Genius in Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Genius in Love, Scene 13"In Search of a Soul
31 total reviews
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Finally in the end, Cornie can see Mr. Hiney in the eyes. Cililla did help him in this whole scene using ocean and music as analogies since he is a musician.
I think this scene is a little too long. You can only go so far for Cornie and the invisible Cililla to converse. It is interesting, though.
Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
  |
Finally in the end, Cornie can see Mr. Hiney in the eyes. Cililla did help him in this whole scene using ocean and music as analogies since he is a musician.
I think this scene is a little too long. You can only go so far for Cornie and the invisible Cililla to converse. It is interesting, though.
Well done.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
-
Thank you, Lisa, for your candor. You were not alone in feeling that way. Cornie, bless his heart, is not much of a conversationalist and Cililla tends to be a tad chatty. I'll have to do some heavy editing on it after I see where the next few scenes will take our duo. Again, thanks for your kind words.
-
It is quite a challenge to write about a kid with Asperger's syndrome.
Comment from Gretchen Keefer
excellent depiction of the autisic boy's lack of social contact. loved the boat image. The scene appears a little static for a stage play. How will you keep the audience engaged during that long speech with little or no movement?
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
|
excellent depiction of the autisic boy's lack of social contact. loved the boat image. The scene appears a little static for a stage play. How will you keep the audience engaged during that long speech with little or no movement?
Comment Written 04-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
-
That is a very good point, Gretchen. I've maintained since the beginning that this was a read-only play, but the fact that you came to that conclusion meant that the reading material needs a tad more buffering. Thank you for reading this, Gretchen, and for your candid comment. I hope you'll hang around the next scene (s) when I promise you there will be more characters and more action.
Comment from Jessica Borras
I'm coming in a little late to your story, but the writing is absolutely wonderful. The connection between Cornelius and Cillia is an interesting one, and speaks volumes on the struggles an autistic child must go through. I can't wait to read more.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
|
I'm coming in a little late to your story, but the writing is absolutely wonderful. The connection between Cornelius and Cillia is an interesting one, and speaks volumes on the struggles an autistic child must go through. I can't wait to read more.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
-
I can't wait to have you read more, Jessica. Thank you for your kind words and encouragement. See you in about a week.
Comment from Beejay
I haven t yet had the opportunity to read the previous chapters, but after reading this chapter, I definitely want to. It grabbed my attention from the start.I enjoyed and I also learned at the same time from your script.
Thank you
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
|
I haven t yet had the opportunity to read the previous chapters, but after reading this chapter, I definitely want to. It grabbed my attention from the start.I enjoyed and I also learned at the same time from your script.
Thank you
Comment Written 04-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
-
What a kind thing to say. Thank you, Beejay, for taking a chance with this script. If you might be a future reader of it I'd advise you to read only the twelve summaries of the scripts. I've kept each to a short paragraph and it will bring you up to speed. Again, thank you so much.
-
Oh ok...I?ll do that..thank you
Comment from lyenochka
Hmmm. I wonder what it is that Mr. Hiney saw as Cornelius left. I know Cililla is invisible to everyone but Cornelius. I'm a little confused I thought the other force she was talking about was his early invisible friend. But she seems to be trying to discourage Cornie's relationship with Jennie. I wonder if she's jealous or if she is protecting him, or is she a personification of his music? I wonder if Cornie senses the negativity from Mr. Jax who had a very negative reaction to Cornie's father. So many questions from this post. Great characterization through dialogue.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
|
Hmmm. I wonder what it is that Mr. Hiney saw as Cornelius left. I know Cililla is invisible to everyone but Cornelius. I'm a little confused I thought the other force she was talking about was his early invisible friend. But she seems to be trying to discourage Cornie's relationship with Jennie. I wonder if she's jealous or if she is protecting him, or is she a personification of his music? I wonder if Cornie senses the negativity from Mr. Jax who had a very negative reaction to Cornie's father. So many questions from this post. Great characterization through dialogue.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
-
Thank you, Helen for reading and trying to get a handle on what the heck's going on. I have been a long-time student/admirer of the psychologist Carl Jung, and I have patterned Cililla, loosely (and I mean loosely) as Cornelius's superego and Pidely-Poo as his Id (that stayed active too long). In any event, both are part of his psychological construct. So Cililla wouldn't be Jealous of Jennie, unless Cornie, himself, was jealous of her. Yet, since you are the second person to have intuited that from her "character", I must have been inadvertently teasing you. Now, according to Freud and Jung, the superego has, in its more developed form, qualities that to the uninitiated might seem magical. Which might explain Cililla's tipping over Mr. Hiney's water glass. Anyway, all those things are playing around in my mind as I connive to advance the plot. I'm glad you've been patiently following it.
