Miracles
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Miracles - Chap 16"From the ashes of crime, miracles arise
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
Here is a puzzling image: ""I can picture him shooting the table, sure, but it doesn't explain how this guy ends up dead in Donatelli's car at the bottom of the lake. And this will begin to confuse the reader.
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Here is a puzzling image: ""I can picture him shooting the table, sure, but it doesn't explain how this guy ends up dead in Donatelli's car at the bottom of the lake. And this will begin to confuse the reader.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
Comment from Ulla
Wonderful, Carol. It's really very well written and you keep on the tension. You don't need to respond to this. I'm catching and at speed. Hugs, Ulla xcx
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Wonderful, Carol. It's really very well written and you keep on the tension. You don't need to respond to this. I'm catching and at speed. Hugs, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
Comment from Julie Helms
Excellent chapter, Carol. It gripped me from the beginning and didn't let go till the end. Great dialogue.
I have no suggestions for improvement.
I'm keeping this brief so I can catch up. In return, no need to respond.
Julie
:-)
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Excellent chapter, Carol. It gripped me from the beginning and didn't let go till the end. Great dialogue.
I have no suggestions for improvement.
I'm keeping this brief so I can catch up. In return, no need to respond.
Julie
:-)
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Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
Comment from LJbutterfly
There's never a dull moment (or dull sentence). I especially enjoyed this chapter focused on the actions and dialogue between Tango and Poppa, Enough happened in this chapter that they can all begin to put the pieces together.
You left Eleanor hanging, unable to tell Garth she knows where Donatelli is located, which cleverly left the reader hanging hopeful. I love your style. This is another exceptional chapter.
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There's never a dull moment (or dull sentence). I especially enjoyed this chapter focused on the actions and dialogue between Tango and Poppa, Enough happened in this chapter that they can all begin to put the pieces together.
You left Eleanor hanging, unable to tell Garth she knows where Donatelli is located, which cleverly left the reader hanging hopeful. I love your style. This is another exceptional chapter.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
Comment from Ric Myworld
Angles coming in from all directions, makes it almost impossible to figure out everything that's going on all at once. But it's pretty obvious exactly who is behind it all. Thanks for sharing.
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Angles coming in from all directions, makes it almost impossible to figure out everything that's going on all at once. But it's pretty obvious exactly who is behind it all. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
Comment from karenina
I enjoyed this chapter. (I enjoy all of them, by the way) --
Nothing suspicious at ALL about a "German looking guy" walking into a dive bar with a painting...
(smile)
This is how criminals get caught. They get cocky and think they're invisible.
THAT is Eleanor's superpower!
(I wish oh wish she'd blurted out that she'd located Donatelli)
I am sure that's coming soon!
Karenina
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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I enjoyed this chapter. (I enjoy all of them, by the way) --
Nothing suspicious at ALL about a "German looking guy" walking into a dive bar with a painting...
(smile)
This is how criminals get caught. They get cocky and think they're invisible.
THAT is Eleanor's superpower!
(I wish oh wish she'd blurted out that she'd located Donatelli)
I am sure that's coming soon!
Karenina
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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I'm dying... Should be in bed but instead I am trying to get through over 100 reviews that have been stacking up this week. I think I'm just going to have to tell everyone thanks and I appreciate you or I'll never get caught up.
Love ya, Carol
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Sometimes cut and paste is the only way. People understand! I just wrote ten replies that went "poof" before I could send them.
My second round was much briefer!
Comment from royowen
So Tango and Poppa have been doing some great surveillance work, and they've spotted Vince Rossi and two thugs and a forth that had eluded them before, but now has been seem with a painting, so Doyle is involved, beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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So Tango and Poppa have been doing some great surveillance work, and they've spotted Vince Rossi and two thugs and a forth that had eluded them before, but now has been seem with a painting, so Doyle is involved, beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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A lot of drama! Thanks for enjoying the story and my apologies for being so far behind. Writing for the contest and having to be done by the end of the month is murder. I don't know if it will happen, but I'm trying.
Smiles, Carol
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You should make it
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Plenty going on at the Hideaway Bar and with Poppa and Tango on the outside, waiting, watching, impatient, I feel there's some drama still to go . Another good read, Carol.
well done,
cheers
valda
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Plenty going on at the Hideaway Bar and with Poppa and Tango on the outside, waiting, watching, impatient, I feel there's some drama still to go . Another good read, Carol.
well done,
cheers
valda
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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A lot of drama! Thanks for enjoying the story and my apologies for being so far behind. Writing for the contest and having to be done by the end of the month is murder. I don't know if it will happen, but I'm trying.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
It's good that Tango and Poppa are a team because Tango is way too impatient and could get all of them into trouble. Good that Poppa called Garth. But I wish he'd let Eleanor talk when she has something urgent to share. Besides, he needed worry about keeping her safe and she's already dead. He doesn't know what a gold mine it is to have a ghost on his team.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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It's good that Tango and Poppa are a team because Tango is way too impatient and could get all of them into trouble. Good that Poppa called Garth. But I wish he'd let Eleanor talk when she has something urgent to share. Besides, he needed worry about keeping her safe and she's already dead. He doesn't know what a gold mine it is to have a ghost on his team.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Someone, please remind me where my brain was when I decided to write a story and visit my awesome great-granddaughters, who put the "Energizer Bunny" to shame with their activities and everything else. I'm trying to write, enjoy, review, enjoy, cook, enjoy, and clean. Oh yeah, did I mention I enjoy them as much as possible? It's been fun but a stretch for this old lady. Thanks so much for sticking with me. Forgive my tardiness.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
So much happening at once. Eleanor does need to get to Garth, but tailing this German guy and finding confirmation of the links with Doyle, as well as the painting heist need to be sorted first. Well done. Very exciting.
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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So much happening at once. Eleanor does need to get to Garth, but tailing this German guy and finding confirmation of the links with Doyle, as well as the painting heist need to be sorted first. Well done. Very exciting.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Someone, please remind me where my brain was when I decided to write a story and visit my awesome great-granddaughters, who put the "Energizer Bunny" to shame with their activities and everything else. I'm trying to write, enjoy, review, enjoy, cook, enjoy, and clean. Oh yeah, did I mention I enjoy them as much as possible? It's been fun but a stretch for this old lady. Thanks so much for sticking with me. Forgive my tardiness.
Smiles and hugs, Carol