Willing Hearts
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Comment from Ric Myworld
I'm a big sucker for the feel good chapters and especially liked this one. But I'm just disappointed that I stay so far behind on reviewing that I don't have the stars to reward it properly. But it doesn't mean I like it any less.
Thanks for sharing.
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I'm a big sucker for the feel good chapters and especially liked this one. But I'm just disappointed that I stay so far behind on reviewing that I don't have the stars to reward it properly. But it doesn't mean I like it any less.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2024
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good chapter filled with lots of emotions between Noah and Sami. I wish this book could go on forever. I am trying enjoying every bit of it. I saw no errors. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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This is a very good chapter filled with lots of emotions between Noah and Sami. I wish this book could go on forever. I am trying enjoying every bit of it. I saw no errors. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 05-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Another awesome addition. I like that you said the LLC was committng crimes they were not interested in. That is a spot on characterization of the Feds.
This part is slightly off:
Bob finished his first Kabob. "Boss, I think maybe The Bureau needs to hire Sami to help with team building. She's good at this."
The only agency referred to as the Bureau is the FBI. CIA is the Agency. Home Land Security is always referred to as The Department. Not a big deal as probably only a fed would catch it.
Great read!
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Another awesome addition. I like that you said the LLC was committng crimes they were not interested in. That is a spot on characterization of the Feds.
This part is slightly off:
Bob finished his first Kabob. "Boss, I think maybe The Bureau needs to hire Sami to help with team building. She's good at this."
The only agency referred to as the Bureau is the FBI. CIA is the Agency. Home Land Security is always referred to as The Department. Not a big deal as probably only a fed would catch it.
Great read!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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I want to be as accurate as possible so I will change it. It's changed. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
I am glad that Noah has made Sami his priority. He'll have much more sane and happy life thanks to understanding love. I like how you had Sami create this BBQ team building event. Is it a BBQ? Where is the fire? Inside the house or outside?
Oh and one thing keeps bugging me. I never heard of "Galvin" as a first name, it's usually an Irish last name. Typically, it's Gavin as a first name but I figured you must know a Galvin. There's a Calvin but never met a Galvin.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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I am glad that Noah has made Sami his priority. He'll have much more sane and happy life thanks to understanding love. I like how you had Sami create this BBQ team building event. Is it a BBQ? Where is the fire? Inside the house or outside?
Oh and one thing keeps bugging me. I never heard of "Galvin" as a first name, it's usually an Irish last name. Typically, it's Gavin as a first name but I figured you must know a Galvin. There's a Calvin but never met a Galvin.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2024
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Outside, they used Noah's firework and Jose and Bob carried the table and chairs outside. Thank you for the kind review. I'll recheck Galvin. I think I've used it through the entire book.
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Yes, you were very consistent. I figured that Galvin must be a Texan name but now that you're almost finished, I thought I might double-check if you really meant that name.
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It just keeps sounding like galvanized something or other. 😂
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I'll look at changing it. Although, Galvin is galvanized. LOL
Comment from Wendy G
I don't think anyone can change overnight regatdless of good intentions, so I hope it all works out in the way they hope and plan. The reality of everyday life will be a very different one. Best wishes to them both though!
Wendy
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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I don't think anyone can change overnight regatdless of good intentions, so I hope it all works out in the way they hope and plan. The reality of everyday life will be a very different one. Best wishes to them both though!
Wendy
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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There will be some more bumps in the road. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from T B Botts
Hi Barbara,
I see things are finishing up. That's a good thing, everything needs a start, middle and finish. I would have a hard time reading it if I didn't believe there was going to be an end to the matter. I hope Noah will be able to follow through with the way he feels now. When they leave protective custody, all of their lives will change, and the dynamics that were prevailing in the cabin might change. I guess we'll see.
Blessings,
TOm
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Hi Barbara,
I see things are finishing up. That's a good thing, everything needs a start, middle and finish. I would have a hard time reading it if I didn't believe there was going to be an end to the matter. I hope Noah will be able to follow through with the way he feels now. When they leave protective custody, all of their lives will change, and the dynamics that were prevailing in the cabin might change. I guess we'll see.
Blessings,
TOm
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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There will be some more bumps in the road. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
I gather weare really close top the end of this great story. You have done well as you always do in your writing. If they are what I think..like chicken on sticks?? we call them kebabs. I have several sources of gluten-free ones, now. I might write about it.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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I gather weare really close top the end of this great story. You have done well as you always do in your writing. If they are what I think..like chicken on sticks?? we call them kebabs. I have several sources of gluten-free ones, now. I might write about it.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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There will be some more bumps in the road. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
They all have interesting plans, but plans have a way of not working out. I hope Noah can keep his promise, but his job is very demanding. He may need to think about a new job.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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They all have interesting plans, but plans have a way of not working out. I hope Noah can keep his promise, but his job is very demanding. He may need to think about a new job.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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There will be some more bumps in the road. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from forestport12
Dialogue and interaction so good it kept me in the moment, which is really one of the benefits of dialogue, a present perspective. But you should teach a class on dialogue. Your exchanges are not complete sentences or missing words to bring realism in how they speak. Loved it carried me into the scene at the safe house and the kabobs. If I put chicken on one, I'm spoiled, I love it when meat is super tender or in a slow cook stew. I should spend more time reading your stuff, cause it reminds me how to write.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Dialogue and interaction so good it kept me in the moment, which is really one of the benefits of dialogue, a present perspective. But you should teach a class on dialogue. Your exchanges are not complete sentences or missing words to bring realism in how they speak. Loved it carried me into the scene at the safe house and the kabobs. If I put chicken on one, I'm spoiled, I love it when meat is super tender or in a slow cook stew. I should spend more time reading your stuff, cause it reminds me how to write.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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There will be some more bumps in the road. Thank you for the kind review. Thank you for the encouragement. I enjoy listening to people speak.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, the writing and editing are fine. But the story feels to be stretched. The plot seems to be over, yet things continue... why? I recommend thinking about what is needed and what isn't.
notes:
"You've been here for twenty-five days. I've been with you for twenty days, almost three weeks."
-And this is a problem with "the formula" love in three weeks???
"Sami, I won't let it happen," said Noah as he stood.
"You can't promise that." Sami held out her hand. "We'd better get back to reality."
-Why can't he? Can he not get another job? How does she not understand that?
Noah frowned. "I'm not sure..."
"Noah, there isn't a threat," interrupted Sarah
-Wait. We were just told Sami was going home Thursday. This thread of concern or dialogue doesn't make sense.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Hmm, the writing and editing are fine. But the story feels to be stretched. The plot seems to be over, yet things continue... why? I recommend thinking about what is needed and what isn't.
notes:
"You've been here for twenty-five days. I've been with you for twenty days, almost three weeks."
-And this is a problem with "the formula" love in three weeks???
"Sami, I won't let it happen," said Noah as he stood.
"You can't promise that." Sami held out her hand. "We'd better get back to reality."
-Why can't he? Can he not get another job? How does she not understand that?
Noah frowned. "I'm not sure..."
"Noah, there isn't a threat," interrupted Sarah
-Wait. We were just told Sami was going home Thursday. This thread of concern or dialogue doesn't make sense.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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There will be some more bumps in the road. Thank you for the kind review.