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Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
I'm finding it quite a change and also interesting to see the story from a different viewpoint-Kaylas'.
The ocker Aussie behaviour seems to fit like a glove and rounds out thr chapter well.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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I'm finding it quite a change and also interesting to see the story from a different viewpoint-Kaylas'.
The ocker Aussie behaviour seems to fit like a glove and rounds out thr chapter well.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Shirley. Kayla's account of what happened is beginning to put a slightly different slant on things..
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Very interesting. Creative with good use of imagery. A funny scene when Pete tries to get into Kayla's bunk. Lures the reader in and keeps them engaged throughout the chapter. Well done!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Very interesting. Creative with good use of imagery. A funny scene when Pete tries to get into Kayla's bunk. Lures the reader in and keeps them engaged throughout the chapter. Well done!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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I appreciate your dropping by to review this earlier chapter, Brett, and many thanks for the six stars. All the best, Tony
Comment from sunnilicious
Great novel installment. You verbiage blows my mind as you drip with creativity. Now, I want to study ways to describe a smile. You made me feel as if I were in the moments... Crazy, lowly environment but heavenly to a traveler. Well thought out. Clearly written. Enjoyable narrative with dialogue. Good author notes for reference. Nice work.
Merry Christmastime :)
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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Great novel installment. You verbiage blows my mind as you drip with creativity. Now, I want to study ways to describe a smile. You made me feel as if I were in the moments... Crazy, lowly environment but heavenly to a traveler. Well thought out. Clearly written. Enjoyable narrative with dialogue. Good author notes for reference. Nice work.
Merry Christmastime :)
Comment Written 20-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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What a lovely review, Alicia. A very merry Christmastide to you, too.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good chapter, Tony.
-We learn more of Kayla's story and
adventures as she is on this train with
these guys she decided would make for
good cover from the thugs.
-The scenes are described with vivid detail,
and once Kayla has settled a few matters,
she ponders her situation and
reminisces about Hindu Kush.
-I like this image as she looks
out at the night sky:
"like mermaids dancing among the stars."
-Charles hasn't much to say except praise
Kayla for her courage, and Helen breaks
the seriousness with her comeback.
-A good ending, leaving us wondering
what will be in store for Kayla next.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2018
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-A good chapter, Tony.
-We learn more of Kayla's story and
adventures as she is on this train with
these guys she decided would make for
good cover from the thugs.
-The scenes are described with vivid detail,
and once Kayla has settled a few matters,
she ponders her situation and
reminisces about Hindu Kush.
-I like this image as she looks
out at the night sky:
"like mermaids dancing among the stars."
-Charles hasn't much to say except praise
Kayla for her courage, and Helen breaks
the seriousness with her comeback.
-A good ending, leaving us wondering
what will be in store for Kayla next.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2018
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Thanks for your help with this chapter, Pam, and for your generous six-star review. Very much appreciated, as always. Best wishes, Tony
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars, review, and help, Tony. Have a great holiday season and New Year, too.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
I agree with Helen
"Good grief!" exclaimed Helen. "There's no need to lay it on that thick."
But it does work well in that scene. lol
["Too bloody right you will, I thought.] The quote mark isn't needed for thoughts, perhaps Italics.
Kayla story continues nicely.
Well done
Robert
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2018
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Hello Tony,
I agree with Helen
"Good grief!" exclaimed Helen. "There's no need to lay it on that thick."
But it does work well in that scene. lol
["Too bloody right you will, I thought.] The quote mark isn't needed for thoughts, perhaps Italics.
Kayla story continues nicely.
Well done
Robert
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2018
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Many thanks for your comments, Robert, and for the sixth star. Much appreciated, as always. I'll have to look at the quotation marks in this again. Each paragraph where Kayla is speaking currently has them at the beginning.
Comment from apky
Another one of your chapters that grab with vibrant descriptive rainbows! I think one of the reason I love this story so much is that clear touch of the exotic, of places I've visited (or not yet) and found/find out of this world in their uniqueness.
