Summer Break
Free form contest entry14 total reviews
Comment from kiwisteveh
Hi, Drusilla. I hope you are doing as well as can be expected.
I really like this poem which captures a lot of the tensed up excitement and happiness of kids as their spring break draws near and then finally arrives. You have used the freedom of free verse well with some wonderfully imaginative imagery.
I am still doing some relieving teaching and we are just getting to pre-holiday fever in our schools right now with only a couple of weeks to go before the long summer break, so I empathise with this.
Best of luk in the contest. This should do well.
Steve
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Hi, Drusilla. I hope you are doing as well as can be expected.
I really like this poem which captures a lot of the tensed up excitement and happiness of kids as their spring break draws near and then finally arrives. You have used the freedom of free verse well with some wonderfully imaginative imagery.
I am still doing some relieving teaching and we are just getting to pre-holiday fever in our schools right now with only a couple of weeks to go before the long summer break, so I empathise with this.
Best of luk in the contest. This should do well.
Steve
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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I'm a retired teacher myself and pre- vacation fever is always quite fun.
Thank you so much for your lovely comments and stellar review!
Luv&stuff
Drusilla1
Comment from mermaids
Your words make me look forward to summer break and I haven't been in school for half a century. I like how you mention little piggies, cotton candy and stolen kisses. It makes your poem fun and whimsical.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Your words make me look forward to summer break and I haven't been in school for half a century. I like how you mention little piggies, cotton candy and stolen kisses. It makes your poem fun and whimsical.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Thanks so much for your lovely comments and review mermaids!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Katiemae,
This is a cute poem that you written about summer break. You have capture the essence of excited children wait for the summer bell. Oh, so long ago I remember that bell and the freedom of childhood summers.
Great job and good luck in your contest.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Katiemae,
This is a cute poem that you written about summer break. You have capture the essence of excited children wait for the summer bell. Oh, so long ago I remember that bell and the freedom of childhood summers.
Great job and good luck in your contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Thanks so very much for your lovely comments and review!
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You're welcome
Cecilia
Comment from GWHARGIS
I still get goosebumps when I think out those last days of school. No more alarm clocks, no more sitting still for hours, and no more teachers. I never enjoyed school. This poem summed it up nicely. Gretchen
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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I still get goosebumps when I think out those last days of school. No more alarm clocks, no more sitting still for hours, and no more teachers. I never enjoyed school. This poem summed it up nicely. Gretchen
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Thanks so very much Gretchen for your lovely comments and review!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment from Brenda Strauser
This is such a nice poem. It upbeat and positive. It is so descriptive and well written.A nice picture to go with the poem. Good luck in the contest. Great job.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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This is such a nice poem. It upbeat and positive. It is so descriptive and well written.A nice picture to go with the poem. Good luck in the contest. Great job.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Thanks so very much Brenda for your review and good luck wishes!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is such a perceptive picture here of that last day of school and the excitement bubbling up, ready to boil over that I'm tempted to think you may well have been a schoolteacher in a former life?. I love the colour and energy of your free form poem, all the verbs packed in together, reflecting frenetic engagement in a myriad of activities. My favourite line is the 5th but each one has something magical to say in this delightful post, taking me back in time. Well done, Katie, and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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This is such a perceptive picture here of that last day of school and the excitement bubbling up, ready to boil over that I'm tempted to think you may well have been a schoolteacher in a former life?. I love the colour and energy of your free form poem, all the verbs packed in together, reflecting frenetic engagement in a myriad of activities. My favourite line is the 5th but each one has something magical to say in this delightful post, taking me back in time. Well done, Katie, and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Yes. I'm a retired teacher in this life. So glad you enjoyed my free form poem Debbie. So glad it sparked memories for you.
Thanks for your lovely comments and review!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
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I hope I didn't offend by referring to a former life. I should have simply said 'in the past.' It sounded a bit creepy.
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It's ok
Comment from patcelaw
This is very nicely written and it flows very well when it is red. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I also wish you the best in the contest. May God bless you and may you have a good weekend. Patricia.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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This is very nicely written and it flows very well when it is red. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I also wish you the best in the contest. May God bless you and may you have a good weekend. Patricia.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Thank so very much Patricia for your review!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment from Shanbreen
This free-form poem gives vivid images of children anticipating the coming of summer break.
"Last day of school anticipation reels; tumbling out of control in far off space awaiting the final bell."
I feel the first stanza to be a bit of an abstraction with the rest of stanzas, although you try to weave the children's excitement --faces spattering and voices crisping in the early summer sun.
Wishing you the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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This free-form poem gives vivid images of children anticipating the coming of summer break.
"Last day of school anticipation reels; tumbling out of control in far off space awaiting the final bell."
I feel the first stanza to be a bit of an abstraction with the rest of stanzas, although you try to weave the children's excitement --faces spattering and voices crisping in the early summer sun.
Wishing you the best for the contest.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Thanks for your review Shanbreen. I agree with your comment about the 1st stanza. I'm not entirely happy with this poem which is why I put it out there. To get suggestions. Thanks again!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
What fantastic descriptions throughout this poem but most especially those first three lines were just great. I can remember days like that when my face felt like frying bacon. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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What fantastic descriptions throughout this poem but most especially those first three lines were just great. I can remember days like that when my face felt like frying bacon. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Thanks so very much Marilyn. I'm glad the poem brought back memories for you.
Comment from Rick Gardner
A nice, happy piece offering a the joy we all felt when school ended and summer break just started. The freedom, the expectation of excitement, anticipation of total fun. I remember those feelings. Empty your locker, tear up notes, run up and down the hallways. The teachers, the administration, left you alone, their job done, glad to say goodbye to the trouble makers. Hooray, a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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A nice, happy piece offering a the joy we all felt when school ended and summer break just started. The freedom, the expectation of excitement, anticipation of total fun. I remember those feelings. Empty your locker, tear up notes, run up and down the hallways. The teachers, the administration, left you alone, their job done, glad to say goodbye to the trouble makers. Hooray, a wonderful day.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Thanks so very much Rick for your lovely comments and review!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
