Embrace of Dusk.
The tranquil beauty of a sunset.5 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Delaney
This is a beautiful haiku! It captures a serene and contemplative moment, evoking the warmth of a sunset and its gentle impact on the heart.
Loved reading this! great writing well done!
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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This is a beautiful haiku! It captures a serene and contemplative moment, evoking the warmth of a sunset and its gentle impact on the heart.
Loved reading this! great writing well done!
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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What a heartwarming review! You've beautifully captured the essence of the haiku, appreciating the serene and contemplative moment it evokes. Your kind words highlight the warmth and gentle impact of the sunset depicted in the poem. It's always wonderful to see such heartfelt appreciation for the artistry of haikus.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The tranquility of the sunset always brings us peace as the day succumbs to a night of restful sleep, I enjoyed your fine words for the contest and congrats on your 50th post, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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The tranquility of the sunset always brings us peace as the day succumbs to a night of restful sleep, I enjoyed your fine words for the contest and congrats on your 50th post, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Thank you Dolly
Love
Peter
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Comment from Julie Abdel-Fattah
I think you achieved your objective of peaceful reflection! I love how the "fading light whispers" involving 2 senses in 3 words! However, I am having trouble discerning the relationship of the first line with the second; Are the golden hues embracing the observer? I feel this could easily roll right into the next line; the extra space I think is meant to set it apart...? In any case, lovely :)
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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I think you achieved your objective of peaceful reflection! I love how the "fading light whispers" involving 2 senses in 3 words! However, I am having trouble discerning the relationship of the first line with the second; Are the golden hues embracing the observer? I feel this could easily roll right into the next line; the extra space I think is meant to set it apart...? In any case, lovely :)
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Thank you for your thoughtful review! I'm glad the peaceful reflection came through and that the imagery of the "fading light whispers" resonated with you. Your feedback on the relationship between the first and second lines is valuable and offers a new perspective on how the poem can flow more seamlessly.
Embracing the observer is the intended meaning .
Best wishes and happy writing
Comment from Lana Marie
You did capture what you wrote in your author notes. AsI was reading your contest entry before I read your notes, I was trying to figure out how to put into words what your haiku meant to me. It's pretty much how you described it.
Beauty, tranquility, and peace
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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You did capture what you wrote in your author notes. AsI was reading your contest entry before I read your notes, I was trying to figure out how to put into words what your haiku meant to me. It's pretty much how you described it.
Beauty, tranquility, and peace
Comment Written 18-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Thank you for your thoughtful and constructive feedback. I'm glad that the haiku resonated with you and that my author notes helped clarify its meaning. It's always a great feeling to know that my work has made an impact.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-(3), Embrace of Dusk, has the (almost) proper formatting and has the colors embracing and lights whispering, but only fifteen syllables in play. If this were a haiku -- sure.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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This 5-7-(3), Embrace of Dusk, has the (almost) proper formatting and has the colors embracing and lights whispering, but only fifteen syllables in play. If this were a haiku -- sure.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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You are, of course, quite right Bill about the syllable count. Back to school for me. Thanks for letting me know before it goes further down the road.
Now corrected