And so is Kayla - a unique heroine. No wonder Charles is tugging along wherever Kayla sways!
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2018
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Another one of your chapters that grab with vibrant descriptive rainbows! I think one of the reason I love this story so much is that clear touch of the exotic, of places I've visited (or not yet) and found/find out of this world in their uniqueness.
And so is Kayla - a unique heroine. No wonder Charles is tugging along wherever Kayla sways!
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2018
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Thanks, Aki. I like your 'descriptive rainbows'! I lived in the Far East for a while, both as a child and as an adult, and have strong memories of some of the places. I have a feeling that Kayla may develop into a more interesting character than Helen. She certainly seems to have caught Charles's attention.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh, Tony, you certainly can insert loads of humorous imagery into your writing, even when it's serious! I really enjoyed this part, learning more about Kayla's story. I had to laugh at Dave's drunken attempt to climb up into Kayla's bunk, and her 'innocently' knocking him off! It seems to me, these sisters do have a lot of similar things going on in their lives. Both attract mystery. Well done, my friend, another excellent part. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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Oh, Tony, you certainly can insert loads of humorous imagery into your writing, even when it's serious! I really enjoyed this part, learning more about Kayla's story. I had to laugh at Dave's drunken attempt to climb up into Kayla's bunk, and her 'innocently' knocking him off! It seems to me, these sisters do have a lot of similar things going on in their lives. Both attract mystery. Well done, my friend, another excellent part. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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Many thanks for your lovely comments, Sandra, and for the sixth star. I'm so pleased that you are still finding my story entertaining. I very much appreciate your support. Best wishes for the holiday season, Tony.
Comment from estory
This was a colorful chapter, including the drinking Australians fooling around with girls, the uncertainty of the journey jostling through the Thai countryside, with unmoored boats as a good image for the feeling of Kayla as she makes this trip. Good descriptions, colorful dialogue, bring this to life and put us there on the train with her. I have to wonder...why is she making this trip? Don't forget to keep the bigger story in focus during these excursions estory
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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This was a colorful chapter, including the drinking Australians fooling around with girls, the uncertainty of the journey jostling through the Thai countryside, with unmoored boats as a good image for the feeling of Kayla as she makes this trip. Good descriptions, colorful dialogue, bring this to life and put us there on the train with her. I have to wonder...why is she making this trip? Don't forget to keep the bigger story in focus during these excursions estory
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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Many thanks for your comments, estory.I hope the relevance of this trip to Phuket will become clearer soon. I very much appreciate your support. Best wishes for the holiday season, Tony.
Comment from LIJ Red
In 1965 I chose to ride a passenger train once before they went extinct, and rode
from Chicago to Atlanta, this time of year, with hundreds of drunken sailors and soldiers...I trashed my return ticket and caught a Greyhound...excellent chapter...
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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In 1965 I chose to ride a passenger train once before they went extinct, and rode
from Chicago to Atlanta, this time of year, with hundreds of drunken sailors and soldiers...I trashed my return ticket and caught a Greyhound...excellent chapter...
Comment Written 16-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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Thanks, Red. It sounds as if the Greyhound was a better option under the circumstances. Best wishes to you for the holiday season. Tony
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This was an interesting chapter with the new travelers as the focus. It seems Kayla is pretty smart and intuitive about her situation. I enjoyed reading it, Tony. You did a good job with the description of the train quarters. All I all it still seems eerie to be in a foreign country and not knowing who can be trusted. .Good job and thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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This was an interesting chapter with the new travelers as the focus. It seems Kayla is pretty smart and intuitive about her situation. I enjoyed reading it, Tony. You did a good job with the description of the train quarters. All I all it still seems eerie to be in a foreign country and not knowing who can be trusted. .Good job and thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 16-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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Many thanks for your comments, Jan. I'm so pleased that you are still finding my story interesting. I very much appreciate your support. Best wishes for the holiday season, Tony.