-
Ah - I like the Id, Ego, and Superego explanation - that was Freud. Jung was more about the collective consciousness and that might even explain the tipping over the water glass. Keep up the thoughtful work!
-
Yes, I was thinking of Jung's Poltergeist activity of pubescent children, of which Cornie was one ... and by extension, Cililla.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Oh I thought I was never getting to the end of that pleading speech, Jay! Still I guess it is integral to the rest of the story. You certainly know your way around the stage though, and have a clear idea of where you're going with it. I love plays. Giddy
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
|
Oh I thought I was never getting to the end of that pleading speech, Jay! Still I guess it is integral to the rest of the story. You certainly know your way around the stage though, and have a clear idea of where you're going with it. I love plays. Giddy
Comment Written 04-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
-
Thank you so much, Giddy! I'm glad you stuck it out. I know it wasn't the most action-filled scene. Not much you can do with two people talking, one of them being autistic. LOL, thanks for dropping by, though.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi, Jay
First of all, I was so glad to see that you won the monthly contest for All Time Best with Scene 12. Congratulations!!!
Now, for this ocean of boats that Cililla has conjured up to make a point to our timid friend, Cornelius. I think her underlying purpose is to show Cornie that he isn't alone on an island. She wants him to deal with the fact that there are many people in the world... millions and millions. Most of them he'll never have to deal with. But there are some floating around in their own boats that he knows... Jennie Jax, his parents, his teacher, schoolmates, Mr. & Mrs. Jax, Mr. Hallow, Cililla, etc. All are connected to Cornie's boat by an invisible cable. A jerk here, a jerk there... "here a jerk, there a jerk, everywhere a jerk-jerk"... sometimes there are just too many jerks on the old cable! But that's what relationships are all about.
Cornie's ocean is full of music. But others are floating on different oceans... an ocean of golf course greens, hairspray and makeup, money, position, power, etc.
Bottom line... Cililla wants Cornie to start SEEING the people around him. And she is selfless, because the more that Cornie is able to do that, the less he will SEE Cililla. She will gradually fade away, like his old pal Poo.
You left us with two big question marks. First, what is the matter with Jennie? How come she hasn't been to school for two days? Second, why has Cornie been called to Mr. Hallow's office?
Perhaps Jennie is sick, but I doubt it. I'm thinking there's a family matter.
As far as Mr. Hallow goes, he is quite aware that Cornie has abundant natural talent with the piano. And I think he wants to ask him to play for a school assembly. It's about time that Cornelius is recognized for his talent and not his malady. A bit of exposure might give him well-deserved praise from his fellow schoolmates. And this will go a long way towards self-confidence.
Nicely penned, Jay! The story's all coming together.
Keep up the good work!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
 |
Hi, Jay
First of all, I was so glad to see that you won the monthly contest for All Time Best with Scene 12. Congratulations!!!
