Comment from Marilyn Hamilton

Excellent

An excellent entry for the Share a Story in a poem contest. Oh man. Your story took me on a bit of a ride. lol I wasn't sure whether to be horrified or to laugh. but the ending verified that for me. It was definitely meant to make me laugh lol Good job. Fun read.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024

Thanks, Marilyn. This is one of the few humorous dental experiences.

Comment from Natureschild

Excellent

This poem is an engaging and humorous piece with vivid imagery and a clear narrative. The exaggerated scenarios evoke laughter and a touch of sympathy for the narrator.

Good luck, Terry

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024

Thanks, Terry. I have written similar poems about my dentist and my chiropractor. Luckily, they both have a good sense of humor.

Comment from Katiemae1977

Exceptional

This is a really, really great poem Paul. Your rhymes and meter are flawless and make for an easy read. Your storyline moves well and is compelling. You had me riveted until the end.
Best of luck in the contest and I hope you do well.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024

Thanks, Katiemae. Speaking of riveted, she had a rivet gun on her tray. Luckily, she didn't have to use it on me. I can't imagine what it is used for.

Comment from Colorado Owl

Excellent

You did an excellent job of resurrecting one of my worst nightmares! Your description makes me cringe and want to cancel my next dental appointment. (Thank you?)

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024

Thanks, Colorado. Didn't mean to make you cringe, but I cringed when writing this poem.

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

Hi Paul, I know it wasn't a fun experience...but
it made me smile just picturing your foot over
your head...but I'm so glad you survived the whole
ordeal...and you made it home safe...

I remember telling jokes to my dentist when I went...
we were always in competition to see who would tell
the funniest joke...

I love your poem my sweet friend...and I love your picture...
very well written...love Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024

Thanks, Linda. As you can see, this hygienist didn't have a sense of humor.

reply by l.raven on 02-Dec-2024

your so welcome Paul...LOL...love xxoo

Comment from forestport12

Exceptional

Mouth to ear," Yea, I love that one. I could see you doing this live at a comedy club. So much to identify with, but its those exaggerations, like putting the chair back as far as it would go and before that seeing her robed up with a bit of blood on her. But then again, they may not be dramatic license. And then the part where you are asked a question but are unable to answer. I can identify with that! love the clever rhymes. Not all put up big money deserve an exceptional. This earned it.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024

Thanks, Forest. I use to have a dentist who would always ask me all kinds 0of questions when he had his hands in my mouth.

Comment from Janet Foor

Exceptional

Dental experiences can be scary. Mine happened on a trip to Scotland. A tooth became abscessed so I was in miserable pain. Finding a dentist was not easy and then when we did, it was like going back in time to a more primitive place. Everything was cold white porcelain. But unlike your experience, no frightening bloodstains.
Great story in a poem Paul.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024

Thanks, Janet. Did you run into any of my relatives in Scotland?

Comment from Neonewman

Excellent

As soon as I noticed someone else's blood on her gown, I would have been out of there. Two years ago, I had to have all of my teeth removed. My body rejected the numbing agents, and I felt the whole experience. I'm done with the dentist forever.
God bless,
Steve

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024

Having all your teeth out is a tough way to avoid future dental appointments.

Comment from jake cosmos aller

Excellent

I can share your pain having had many bad dental experiences and having to wear dentures. Here's one I wrote on this theme

dental torture blues
Sitting in the dental chair
Undergoing dental surgery
While the dentist probes
And tortures me
With his instruments of pain

The Frank Zappa song plays over and over
The torture never stops
The torture never stops

And I think of the mad dentist
In Little House of Horrors
The Jack Nicolson character
Who screams Pain is good

As he assaults his patients
Doing root canals
Without anesthesia

And so, I endure the torture
Of the dentist
In the vain hope
I can save my teeth

Until the next time
I undergo dental torture
The song faces away
And I slowly recover

Then as I leave
I am confronted with the bill
And the song roars back to life

The torture never stops
the torture never stops
written after seeing the dentist

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024

That's a good one, Jake. I like country western music when I'm in the dentist chair.

Comment from shad blunt

Excellent

Spent a great amount of time in a chair so similar. The anxiety of not knowing what may come next. May the story told on how and why you are sitting before her today, before the tools reveal themselves. Taking a careful inventory and watch what we say when we are exposed for another to pounce on us like a cat. That we may get out alive, at least with all most everything that was inside our mouth.
Get some rest, sorry to share I enjoyed the poem that brought you same pain. Looking forward to reading more of work. Shadrach

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024

Thanks, Shad. I have had three different dental hygienists, and I have written a poem for each of them.