The French Letter
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Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good image for
the chapter,Tony.
-Good description of the
painting in the beginning.
-The description of Charles when
he was in the cafe was also effective.
-I am sure Charles welcomed
the sight of his landlord, and home!
-Good conclusion, going back to
the painting, Alain, and the envelope
that refers the reader back to
the beginning of the story.
-The very last part of the chapter
with the footsteps leaves us
with a sense of mystery, but
my money is on Helen and/or Kayla!
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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-A good image for
the chapter,Tony.
-Good description of the
painting in the beginning.
-The description of Charles when
he was in the cafe was also effective.
-I am sure Charles welcomed
the sight of his landlord, and home!
-Good conclusion, going back to
the painting, Alain, and the envelope
that refers the reader back to
the beginning of the story.
-The very last part of the chapter
with the footsteps leaves us
with a sense of mystery, but
my money is on Helen and/or Kayla!
Comment Written 10-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Pam. I've made the two changes you suggested in your PM.
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You are very welcome, Tony.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a good chapter, Tony. I enjoyed reading it. You did a good job describing the setting and how Charles felt/looked. He seems a bit bewildered with all that has happened with the painting, the explosion, and the race to get away from the scene. Although I read this out of sequence, it is a great lead-in to the next chapter. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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This is a good chapter, Tony. I enjoyed reading it. You did a good job describing the setting and how Charles felt/looked. He seems a bit bewildered with all that has happened with the painting, the explosion, and the race to get away from the scene. Although I read this out of sequence, it is a great lead-in to the next chapter. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Thanks for your comments, Jan. Appreciated. Tony.
Comment from S.M.E.Schultz
I love the intrigue. Your characterization gently reveals his anxiety and fear without being over the top. Refreshing to read! I like his wry humor, as well.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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I love the intrigue. Your characterization gently reveals his anxiety and fear without being over the top. Refreshing to read! I like his wry humor, as well.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Thanks for your comments. Appreciated. Glad you enjoyed it. Tony.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'm miles behind, sorry Tony. What a place to leave us. Luckily, I think there is already another part to read. I loved the part where he said he was already a murderer, so might as be a thief as well, lol. And why not, indeed. That portrait certainly is mystifying, I wonder if it is the genuine article. We'll see later, I'm sure. Excellent writing again, my friend. I'm really enjoying this. I'm off to read the next part now. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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I'm miles behind, sorry Tony. What a place to leave us. Luckily, I think there is already another part to read. I loved the part where he said he was already a murderer, so might as be a thief as well, lol. And why not, indeed. That portrait certainly is mystifying, I wonder if it is the genuine article. We'll see later, I'm sure. Excellent writing again, my friend. I'm really enjoying this. I'm off to read the next part now. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Glad you're still enjoying it, Sandra. I'm beginning to see light at the end of the tunnel. I hope it's not an oncoming train.
Comment from estory
This chapter has an eerie feel to it, the grey descriptions of early morning Paris, the murky street scenes, Charles moving through them with the painting concealed in his bag. The newspaper story reminding him of how he should keep his profile low. Then it ends with that footstep on the stairs. A great air of suspense. We see Charles slipping into a murky, shadowy world here, losing control of his life and getting caught up in something bigger than he is. estory
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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This chapter has an eerie feel to it, the grey descriptions of early morning Paris, the murky street scenes, Charles moving through them with the painting concealed in his bag. The newspaper story reminding him of how he should keep his profile low. Then it ends with that footstep on the stairs. A great air of suspense. We see Charles slipping into a murky, shadowy world here, losing control of his life and getting caught up in something bigger than he is. estory
Comment Written 09-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this one and found the atmospherics effective. All the best. Tony.
Comment from Pantygynt
This was a page turner of a chapter as event followed even, even if it was punctuated by a sleep on a hard floor. You refer to a 'drop sheet' at one point. This was not an expression with which I was familiar. Would it be the same as a dust sheet?
Can't wait to find out who is coming up the stairs after this cliff-hanger ending.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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This was a page turner of a chapter as event followed even, even if it was punctuated by a sleep on a hard floor. You refer to a 'drop sheet' at one point. This was not an expression with which I was familiar. Would it be the same as a dust sheet?
