A Serendipitous Meeting
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Comment from forestport12
Love your quote on the top. I read that to my wife just now. "Respect the man..." I adopted her first child... I like how you developt the story about the stern father and her concerns. You deepen the plot as the character and minor ones are included. Again, the dialogue brings you to the moment.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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Love your quote on the top. I read that to my wife just now. "Respect the man..." I adopted her first child... I like how you developt the story about the stern father and her concerns. You deepen the plot as the character and minor ones are included. Again, the dialogue brings you to the moment.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouragement.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi barbara,
another good and soli continuation here. nice interchanges in most of the dialogue.
"Sure." He grinned at Rebeka. "I'll be right back. - missing speech marks at the end here.
I might need to get another one, but I can't do anything until I can get to town. There's the money issue too. Right now, I'm practically broke. - this stuck with me. How will she get a n car if she is practically broke. If it's hiring one, I'd state that. (there's no mention about the previous being a hire one)
"Hi, Ms. Miller. Uncle Ty - would the child really use Ms here rather than Miss?
"Uncle Ty, she really pretty, don't you think?"- should this be she's. I would think if the child is well enough informed to use Ms, she'd use she's. But probably just a typo.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2025
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Hi barbara,
another good and soli continuation here. nice interchanges in most of the dialogue.
"Sure." He grinned at Rebeka. "I'll be right back. - missing speech marks at the end here.
I might need to get another one, but I can't do anything until I can get to town. There's the money issue too. Right now, I'm practically broke. - this stuck with me. How will she get a n car if she is practically broke. If it's hiring one, I'd state that. (there's no mention about the previous being a hire one)
"Hi, Ms. Miller. Uncle Ty - would the child really use Ms here rather than Miss?
"Uncle Ty, she really pretty, don't you think?"- should this be she's. I would think if the child is well enough informed to use Ms, she'd use she's. But probably just a typo.
All the best
G
Comment Written 27-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2025
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Again, thank you for taking time to read this post. I appreciate the help and have made all the corrections.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Barbara, I hope you're doing well. I enjoyed your new chapter. The plot is moving along nicely. I like amber, she is a fun character. I somehow knew the doctor was telling the truth. I wonder what will happen with Tyler and Rebeka.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2025
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Hello, Barbara, I hope you're doing well. I enjoyed your new chapter. The plot is moving along nicely. I like amber, she is a fun character. I somehow knew the doctor was telling the truth. I wonder what will happen with Tyler and Rebeka.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the kind review. Amber is a fun person. Maybe we'll find a partner for her too. LOL
Comment from Mistydawn
I really enjoyed this chapter. The characters seemed real, relatable, and your plot intriguing. Amber fun yet mischievous. The chapter leaves you wondering if something might happen between Tyler and Rebeka. I look forward to reading the next chapter.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2025
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I really enjoyed this chapter. The characters seemed real, relatable, and your plot intriguing. Amber fun yet mischievous. The chapter leaves you wondering if something might happen between Tyler and Rebeka. I look forward to reading the next chapter.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the kind review. Amber is a fun person. Maybe we'll find a partner for her too. LOL
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I didn't find any problems and enjoy the way the story is going. It was good for her to see the little girl and the doctor's Aunt Beth this early so she was sure the doctor was telling the truth.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2025
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I didn't find any problems and enjoy the way the story is going. It was good for her to see the little girl and the doctor's Aunt Beth this early so she was sure the doctor was telling the truth.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from DeboraDyess
This was great! I look forward to reading more and am going back to read the previous posts. Good job!
I couldn't find anything to fix, so that's all!
Blessings and hugs,
Deb
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2025
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This was great! I look forward to reading more and am going back to read the previous posts. Good job!
I couldn't find anything to fix, so that's all!
Blessings and hugs,
Deb
Comment Written 18-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Arabellesmom
Hi I'm new so just checking it others work and what not but I enjoy your writing it made me want to read the whole thing and I enjoyed it. Good luck great writer
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2025
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Hi I'm new so just checking it others work and what not but I enjoy your writing it made me want to read the whole thing and I enjoyed it. Good luck great writer
Comment Written 18-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2025
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Welcome!!! I appreciate you stopping by and leaving this kind review. I hope you drop by again.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent part of the chapter. You have set the stage for your book. I look forward to the next chapter. There is one small edit. "...her brown hair was penned (pinned) up..." Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2025
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This is another excellent part of the chapter. You have set the stage for your book. I look forward to the next chapter. There is one small edit. "...her brown hair was penned (pinned) up..." Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2025
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DAH, thank you for the catch. I appreciate the help. I can't believe I did that.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
This was another beautiful chapter and I laughed reading this explanation;"She's a Nanny goat, who for some reason keeps getting pregnant. I can't figure out how she does."
Rebeka's eyebrows rose. "You're a doctor and don't know how it happens. I'm pretty sure goats get pregnant the same way humans do."
"You're right." Tyler chuckled. "I guess I'd better explain. We don't own a Billy and the closest one is a few miles down the road. She doesn't go missing, so I can't figure out how they're getting together."" Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2025
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This was another beautiful chapter and I laughed reading this explanation;"She's a Nanny goat, who for some reason keeps getting pregnant. I can't figure out how she does."
Rebeka's eyebrows rose. "You're a doctor and don't know how it happens. I'm pretty sure goats get pregnant the same way humans do."
"You're right." Tyler chuckled. "I guess I'd better explain. We don't own a Billy and the closest one is a few miles down the road. She doesn't go missing, so I can't figure out how they're getting together."" Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
I know that song - in that prayer that you included!
And how refreshing to have such an old fashioned young lady and yet she's writing and earning an income which isn't old fashioned at all. We have an Orthodox Jewish friend and she always wears skirts per her family's tradition.
Hope they all get to meet Rebeka!
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2025
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I know that song - in that prayer that you included!
And how refreshing to have such an old fashioned young lady and yet she's writing and earning an income which isn't old fashioned at all. We have an Orthodox Jewish friend and she always wears skirts per her family's tradition.
Hope they all get to meet Rebeka!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2025
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They will get to meet her. Thank you for the kind review.
