Renewal
Free Verse; As the New Year dawns. . .116 total reviews
Comment from BeMused
Well done Diane - the imagery is wonderful, the message admirable, and the conclusion funny. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece, and look forward to more of your work.
Always,
BeMused
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Well done Diane - the imagery is wonderful, the message admirable, and the conclusion funny. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece, and look forward to more of your work.
Always,
BeMused
Comment Written 14-Jan-2008
Comment from TheFex
I see why this is a recognized poem. Excellent phrasing, pace, and iteration. Beautiful sentiment and meaning, with relevance to boot.
utterly enjoyable and I, unfortunately, have nothing to add in the way of criticism.
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I see why this is a recognized poem. Excellent phrasing, pace, and iteration. Beautiful sentiment and meaning, with relevance to boot.
utterly enjoyable and I, unfortunately, have nothing to add in the way of criticism.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2008
Comment from Ryn Martin
This was a very enjoyable poem. Great job in how you structured/styled it. I didn't see anything wrong with your spelling or grammar, or anything else. Good luck, and godspeed.
~Ryn
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This was a very enjoyable poem. Great job in how you structured/styled it. I didn't see anything wrong with your spelling or grammar, or anything else. Good luck, and godspeed.
~Ryn
Comment Written 10-Jan-2008
Comment from babylonia
and i hope the same for all of us. it is easy to read and follow. no spag do i see but lots of good imagery. we can only do better. wishing you the happiest year ever. keep up the good work~
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and i hope the same for all of us. it is easy to read and follow. no spag do i see but lots of good imagery. we can only do better. wishing you the happiest year ever. keep up the good work~
Comment Written 10-Jan-2008
Comment from larwana
Wonderful poem for the new year. It exquisitely expresses what too many of us go through. I loved the repetition of the phrase "Words, Paths, Hopes". What a great summation of what the new year is, and how we taint it with our pasts.
Great rhythm. The imagery is perfect. Thanks for posting this wonderful work.
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Wonderful poem for the new year. It exquisitely expresses what too many of us go through. I loved the repetition of the phrase "Words, Paths, Hopes". What a great summation of what the new year is, and how we taint it with our pasts.
Great rhythm. The imagery is perfect. Thanks for posting this wonderful work.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2008
Comment from GUNNER
KT,
Thank you for sharing this magnificent piece of work. A lot of emotion, and very visual....I can relate to this very well. It was an easy read and flowed very nice. GUNNER
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KT,
Thank you for sharing this magnificent piece of work. A lot of emotion, and very visual....I can relate to this very well. It was an easy read and flowed very nice. GUNNER
Comment Written 10-Jan-2008
Comment from Ohioan
Wow, that is excellent. I love the sparse lines. It is so common in us to reject hope when we remember the mistakes of the past, and you make a powerful reminder that there is no need to fear what has passed, because we are masters of our new actions.
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Wow, that is excellent. I love the sparse lines. It is so common in us to reject hope when we remember the mistakes of the past, and you make a powerful reminder that there is no need to fear what has passed, because we are masters of our new actions.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2008
Comment from shy1250
I so wish I could give this 7 stars... Fave line: "The past surreptitiously makes its presence known" then those three t"s. I loved the form you used in this poem, with the three descriptive words placed throughout, each owning its own line. The artwork used is perfect, although I can't honestly figure out why. Excellent vocabulary use: so rare to read a work where each word sparkles, its own tiny crystal gleaming, the perfect word for the perfect place. Kudos and happy new year back atcha! shy
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I so wish I could give this 7 stars... Fave line: "The past surreptitiously makes its presence known" then those three t"s. I loved the form you used in this poem, with the three descriptive words placed throughout, each owning its own line. The artwork used is perfect, although I can't honestly figure out why. Excellent vocabulary use: so rare to read a work where each word sparkles, its own tiny crystal gleaming, the perfect word for the perfect place. Kudos and happy new year back atcha! shy
Comment Written 10-Jan-2008
Comment from Haruka
This poem is absolutely amazing!!! =D You did such a wonderful job and the word choices are picked well. I can relate to this poem as I'm sure many others can too. Keep writing! =D
Haruka
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This poem is absolutely amazing!!! =D You did such a wonderful job and the word choices are picked well. I can relate to this poem as I'm sure many others can too. Keep writing! =D
Haruka
Comment Written 10-Jan-2008
Comment from DawningOne
Happy New Year, Diane!
I hope the New Year has found you
healthy and happy. I liked this well
written piece of poetry. I found no SPAG issues.
Please let me know, did you get your books from Ron yet?
God bless you!
Much love,
Dawn
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Happy New Year, Diane!
I hope the New Year has found you
healthy and happy. I liked this well
written piece of poetry. I found no SPAG issues.
Please let me know, did you get your books from Ron yet?
God bless you!
Much love,
Dawn
Comment Written 10-Jan-2008