The Cougar Hunter
Tracking women of 'a certain age.'33 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Super job with this flash story and how you surprised both the narrator and the reader! The narrator felt he was the hunter but instead he was the focus of study for maybe some sociology or psychology class! Congratulations on the win!!
reply by the author on 28-May-2024
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Super job with this flash story and how you surprised both the narrator and the reader! The narrator felt he was the hunter but instead he was the focus of study for maybe some sociology or psychology class! Congratulations on the win!!
Comment Written 28-May-2024
reply by the author on 28-May-2024
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Thank you, Helen; I so appreciate your going outside your comfort zone to read and review this. You are a very good friend, indeed. xoxo
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I've now taken the warning off.
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Yay!
Comment from Amethyst Rivers
Very well written....I thoroughly enjoyed this. What an interesting perspective. This is not a normal read for me, but you hooked me in, just as I would expect a cougar to do! Congrats on your well earned win!!
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Very well written....I thoroughly enjoyed this. What an interesting perspective. This is not a normal read for me, but you hooked me in, just as I would expect a cougar to do! Congrats on your well earned win!!
Comment Written 27-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Hahaha. GrrrrARR! And just as it's not a normal read for you, it's not a normal write for me!! This was my first time ever attempting the genre, in fact - and, honestly, I never read anything on here that's posted with an Adults Only warning. It's not that I'm a prude; I'm obviously not, but there's something about being familiar with the people who are doing the writing to feel queasy about reading something lascivious by them, you know? It's like seeing your favorite teacher in a strip club or something. That's why I kept this more PG-13 than R or X.
Anyway, thank you very much for the lovely review. It is very much appreciated. xo
Comment from nomi338
Awesome write. I hate I did not see this earlier. As a man of an age who enjoys the company of women, both young and old, I was blown away by the byplay , the engagement, the game play, the attempted diversion by the younger woman, the dedication shown by the hunter to stay on point. Textbook instruction on how the game should be, actually must be played. Bravo Sir Gamesman.
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Awesome write. I hate I did not see this earlier. As a man of an age who enjoys the company of women, both young and old, I was blown away by the byplay , the engagement, the game play, the attempted diversion by the younger woman, the dedication shown by the hunter to stay on point. Textbook instruction on how the game should be, actually must be played. Bravo Sir Gamesman.
Comment Written 27-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Um, Mistress Gameswoman to you, please!! (hahaha)
Thank you for this really wonderful review. You "get it" one hundred percent, and there is no sweeter taste of victory for a writer than that! xoxox
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I stand humbly corrected. Your writing was so eloquent that I naturally assumed that some man totally full of himself, must have penned this. Obviously I need to improve my deductive skills. Your writing is awesomely good.
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I took that you thought that as the ULTIMATE compliment; I honestly did!! So THANK YOU, doubly!! xoxox
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 27-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Woot!
Comment from Esther Brown
That was priceless. I am a cougar 10 years older (to the day). I am a nurse practitioner, he a fisherman, logger, Harley rider redneck. Our story is under shotgun wedding in my portfolio. Cougar in my case was a chubby middle aged woman who WASN'T looking. I couldn't even imagine writing that scene any better. Esther
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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That was priceless. I am a cougar 10 years older (to the day). I am a nurse practitioner, he a fisherman, logger, Harley rider redneck. Our story is under shotgun wedding in my portfolio. Cougar in my case was a chubby middle aged woman who WASN'T looking. I couldn't even imagine writing that scene any better. Esther
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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GrrrARRR!! You GO, Girl!! Congrats on this impressive accomplishment! I am so intrigued now that I'm heading, after I'm done with all my responses to reviews, to read Shotgun Wedding!! I just know it's going to be delightful!!
Thank you for this wonderful review. I appreciate it very much. xoxo
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Enjoy. I thought I was reading a man's story and couldn't believe you are a beautiful young woman.
