Comment from Pearl Edwards

Exceptional

Great chapter Tony. Not only the battering he's getting but the thought of what's happening to Helen.
The stench of stale urine and body odour knocked me back, as did the overpowering aura of despair. - Powerful, dramatic description of what faces Charles.
great story-telling
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2019

Many thanks for your positive comments and encouragement, Valda. Delighted that you found this chapter to be worth an extra star. All good wishes, Tony.

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-A very good chapter, Tony, that moves the
story along as Charles faces his questioner.
-The first part of the chapter shows Charles in a
battle of wits, it seems, as he tries to figure out what
is going on, what rights he has, and how Helen is.
-Habeeb certainly doesn't respond well, and even
uses innuendo when it comes to all of these things.
-Then there's Hussein and the calico bag. That was
certainly not pleasant, but you describe it very well.
-We feel for Charles and his situation.
-Things just get worse as we learn about
the jail and the "aura of despair."
-I like the ending as Javed comes to the aid
of Charles and makes him feel less helpless
until he tells about others awaiting trial; however,
I think there will be a turnaround sooner than later!

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2019

Thanks for these positive comments, Pam. Very much appreciated, as always. Best wishes, Tony.

reply by Pam (respa) on 15-Nov-2019

You are very welcome, Tony. It was very well written, but I didn't have a 6 to give. Will review the next one on Sun. and go over it tomorrow.

Comment from Sylvia Page

Excellent

Looks as though Charles is in for a hard time of grilling, I wish him a whole load of luck to come away alive. Helen on the other hand is also having her own share of problems at the same time. Wonder how she will cope.
Regards
Sylvia

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019

Even at the end of the next chapter, Charles is in a sticky situation, with no immediate way out. Helen, on the other hand, shows that she is resourceful. Thanks for your review and comments. Always appreciated.

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This segment is certainly intense. You build the emotional intensity of the character brilliantly throughout this. The references to Helen and what her fate might be are quite foreboding. You leave the reader in a quandary as to who is in more danger - him or her. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019

Thanks for your comments about the growing intensity, Monica. That's what I was aiming for! LOL
I was delighted to see your award of Recognised Writer for November. Many congratulations.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written chapter. To be in jail in a foreign country is one of the worst things that can happen to anyone even when you totally innocent the authorities there have the ace in their hands.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019

Thanks for your comments, Sandra. I understand that Pakistan is one of the worst places in the world in which to be imprisoned.

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

These people sound like a bunch of barbarians. They don't have much regard for the law. Charles and Helen are in serious trouble. I hope his new friend can be of some help to him, but I don't see how.

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2019

Thanks for your comments, Cindy. Appreciated. It's going to be hard to extricate Charles from this situation.

Comment from lauralumummu

Excellent

Another great chapter in your novel. What can I say? It is well written when will the book be done. It is sure to be a bestseller. You have such interesting characters. All the best, Laura

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2019

Very kind of you to say so, Thanks, Laura. All good wishes, Tony

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Exceptional

I don't have a clue how Charles is going to get out of this mess. In reality he probably would not. I am wondering if Helen may have some thing up her sleeve that come to Charle's rescue. I can't wait to read more.

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2019

Thanks, Barbara, for your generous comments and the sixth star. It could be difficult getting Charles out of this mess.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

My God, now Brandon iis in 'dire strait'. A cliche, I know. But all the same. I also wonder why Helen always seems to avoid all the problems. Hmm! Anyway, it's a great story and great writing. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2019

Thanks, Ulla. Charles certainly seems to be getting the worst of the deal at the moment. Maybe that will change - if he ever manages to get out of prison. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is getting to violent for me, Tony. Also, I have lost interest in finding out about the French Letter. I will check back on the next one. Jan

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2019

Thanks for your comments, Jan. The story has taken a turn away from the original plot and will take quite a bit of editing to bring it back into line. All the best, Tony