of celebration has arrived, and you are sharing it with your loved ones. Well done. Your poem gave me such enjoyment.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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Had I six stars I would visit them upon you, as your Christmas poem is so deserving. I enjoyed reminiscing about Christmases past in memory, through your warm, inviting images. I especially liked your accompanying picture as it portrayed a time where Christmas was not an abundance of toys, electronics, and confused values. I love the reference to children pretending sleep and the floorboards creaking. The "s" alliteration makes one feel the silence creeping in the room where all is in readiness. In your poem, you describe the traditional Christmas we all love - bright lights, ribbons, wrapped packages. I think it very skillful of you to bring the reader back to the present, to your old green jacket full of wear..... You end your poem with a contentment that is rare in our modern day. You languish in the house bright with sounds of cheer, where hearts are near and dear. Your ending celebrates the true meaning of Christmas, the birth of Christ. Your shouts of Christmas, Christmas are shouts of joy that the special day of celebration has arrived, and you are sharing it with your loved ones. Well done. Your poem gave me such enjoyment.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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Wow. What a wonderful detailed review. You are so very in tune with every little thing that went through my mind as I worked on this. You make all the work seem so worthwhile. I couldn't be more happy. Thank you so very much. I am pleased that you enjoyed it! smiles, mikey
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good complimentary photo. Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with light/night. Good rhythm. Good flow. Good consistency with the eight syllable count in each line. Good thought provoking message that holds my attention from start to finish.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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Good complimentary photo. Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with light/night. Good rhythm. Good flow. Good consistency with the eight syllable count in each line. Good thought provoking message that holds my attention from start to finish.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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I am delighted with the compliments and that you enjoyed my piece. Thank you, mikey
Comment from Sasha
This is truly lovely. I love the message and they rhyme is spot on. Very nice work with this one. I would love to hear this with music. One of these days you are going to have to let us hear you sing one of your songs.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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This is truly lovely. I love the message and they rhyme is spot on. Very nice work with this one. I would love to hear this with music. One of these days you are going to have to let us hear you sing one of your songs.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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Hmm. I downloaded some music into my computer but, it isn't very good. Maybe I will figure out how to add it to something. Glad you liked this. If the church sings it I will try and record it. mikey
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Please do.
Comment from c_lucas
House full of cheer, taking time to praise the Christ Child. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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House full of cheer, taking time to praise the Christ Child. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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Happy that you enjoyed this, mikey
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You're welcome, Mikey. Charlie
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A lovely poem in five good stanzas in rhyming couplets. The third line of your second stanza only has seven syllables but the rest has the eight throughout - easy to remedy (stick 'that' after eyes perhaps?) The rest of your poem is lovely especially your penultimate stanza. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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A lovely poem in five good stanzas in rhyming couplets. The third line of your second stanza only has seven syllables but the rest has the eight throughout - easy to remedy (stick 'that' after eyes perhaps?) The rest of your poem is lovely especially your penultimate stanza. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 27-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2013
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I had to scold my fingers. Ha! Glad you caught that. I fixed it and the line is much better now. Thank you. So pleased that you enjoyed this. Very encouraging and excellent review. smiles, mikey
Comment from L.A.Matthies
That is a lovely Christmas song, it speaks of the joys surrounding us during the season and is beautifully uplifting! Nice job!
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That is a lovely Christmas song, it speaks of the joys surrounding us during the season and is beautifully uplifting! Nice job!
Comment Written 27-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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Thank you, mikey
Comment from Deniz22
Very nicely done, brother. You captured both the human and Divine side of Christmas in a most charming way. A sweet union for sure...
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Very nicely done, brother. You captured both the human and Divine side of Christmas in a most charming way. A sweet union for sure...
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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Glad you liked this. My wife said "Why don't you write something good like a Christmas carol". hahaha. Is that how a muse is supposed to inspire? mikey
Comment from pipersfancy
Aww! You've given us all a Christmas gift! I enjoyed this - straight forward, positive message, in celebration of what Christmas is supposed to mean!
Lovely! Thanks, Mikey!
PF
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Aww! You've given us all a Christmas gift! I enjoyed this - straight forward, positive message, in celebration of what Christmas is supposed to mean!
Lovely! Thanks, Mikey!
PF
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hey Michael, this is a great commentary on the important things in life. It had a nice, flowing rhythm which does read like a song. Hugs, Lou
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Hey Michael, this is a great commentary on the important things in life. It had a nice, flowing rhythm which does read like a song. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013