Comment from Allezw2

Excellent

Lady Gayle,

Ah so, the light begin to glimmer. Another item to put into his observations about the near proximity.

Nice to have a coolly analytical paranoid evaluating menaces not previously considered.

Getting a little convoluted here.

Nicely done,

Fantasist

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2010

Twisty turny and just enough to pique the curiosity. We'll pick up some steam here pretty quick. Just so much info I have to get out before we can really go! Thanks for hanging in there,

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Rudy is getting settled in. Cathy is beginning to feel comfortable with him. This is a very nice set up chapter for the coming action.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010

Hey Charlie,

I've missed you! Glad to see you back in action!

I really appreciate the fine review! Thanks,

Hugs,
Gayle

reply by c_lucas on 07-Jan-2010

You're welcome, Gayle. Charlie

Comment from jayesnb

Excellent

You have such an easy way with dialogue it amazes me...I tend to run from dialogue... This is another great chapter...I feel as though I'm hanging onto to every word attempting to figure out where your story is going to head..

The last two paragraphs were a great way to leave the reader wanting more...I also like the way you put that anyone could see into the penthouse who was above..It could mean nothing or it could mean everything but it definitely sparked my interest even more to see which direction you take this...

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010

Oh, I'm grinning. Yes, I think of myself as the dialogue queen, although I love narrative, too. But the dialogue. Man, you should here me during the soaps! Whew, I sure could do better!

Ah, this writing gig is a ball, huh?

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from Connie P

Excellent

I am enjoying this story so much. I love your descriptive but not overdone writing style. This chapter reminds me of a creepy thing I had happen recently. I'll be looking forward to the next chapter.
Connie

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010

Hi Connie, something creepy happened, huh? What?

Thanks so much for the grand review and your comments.

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from Readywriter52

Excellent

Rudy is trying to get information from Cathy. He sounds very professional and calm. He explores the penthouse and it terrace. He realizes that people in the upper floors of the other high rises could see them.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010

Hi Ready,

Good to see you again. I'm glad you liked this chapter. We'll chat again soon,

Gayle

Comment from joelh605

Exceptional

Dang. If you messed up, it got by me - the only service I can render is hand you one of those six-pointed thingies.

Seamless, - - and so tantalizing, laying out the clues for the reader to just know that it's the dude whose place overlooks Cathy's.

I'm sort of hoping to find that's all another red herring - it's way too early to know who's Bad.

Joel

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010

LOL! I need to introduce you to Frank ... Korton, if you don't already know each other. You guys are solving my mysteries left and right and you both have such great ideas. We're going to drop a gear here soon and they we'll be flying!

Thanks a bunch<~>

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Another good post. I wish you would mess up so I would have something to write about. You do so well, there's only so many ways you can say your characters are good, your plot is intersting. The dialogue moves the plot along at a nice pace and helps define your characters.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010

Hi Barbara,

Thank you so much for the great review and comments. You are so encouraging and I appreciate it!

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from Dave M

Excellent

Gayle,

I've also had to break chapters to make them bite size enough for Fanstory. Don't mind at all that you repeated three short paragraphs. It's a good idea.

Rudy sounds like a professional, probably learned a lot of detective work from his friends.

I couldn't find anything here to criticize.

Dave

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010

Hey Dave,

Yeah, after all these years with Jim, he's got the routine, although he doesn't participate much. Actually, he's been around from the get-go, but always on the very edges of the story. It's nice to let him out, and I'm really liking him. Funny, huh?

Thanks for the R&R!

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

This is a great chapter. The reader is getting to know both characters better and getting answers to questions. Great writing and marvelous descriptions. Having the two separate cases, Suzi and the strange phone calls really keeps the reader on edge. I doesn't seem that they are connected, but yet I'm not quite ready to write that in stone. Looking forward to reading the next chapter.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2010

Hi Sasha,

Once we get all the players out, we'll be moving right along!

So glad you're enjoying this one! Stay tuned,

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from rwilliam

Excellent

Hi Gayle, I enjoyed this chapter. It was good. It had great rhythm and flow. You have me very interested in the story line and guessing as to who and why this person is bothering Cathy.

Didn't see anything that needed to be mentioned. Great work.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2010

Hi Rebecca,

We now have all the players on the canvass. Won't be long before the action really starts.

Thanks for the great review!

Gayle