I Glimpse the Stars
Minute Poem22 total reviews
Comment from DonandVicki
I can imagine in prison that the inmates must use their imagination to form their own reality. No windows or the ability to smell the fresh air, "Oh the horror."
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I can imagine in prison that the inmates must use their imagination to form their own reality. No windows or the ability to smell the fresh air, "Oh the horror."
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
Comment from June Sargent
I agree. It's not really a minute poem without the meter and rhyme scheme. And it's not a real loop poem without the rhyme scheme. But some don't like rules. Your minute poem is true to form and brings to mind Van Gogh painting his Starry Night from the barred window of his room in the mental hospital where he was being treated for depression.
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I agree. It's not really a minute poem without the meter and rhyme scheme. And it's not a real loop poem without the rhyme scheme. But some don't like rules. Your minute poem is true to form and brings to mind Van Gogh painting his Starry Night from the barred window of his room in the mental hospital where he was being treated for depression.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Dear Steve, I'm so glad you stuck to the meter and rhyme of this delightful verse form! The imagery of the prison cell is such an apt and poignant one for many as they navigate their lives through misery, depression or illness. A powerful and moving write! Well done and good luck! Debbie
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Dear Steve, I'm so glad you stuck to the meter and rhyme of this delightful verse form! The imagery of the prison cell is such an apt and poignant one for many as they navigate their lives through misery, depression or illness. A powerful and moving write! Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
Comment from Mintybee
I love this minute poem. I like the right-hand alignment. Your word choices are strong, clear, and gripping. The poem moves from gloomy to hopeful in a sensible, well-paced way.
Mintybee
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I love this minute poem. I like the right-hand alignment. Your word choices are strong, clear, and gripping. The poem moves from gloomy to hopeful in a sensible, well-paced way.
Mintybee
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Many often feel they are trapped in a prison and had no way out. They've lost hope. I enjoyed reading this emotional entry. Good luck with the contes.
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Many often feel they are trapped in a prison and had no way out. They've lost hope. I enjoyed reading this emotional entry. Good luck with the contes.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, so much for MY entry to this contest... If I had the vote, I would choose this beautiful minute poem over my own. I like the notes, too -- an excellent reminder! Best of luck!
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Wow, so much for MY entry to this contest... If I had the vote, I would choose this beautiful minute poem over my own. I like the notes, too -- an excellent reminder! Best of luck!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed the sentiment here Steve and the rhymes and metre. For me Minute poems need the metre to give it melody and I enjoyed your skilful poem, love Dolly x x x
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I enjoyed the sentiment here Steve and the rhymes and metre. For me Minute poems need the metre to give it melody and I enjoyed your skilful poem, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Minute Poetry Contest. Your poem offers an understanding that even when we are facing physical or even mental confinement we can see our way to something better and view the beauty that lies beyond the bars that imprison us.
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An excellent entry for the Minute Poetry Contest. Your poem offers an understanding that even when we are facing physical or even mental confinement we can see our way to something better and view the beauty that lies beyond the bars that imprison us.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is a beautiful minute poem. In true form, with meter and rhymes, it sets forth the prisoner from chains to freedom looking at the stars. I love the freedom you give to them since they are caged in they take the prison walls and break them with their bare hands with freedom.
Thanks for showing how it is done. I wish you well with this contest it is a sure winner as far as I can tell.
Jesse
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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This is a beautiful minute poem. In true form, with meter and rhymes, it sets forth the prisoner from chains to freedom looking at the stars. I love the freedom you give to them since they are caged in they take the prison walls and break them with their bare hands with freedom.
Thanks for showing how it is done. I wish you well with this contest it is a sure winner as far as I can tell.
Jesse
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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Thanks, Jesse.
Always remember with my poems there is generally something hiding beneath the surface. Here it is that you can look at this as not being about a literal prison, but instead as the kind of imprisonment that people inflict on themselves.
Steve
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Yes, the deeper meaning is we are caged within ourselves. Thanks for pointing that out.
Jesse
Comment from teafor2
Kiwisteveh, your formatting serves (IMHO) to lead reader) to the meat of
each stanza...Of course, the title, selected picture, theme and tone are all
complimentary via the verbiage...This offering is a beautiful marriage of
poetical harmony. Good luck with this excellent entry for said contest. teafor2
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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Kiwisteveh, your formatting serves (IMHO) to lead reader) to the meat of
each stanza...Of course, the title, selected picture, theme and tone are all
complimentary via the verbiage...This offering is a beautiful marriage of
poetical harmony. Good luck with this excellent entry for said contest. teafor2
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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Thank you. Yes, I did spend a little time tinkering with the formatting. Glad it worked for you in combination with the words, of course.
Steve
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Steve, you are welcome. teafor2