Can't wait to find out who is coming up the stairs after this cliff-hanger ending.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Having now written the next chapter, I could tell you who was coming up the stairs, but that would spoil the suspense, wouldn't it? Drop sheet must be an Australian term (a heavy-duty linen sheet placed on the floor to protect it from drops of paint).
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter. A very busy day and night and a very close encounter with the police is quite tiring. There seems to be more questions than answers and it seems there are visitors at the door.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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A very well-written chapter. A very busy day and night and a very close encounter with the police is quite tiring. There seems to be more questions than answers and it seems there are visitors at the door.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Thanks for your continued support, Sandra. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Oh such a good place to finish this exciting chapter, and leave us wondering who it is at the door. Great opening scene as Charles lays hidden before making his escape. Really enjoyed this chapter, full of drama.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Oh such a good place to finish this exciting chapter, and leave us wondering who it is at the door. Great opening scene as Charles lays hidden before making his escape. Really enjoyed this chapter, full of drama.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 08-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019
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Many thanks for bestowing an extra star on this one, Valdo. Appreciated. Glad to hear that you are still enjoying the story. All the best, Tony
Comment from lyenochka
I was truly on the edge of my seat reading this, Tony, worried that our hero would be caught. I smiled at your gray fingers of dawn as opposed to Homer's rosy fingers of dawn. I want to know if the painting went to the toilet with him as I think he wouldn't want it out of his sight.
"Je suis content d'être revenue." (revenu?) I would think you want the masculine form.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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I was truly on the edge of my seat reading this, Tony, worried that our hero would be caught. I smiled at your gray fingers of dawn as opposed to Homer's rosy fingers of dawn. I want to know if the painting went to the toilet with him as I think he wouldn't want it out of his sight.
"Je suis content d'être revenue." (revenu?) I would think you want the masculine form.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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Very many thanks, Helen. My French has never been a strong point! Glad to have someone who knows the language keeping me straight. Very kind of you to pump this post. I generally try to put at least a dollar on these chapters, but with a couple of recent poetry posts, I've run myself a bit short of pumps. All the best, Tony
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Tony;
> Even right to the last line you keep me going and wanting more.
> If someone comes to the door but you don't tell me what and who.... Chuckle!
> I'm so glad that Charles got out of the building at all being surrounded by police after the explosion.
> Very good detail and I was just thinking I just finished reading another writer story and I'm starting to understand how a story's rhythm goes and how it flows in the pace of the story.
> The pace of your writing is fast and collective ,listed very definitively
With excellent information and great imagery.
> The other one I wrote spent so much time on the imagery of the surrounding characters that a lot of the story was based on the characters identity and not the action being implied by the characters.
> Two different writing styles in such great entertainment, such as yours
in the way it slowly comes up to a crescendo and then slowly lets the dough settle From rising.
> Thanks very much for sharing this, Tony and take care and have a good one.
Alx
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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Cheers, Tony;
> Even right to the last line you keep me going and wanting more.
> If someone comes to the door but you don't tell me what and who.... Chuckle!
> I'm so glad that Charles got out of the building at all being surrounded by police after the explosion.
> Very good detail and I was just thinking I just finished reading another writer story and I'm starting to understand how a story's rhythm goes and how it flows in the pace of the story.
> The pace of your writing is fast and collective ,listed very definitively
With excellent information and great imagery.
> The other one I wrote spent so much time on the imagery of the surrounding characters that a lot of the story was based on the characters identity and not the action being implied by the characters.
> Two different writing styles in such great entertainment, such as yours
in the way it slowly comes up to a crescendo and then slowly lets the dough settle From rising.
> Thanks very much for sharing this, Tony and take care and have a good one.
Alx
Comment Written 08-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Alx. I'm fascinated by your comments about different writing styles. Just so useful to me as a writer. I very much appreciate the sixth star, as always! Best wishes to you and your family, Tony
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Tony;
>Yeah, I'm reading now six different story writers, here at fan story.
>I found all of them different, but their are only two that are developed for a great return, if they go to publish. You're one.
>Take care and create a good one.
Alx