Now, for this ocean of boats that Cililla has conjured up to make a point to our timid friend, Cornelius. I think her underlying purpose is to show Cornie that he isn't alone on an island. She wants him to deal with the fact that there are many people in the world... millions and millions. Most of them he'll never have to deal with. But there are some floating around in their own boats that he knows... Jennie Jax, his parents, his teacher, schoolmates, Mr. & Mrs. Jax, Mr. Hallow, Cililla, etc. All are connected to Cornie's boat by an invisible cable. A jerk here, a jerk there... "here a jerk, there a jerk, everywhere a jerk-jerk"... sometimes there are just too many jerks on the old cable! But that's what relationships are all about.
Cornie's ocean is full of music. But others are floating on different oceans... an ocean of golf course greens, hairspray and makeup, money, position, power, etc.
Bottom line... Cililla wants Cornie to start SEEING the people around him. And she is selfless, because the more that Cornie is able to do that, the less he will SEE Cililla. She will gradually fade away, like his old pal Poo.
You left us with two big question marks. First, what is the matter with Jennie? How come she hasn't been to school for two days? Second, why has Cornie been called to Mr. Hallow's office?
Perhaps Jennie is sick, but I doubt it. I'm thinking there's a family matter.
As far as Mr. Hallow goes, he is quite aware that Cornie has abundant natural talent with the piano. And I think he wants to ask him to play for a school assembly. It's about time that Cornelius is recognized for his talent and not his malady. A bit of exposure might give him well-deserved praise from his fellow schoolmates. And this will go a long way towards self-confidence.
Nicely penned, Jay! The story's all coming together.
Keep up the good work!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
-
Thank you, Kimbob. That's not the first time you mentioned Cornelius playing at an assembly. It caught my interest the first time. But that's not the reason Cornie's going to the office. There's another angle I'm working on. We'll see if things jell. I'm so happy your still aboard on this. I don't know how you can hold on to sixes so long. Blessings, my friend!
Comment from Carmen Ducharme
Wow what a heavy interesting read .I have a disabled daughter whom I always would tell the drs.to speak to her so she could understand even I have a hard time so I started to explain what they were trying to say in a way she could understand .Almost at every hospital stay , appt or therapist they would all ask me if I was in the medical field and I would always say no just trying to be a good mom and explain it to my beautiful daughter in a way she can understand and not be afraid .Lovely story I will continue to read .Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
|
Wow what a heavy interesting read .I have a disabled daughter whom I always would tell the drs.to speak to her so she could understand even I have a hard time so I started to explain what they were trying to say in a way she could understand .Almost at every hospital stay , appt or therapist they would all ask me if I was in the medical field and I would always say no just trying to be a good mom and explain it to my beautiful daughter in a way she can understand and not be afraid .Lovely story I will continue to read .Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
-
Oh, Carmen, that's a lovely story about the relationship between you and your daughter. I"m so happy you found some relatability with my play. I'm glad you decided to jump aboard. May I suggest you read the summaries of the scenes to get a feel for the characters, especially Cililla and Cornelius? Again, thank you so much for reading this.
-
Thank you ! I absolutely will do that ! Wonderful play .Thank you again for sharing !
Comment from Terry Overton
Your depiction of the communication with a child on the spectrum was well done. It is often difficult to jump into the middle of a screenplay and figure out exactly what is happening. But this was not the case for this scene. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
|
Your depiction of the communication with a child on the spectrum was well done. It is often difficult to jump into the middle of a screenplay and figure out exactly what is happening. But this was not the case for this scene. Nicely done.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
-
Thank you so much, Terry. So happy you found it worthwhile, if not entirely understood. Please come back. (Read that as a kind of whining pleading.)
Comment from Judy Lawless
I continue to thoroughly enjoy this story, Jay. It feels so real, and it's encouraging to see Cornelius' little breakthroughs. Again you left us with a big unanswered question. I look forward to the next scene.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
|
I continue to thoroughly enjoy this story, Jay. It feels so real, and it's encouraging to see Cornelius' little breakthroughs. Again you left us with a big unanswered question. I look forward to the next scene.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2021
-
Judy, you are very kind and encouraging. And a six to boot!