The French Letter
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Comment from WryWriter
A lot of emotion in this chapter--loss and memories. Some humor thrown in keeping the reader on their toes. I especially liked this:
"I wasn't sure which was the lesser of the two evils. Whichever I chose was going to render me comatose for the remainder of the day. I knew Jack's scrumpy of old. Redolent of wrinkled apples, it was a cloudy brew with a kick like a Jersey bull and enough body to suggest a drowned rat or two at the bottom of the barrel. However, I knew he'd be offended if I didn't join him."
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Suggestion:
he said ((omit ,)) as I unwrapped it,
Widdershins Farm (Is this the name or does it need an apostrophe?)
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As always, enjoyed reading your work!!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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A lot of emotion in this chapter--loss and memories. Some humor thrown in keeping the reader on their toes. I especially liked this:
"I wasn't sure which was the lesser of the two evils. Whichever I chose was going to render me comatose for the remainder of the day. I knew Jack's scrumpy of old. Redolent of wrinkled apples, it was a cloudy brew with a kick like a Jersey bull and enough body to suggest a drowned rat or two at the bottom of the barrel. However, I knew he'd be offended if I didn't join him."
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Suggestion:
he said ((omit ,)) as I unwrapped it,
Widdershins Farm (Is this the name or does it need an apostrophe?)
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As always, enjoyed reading your work!!
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your review and comments, WryWriter. I?ve dropped the comma now. Widdershins is an old-fashioned dialect word meaning ?to the left?. Have a great weekend. Best wishes, Tony.
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Thank you for the information, Tony! : )
Comment from giraffmang
Another super chapter, the descriptions are excellent.
The cider description is a hoot, and I'm sure I've partaken of some of that...
suspended in disbelief, til the first raindrops mingled with the tears - I think it needs to be either 'til or till here.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Another super chapter, the descriptions are excellent.
The cider description is a hoot, and I'm sure I've partaken of some of that...
suspended in disbelief, til the first raindrops mingled with the tears - I think it needs to be either 'til or till here.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thanks. I?ll amend it to ?till? when I get home. I can?t do it on the iPhone without considerable bad language. I either need a bigger screen or smaller fingers. God alone knows how the youngsters manage such things!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-This is a good chapter,Tony, that shows
various scenes and people after the devastation
that Charles and Helen had encountered.
-There is light banter from some, offers of
hospitality from the Wilkins, and of course,
Charles and Helen are together and safe.
-The gift that John gave Charles seemed to
overwhelm him, just as he was at the end
when Jed had saved his MG.
-The description of the scene when they decide
to see Moonrakers is very well done,
and shows Charles's deep emotion.
-The ending is very good, too.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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-This is a good chapter,Tony, that shows
various scenes and people after the devastation
that Charles and Helen had encountered.
-There is light banter from some, offers of
hospitality from the Wilkins, and of course,
Charles and Helen are together and safe.
-The gift that John gave Charles seemed to
overwhelm him, just as he was at the end
when Jed had saved his MG.
-The description of the scene when they decide
to see Moonrakers is very well done,
and shows Charles's deep emotion.
-The ending is very good, too.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Pam. I appreciate your comments about the variety in this chapter. Thanks, too, for the sixth star. All the best, Tony.
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars, and comments, Tony.
Comment from Gail Denham
Well done - smooth and making sense throughout - sounds as if you're well on your way to making this a total book - altho perhaps you already have. The smoothness of dialog and action is quite nice.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Well done - smooth and making sense throughout - sounds as if you're well on your way to making this a total book - altho perhaps you already have. The smoothness of dialog and action is quite nice.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Very many thanks for your kind comments and for the sixth star. Both much appreciated. The book is nearly finished in first draft - probably about another 20,000 words to go. Then the real work begins, the ruthless editing! All the best, Tony
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
Another great chapter full of marvelous description
and wonderful personalities despite the somber mood.
I miss Moonrakers already, a place of character I would have liked to visit
if it were real. But as Charles said in the last chapter, he feels a sense of freedom.
I'll buy a pint for Jed for saving the MGB, though.
I suspect the grey clouds on the horizon are more than just the loss of Moonraker. Pakistan still looms large.
Well done
Robert
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Hello Tony,
Another great chapter full of marvelous description
and wonderful personalities despite the somber mood.
