Truckin
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Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, Debbie, is probably right on it being a cop-out and all, but if it was up to me, I'd cop-out and keep both endings. LOL. I like both. And far as I'm concerned, life is about options. Thanks for sharing.
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Well, Debbie, is probably right on it being a cop-out and all, but if it was up to me, I'd cop-out and keep both endings. LOL. I like both. And far as I'm concerned, life is about options. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
Comment from lyenochka
This is the ending I vote for! There's redemption and the tragedies led to an opportunity for truckers to get test for their bodies and souls. What job is Thurmon applying for? And is the Santa Claus trucker Slim?
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This is the ending I vote for! There's redemption and the tragedies led to an opportunity for truckers to get test for their bodies and souls. What job is Thurmon applying for? And is the Santa Claus trucker Slim?
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
Comment from Jim Wile
Nah. I liked them both, but the second one more than the first.
I just finished reading both of them and decided to write one review for the entire story. This was really good, Wayne. Very original and thought-provoking. You made me aware of something I never thought too much about--the ways of truck drivers--and it was very interesting.
Clyde was also a fascinating character, and we got to witness something of a transformation from merely a revenge-seeking, devil-may-care highway terrorist, to a thoughtful, practical man who came to his senses and decided to turn his wife's death into a way to help prevent such a tragedy from happening to anyone else but in a more positive way.
In your first ending, he seems to have gotten his just desserts for his terrorist activities and the extreme riskiness of his acts of revenge, while in the second ending, he realizes the best way to improve the situation even further than bringing awareness to the issues is to help the truckers out so they won't be as inclined to make careless and dangerous decisions.
I guess that's why I preferred the second ending--because he took a more positive and constructive approach to solving the problem.
I liked the balance you brought to the story with the Thurmon character, to show us that not all truck drivers are as thoughtless about safety as so many seemed to be. He added a greater realism to the story, and its nice to see a good family man with good values in the mix.
I loved your inventiveness in this story too. I guess I may be partial to clever people with inventive minds, as I seem to write about them a lot too, but I like what I like.
Just a question: I can't quite remember how one of your previous stories ended, but could this be the same Slim that was in that story? I know that I like to revisit old characters in my stories.
All-in-all, a well-written story and a very enjoyable read.
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Nah. I liked them both, but the second one more than the first.
I just finished reading both of them and decided to write one review for the entire story. This was really good, Wayne. Very original and thought-provoking. You made me aware of something I never thought too much about--the ways of truck drivers--and it was very interesting.
Clyde was also a fascinating character, and we got to witness something of a transformation from merely a revenge-seeking, devil-may-care highway terrorist, to a thoughtful, practical man who came to his senses and decided to turn his wife's death into a way to help prevent such a tragedy from happening to anyone else but in a more positive way.
In your first ending, he seems to have gotten his just desserts for his terrorist activities and the extreme riskiness of his acts of revenge, while in the second ending, he realizes the best way to improve the situation even further than bringing awareness to the issues is to help the truckers out so they won't be as inclined to make careless and dangerous decisions.
I guess that's why I preferred the second ending--because he took a more positive and constructive approach to solving the problem.
I liked the balance you brought to the story with the Thurmon character, to show us that not all truck drivers are as thoughtless about safety as so many seemed to be. He added a greater realism to the story, and its nice to see a good family man with good values in the mix.
I loved your inventiveness in this story too. I guess I may be partial to clever people with inventive minds, as I seem to write about them a lot too, but I like what I like.
Just a question: I can't quite remember how one of your previous stories ended, but could this be the same Slim that was in that story? I know that I like to revisit old characters in my stories.
All-in-all, a well-written story and a very enjoyable read.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
This one is way way way better and satisfying. I guess other folks were un happy with him giving up at the end. All is forgiven, here's your six. I am glad you gave him the come to Jesus moment. Karen
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This one is way way way better and satisfying. I guess other folks were un happy with him giving up at the end. All is forgiven, here's your six. I am glad you gave him the come to Jesus moment. Karen
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
Comment from Tim Margetts
I like this ending, then again, I have yet to read the other. And what's wrong with having different endings, they even do it in some movies these days.
I enjoy the slice of life your tales bring.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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I like this ending, then again, I have yet to read the other. And what's wrong with having different endings, they even do it in some movies these days.
I enjoy the slice of life your tales bring.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Thank you very much. I appreciate your take.