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Oh, you sweet talker, you!! (I'm not young, though. I'm 60 in that profile pic and am 67 now.) I am quite immature though...
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Rachelle,
firstly, sorry for taking so long to review this tantalising piece of fiction.... hmmm, or is it fiction? I did read it before, but time and circumstance didn't allow me to review... but hey((((((, I got to read it a couple of times again... so... win-win! Rrrrrrrrrrrrrowww!!!!
A very intriguing style of story delivery, it had me going back to reread as the plot and twist was a ripper. Made me smile and left me satisfied.
I'm not much for an ego based peacock.
I guess you found me out... I was fodder for an older woman from my very first sexual experience... but nothing such as this story, I never went searching or hunting... and there's no way I'd reference cougar within these experiences. I was a very shy young man who related on higher emotional level that someone my age or nearer didn't seem, or could ever satisfy. Sometimes I found myself out of my league, sometimes in danger, a couple life threatening incidents... but mostly life altering. But that is a story for another time.
A very entertaining read and very well written Rachelle, totally enjoyed it.
All the very best wishes in this contest dear talented writer!
With our thoughts we create...
the circumstance of growth.
Warm regards,
James.
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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Hi Rachelle,
firstly, sorry for taking so long to review this tantalising piece of fiction.... hmmm, or is it fiction? I did read it before, but time and circumstance didn't allow me to review... but hey((((((, I got to read it a couple of times again... so... win-win! Rrrrrrrrrrrrrowww!!!!
A very intriguing style of story delivery, it had me going back to reread as the plot and twist was a ripper. Made me smile and left me satisfied.
I'm not much for an ego based peacock.
I guess you found me out... I was fodder for an older woman from my very first sexual experience... but nothing such as this story, I never went searching or hunting... and there's no way I'd reference cougar within these experiences. I was a very shy young man who related on higher emotional level that someone my age or nearer didn't seem, or could ever satisfy. Sometimes I found myself out of my league, sometimes in danger, a couple life threatening incidents... but mostly life altering. But that is a story for another time.
A very entertaining read and very well written Rachelle, totally enjoyed it.
All the very best wishes in this contest dear talented writer!
With our thoughts we create...
the circumstance of growth.
Warm regards,
James.
Comment Written 25-May-2024
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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Sir!! Why have you not written about these encounters of yours (even if you would prefer to list them as fiction?!!) I would be so fascinated to read these stories...and I guarantee I am NOT the only one, male or female, who would!!! I'm so intrigued just imagining these encounters!!
But because you especially understand this dynamic of the story makes your wonderful review even that much more special and appreciated.
Thank you for your generous stars, as well.
This exceptional review was WELL worth the wait!! Thank you times a million zillion.
xoxoxo
Comment from DragonSkulls
Wow. What fantastic writing, Rachelle. Your detail to details was superb. Very, very impressive penmanship. I could picture every aspect and thought exquisitely. Then to add the magnificent twist at the end, brilliant. I can easily see this one take the hundred smackers. Loved it. Great writing. I wish you the best of luck, R. You deserve the win for this one. Thanks for sharing. Excellent.
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Ron
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Wow. What fantastic writing, Rachelle. Your detail to details was superb. Very, very impressive penmanship. I could picture every aspect and thought exquisitely. Then to add the magnificent twist at the end, brilliant. I can easily see this one take the hundred smackers. Loved it. Great writing. I wish you the best of luck, R. You deserve the win for this one. Thanks for sharing. Excellent.
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Ron
Comment Written 22-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Oh, you sweet talkin' reviewer, you!! Thank you very much for these enthusiastic words. I could not appreciate them more. xo
Comment from Michele Harber
Naughty, naughty, naughty. No, I'm not referring to the predator's or the cougar's actions but to your so completely tricking me. You make incredible use of detail, from the man's eyelashes and the number of seconds he spends on each move, to the cougar's "smear[ing] the icing into a creamy lipstick glaze." Each detail is spun like a thread in a spider's web to capture and trap the reader, and it works perfectly. (You lured me in, and I'm usually the one anticipating the twist.)