I miss Moonrakers already, a place of character I would have liked to visit
if it were real. But as Charles said in the last chapter, he feels a sense of freedom.
I'll buy a pint for Jed for saving the MGB, though.
I suspect the grey clouds on the horizon are more than just the loss of Moonraker. Pakistan still looms large.
Well done
Robert
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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I appreciate your comments, Robert, and the sixth star. As you say, Pakistan looms ever closer on the horizon. As you might have guessed, I once owned an MGB!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This chapter was full of the emotions of just what it would be like to see your home destroyed to just a heap of burnt ashes. Great chapter Tony, and I liked the light-hearted MGB moment to finish off with.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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This chapter was full of the emotions of just what it would be like to see your home destroyed to just a heap of burnt ashes. Great chapter Tony, and I liked the light-hearted MGB moment to finish off with.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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I appreciate your comments, Valda. As you might have guessed, I once owned an MGB!
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Yes, I wondered. My husband had a dark blue one when we first met, nice vehicles.
Comment from estory
This chapter reads like an oasis in the eye of a storm. A welcome respite for Charles, as he peruses old rhymes from the countryside, listens to the old dialect of the locals, remembers happier, simpler times. It's kind of like the foundation underneath it all. Then comes the reminder of the fire, and it jars him back into the moment. All will have to be dealt with sooner or later. estory
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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This chapter reads like an oasis in the eye of a storm. A welcome respite for Charles, as he peruses old rhymes from the countryside, listens to the old dialect of the locals, remembers happier, simpler times. It's kind of like the foundation underneath it all. Then comes the reminder of the fire, and it jars him back into the moment. All will have to be dealt with sooner or later. estory
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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I appreciate your comments, estory, and your summary of the plot. Thanks. All the best, Tony
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I had a red MGB, and I loved it. I had to swap it when I had my children for something a bit more suitable, :( I would always have the roof off in the summer, even if it was chilly. lol. So, now Charles has lost everything, but he still has the most important things in his life, Helen and the MGB, a lot more than many people have. So, where does he go now? I loved that poetry book, I've not heard of it, but knowing you, it exists. I'm going to look on Amazon, I love the Wiltshire dialect. Well, this was another lovely chapter in the life and times of a stamp collector!!!! LOL. Next! xxxx
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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I had a red MGB, and I loved it. I had to swap it when I had my children for something a bit more suitable, :( I would always have the roof off in the summer, even if it was chilly. lol. So, now Charles has lost everything, but he still has the most important things in his life, Helen and the MGB, a lot more than many people have. So, where does he go now? I loved that poetry book, I've not heard of it, but knowing you, it exists. I'm going to look on Amazon, I love the Wiltshire dialect. Well, this was another lovely chapter in the life and times of a stamp collector!!!! LOL. Next! xxxx
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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I appreciate your comments, Sandra. As you might have guessed, I once owned an MGB! Mine was red, too.
Yes, the poetry book exists and I was able to download a .pdf version off the internet. I've only had time to skim read so far. Further pleasures yet to come.
Comment from Tpa
This chapter was beautifully written. I must enjoy every single aspect of the item. I must leave that particular item and feel like I would tell someone about it, think about it or refer to it with confidence later during the day. The Author has paid particular attention to the language used and the words were chosen. Every single grammar issue has been resolved and there are no spelling mistakes.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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This chapter was beautifully written. I must enjoy every single aspect of the item. I must leave that particular item and feel like I would tell someone about it, think about it or refer to it with confidence later during the day. The Author has paid particular attention to the language used and the words were chosen. Every single grammar issue has been resolved and there are no spelling mistakes.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from royowen
I loved this episode. A lovely descriptive one, emotive and involved with the characters, you've captured the mood and emotion of the indidual reserve protagonists in the story, a lovely episode, with the quality of compassion shining in each word, well done Tony, blessjngs, Roy
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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I loved this episode. A lovely descriptive one, emotive and involved with the characters, you've captured the mood and emotion of the indidual reserve protagonists in the story, a lovely episode, with the quality of compassion shining in each word, well done Tony, blessjngs, Roy
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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What a very nice thing to say, Roy. Thank you. Best wishes, Tony
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Well done