Flutter
The flutter of fall to winter7 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation.
-Congratulations on your milestone post.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-You have used your 20 syllables well
with a good topic.
-Effective nature imagery with the snow and leaves.
-Good use of personifying the snow,
and a good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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-Very nice artwork and presentation.
-Congratulations on your milestone post.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-You have used your 20 syllables well
with a good topic.
-Effective nature imagery with the snow and leaves.
-Good use of personifying the snow,
and a good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your review and comments. I appreciate them
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You are welcome.
Comment from lyenochka
Congratulations on your 200th post! I enjoyed your poem which speaks of how the fluttering of fall leaves and the flurried snow makes the narrator's heart flutter. Good use of personification and alliteration! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Congratulations on your 200th post! I enjoyed your poem which speaks of how the fluttering of fall leaves and the flurried snow makes the narrator's heart flutter. Good use of personification and alliteration! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your review and comments
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the 20 Syllable poem contest. congratulations on your milestone post #200! That's quite an accomplishment. I liked the double use of the word flutter in your poem. First the leaves flutter in the fall and then your heart flutters when the first snow arrives. My heart does the same thing. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest,
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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An excellent entry for the 20 Syllable poem contest. congratulations on your milestone post #200! That's quite an accomplishment. I liked the double use of the word flutter in your poem. First the leaves flutter in the fall and then your heart flutters when the first snow arrives. My heart does the same thing. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest,
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your great review and comments. I appreciate them.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I felt the flutter of snowflakes and leaves in your ambient post as Autumn and Winter are bitter sweet and full of contrasts, I enjoyed your presentation and welcome to Fanstory, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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I felt the flutter of snowflakes and leaves in your ambient post as Autumn and Winter are bitter sweet and full of contrasts, I enjoyed your presentation and welcome to Fanstory, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your review and comments. I appreciate them. It was fun writing and being recognized for my 200th entry for FanStory.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Well done, this is a lovely poem of just 20 syllables, with some fabulous alliteration flowing through. I love the colours of leaves as they turn from greens to vibrant orange and reds. I even love to walk on the carper of fallen leaves and hearing them crunch underfoot. I very much enjoyed this. Well done and good luck. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Well done, this is a lovely poem of just 20 syllables, with some fabulous alliteration flowing through. I love the colours of leaves as they turn from greens to vibrant orange and reds. I even love to walk on the carper of fallen leaves and hearing them crunch underfoot. I very much enjoyed this. Well done and good luck. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your review and comments. I appreciate them.
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Thank you for your review and comments. I appreciate them.
Comment from Bill Schott
This twenty-syllable poem, Flutter, has the proper syllable count but makes me feel that the words weren't well imagined. Flutter appears twice in a sixteen-word piece, and the use of the word splat seems odd when describing flurried snow.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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This twenty-syllable poem, Flutter, has the proper syllable count but makes me feel that the words weren't well imagined. Flutter appears twice in a sixteen-word piece, and the use of the word splat seems odd when describing flurried snow.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very nicely written and 20 syllable poem for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. I also want to carry you for your 200th post. Have a good day. Patricia.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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This is a very nicely written and 20 syllable poem for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. I also want to carry you for your 200th post. Have a good day. Patricia.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your review and comments. I appreciate them.