Brilliant idea for the story, and I love that you didn't waste a single word. (The only thing you did waste was an apostrophe on "repartee'" that didn't belong.) Good luck in the contest, and I'd be stunned if you didn't win.
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Naughty, naughty, naughty. No, I'm not referring to the predator's or the cougar's actions but to your so completely tricking me. You make incredible use of detail, from the man's eyelashes and the number of seconds he spends on each move, to the cougar's "smear[ing] the icing into a creamy lipstick glaze." Each detail is spun like a thread in a spider's web to capture and trap the reader, and it works perfectly. (You lured me in, and I'm usually the one anticipating the twist.)
Brilliant idea for the story, and I love that you didn't waste a single word. (The only thing you did waste was an apostrophe on "repartee'" that didn't belong.) Good luck in the contest, and I'd be stunned if you didn't win.
Comment Written 22-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Thanks for this very validating review (and for kicking me over into ATB Land!! Now. thanks to you, I have street cred! xoxxo) and the eagle-eye editing. I'll change it at once.
It's really only fair I trick you since that flair of yours has sucked me in HOWWWWWW many times on your posts? (Answer: I can't count that high.)
I would be surprised if I DO win because it's a Committee vote, and I've burned many a bridge on here. Still, I felt like stepping out of my genre comfort zone - and it was free to do so. That makes me a winner, regardless!!
xoxox
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If you've hit All Time Best (you're welcome!) then enough people have read this to be suspicious if you don't at least make it onto the dais. I'd be very surprised if you didn't take it all, though. Talent is talent, and it can't be hidden, so it would be a little suspicious if you didn't get recognized. There'd have to be a phenomenal entry to beat this, but who knows? Good luck, and let's hope quality writing rebuilds burned bridges.
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Omg - even your reviews are wisdom bites!!
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Be careful. Occasionally, wisdom does bite. And, occasionally, so do I!
Comment from Wendy G
A clever story showing insight into the skills of a real-life cougar hunter. (Hmmm!) very descriptive and engaging as the reader wondered whether .... And then that very clever ending! Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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A clever story showing insight into the skills of a real-life cougar hunter. (Hmmm!) very descriptive and engaging as the reader wondered whether .... And then that very clever ending! Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 22-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Thank you, Wendy. I appreciate your reviewing this very much. xoxo
Comment from Jim Wile
Great job, Rachelle. I loved this story of the cougar hunter, told from the hunter's point of view, and the twist that it was a research project by a professor and her class. Nice surprise, as he really seemed to have hooked her in. But apparently, he really did, as she promises him there will be a next time.
This was cleverly told and sensual as well. I liked your description of young college girls: "sporting two nose rings, a sleeve of tats and Cleopatra eye liner with dimples like sinkholes on each side of her blue-black lip-lined mouth. Too, too easy. And no prowess between the sheets, either. Just pure raunch." What a great contrast to the cougar with her sophistication and experience.
Very good writing.
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Great job, Rachelle. I loved this story of the cougar hunter, told from the hunter's point of view, and the twist that it was a research project by a professor and her class. Nice surprise, as he really seemed to have hooked her in. But apparently, he really did, as she promises him there will be a next time.
This was cleverly told and sensual as well. I liked your description of young college girls: "sporting two nose rings, a sleeve of tats and Cleopatra eye liner with dimples like sinkholes on each side of her blue-black lip-lined mouth. Too, too easy. And no prowess between the sheets, either. Just pure raunch." What a great contrast to the cougar with her sophistication and experience.
Very good writing.
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Thank you, Jim, for this wonderfully in-depth review!
And, yes, those college girls have a lot to learn, don't they? Thank goodness they were taking notes on those laptops and iPads!!
xoxox