Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "cut off"for various occasions
4 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Tiktok, hmm, I've never looked at it but seems to be causing an uproar. I enjoyed reding this entry and wish you luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2025
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Tiktok, hmm, I've never looked at it but seems to be causing an uproar. I enjoyed reding this entry and wish you luck with the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2025
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Thanks very much Barabara. It's the hot new thing that young people use. I kind of hope it gets killed off and replaced with something better, though we don't want to be viewed by the world as a place of censorship.
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I'm only now catching up on all this TikTok news and, as with anything Trump or Musk are involved in, I'm afraid I totally mistrust their agenda which usually suits their pocket, rather than the country's. You've crafted an excellent sonnet here, Simian, in which the fate of TikTok and national security seems to hang in the balance of Trump's "edict." My favourite stanza is the satirical third one. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2025
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I'm only now catching up on all this TikTok news and, as with anything Trump or Musk are involved in, I'm afraid I totally mistrust their agenda which usually suits their pocket, rather than the country's. You've crafted an excellent sonnet here, Simian, in which the fate of TikTok and national security seems to hang in the balance of Trump's "edict." My favourite stanza is the satirical third one. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2025
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Thank you Debbie. Tik Tok is a competitor to X, so I don't think Musk benefits from it NOT being banned, but I don't know all the details! Funny because it's Trump who originally was going to ban Tiktok. 🦍
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I love how you wrote "the headsman's falling blade" and "a blackened swan" to build tension and express the looming uncertainty. We will see what Trump does. This doesn't feel american at all. Your writing is so interesting and thought provoking-this is excellent!
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2025
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I love how you wrote "the headsman's falling blade" and "a blackened swan" to build tension and express the looming uncertainty. We will see what Trump does. This doesn't feel american at all. Your writing is so interesting and thought provoking-this is excellent!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2025
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Thank you very much Michael! Your reviews are always concise but also always show thoughtful details. I appreciate that. 🦍
Comment from kiwisteveh
OK I spy with my little eye the extra internal rhymes which is presumably what you mean by a 'wreathed' sonnet. It certainly adds an extra sound effect to the piece and I appreciate the level of difficulty you have created for yourself. However, I have to say it has led you into several forced rhymes which in places muddles the meaning. For instance I grappled with this line:
has made a pawn each dream they dreamt to share
Absolutely topical theme and an interesting conundrum that the ban coincided almost with the inauguration. Biden took the easy route. Trump opens his pockets to the CEO of ByteDance and will no doubt find a way to restore the platform he once railed against now that cash is flowing his way. Start the count of the four years of high level corruption we are about to see.
I wrote my sonnet today too. I was going to start:
Why would you choose a felon and a thug...
but since political posts don't usually win contests I went with something more traditional.
Good luck - in the contest and in the country. We all await the edicts of the Trump.
Steve
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OK I spy with my little eye the extra internal rhymes which is presumably what you mean by a 'wreathed' sonnet. It certainly adds an extra sound effect to the piece and I appreciate the level of difficulty you have created for yourself. However, I have to say it has led you into several forced rhymes which in places muddles the meaning. For instance I grappled with this line:
has made a pawn each dream they dreamt to share
Absolutely topical theme and an interesting conundrum that the ban coincided almost with the inauguration. Biden took the easy route. Trump opens his pockets to the CEO of ByteDance and will no doubt find a way to restore the platform he once railed against now that cash is flowing his way. Start the count of the four years of high level corruption we are about to see.
I wrote my sonnet today too. I was going to start:
Why would you choose a felon and a thug...
but since political posts don't usually win contests I went with something more traditional.
Good luck - in the contest and in the country. We all await the edicts of the Trump.
Steve
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
