The French Letter
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26 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
You've done a great job with the chase scene here, Tony. I always find those very difficult to write, but you've put in just the right amount of action and let the imagination do the steering.
The abductors sure were nabbed fast.
Now the knight in shining armour gets to shine.
A fine chapter.
Gloria
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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You've done a great job with the chase scene here, Tony. I always find those very difficult to write, but you've put in just the right amount of action and let the imagination do the steering.
The abductors sure were nabbed fast.
Now the knight in shining armour gets to shine.
A fine chapter.
Gloria
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Gloria. I appreciate your travel back in time to give this chapter its 26th review! Glad you enjoyed the chase. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Hi Tony,
Poor Helen!
What a nightmare but thankfully her knight in shining armour appeared just in time.
There is always room for a 'switched on' super sleuth in a mystery/adventure story.
blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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Hi Tony,
Poor Helen!
What a nightmare but thankfully her knight in shining armour appeared just in time.
There is always room for a 'switched on' super sleuth in a mystery/adventure story.
blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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Many thanks for your reviews, Shirley. Every story needs a hero!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-This is definitely an action
packed chapter, Tony.
-We have Charles deflating tires;
Henri participating, along with
Charles, in trying to get to the abductors;
Helen coming out of M.Durand's in
a disheveled state; and through
it all, the abductors were handcuffed.
-Things just don't seem to go
Helen's way very easily, but
hopefully they get better.
-I imagine she will have quite
a story to tell Charles!
-I can't wait to see what
she has to say!!
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2018
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-This is definitely an action
packed chapter, Tony.
-We have Charles deflating tires;
Henri participating, along with
Charles, in trying to get to the abductors;
Helen coming out of M.Durand's in
a disheveled state; and through
it all, the abductors were handcuffed.
-Things just don't seem to go
Helen's way very easily, but
hopefully they get better.
-I imagine she will have quite
a story to tell Charles!
-I can't wait to see what
she has to say!!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2018
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Thanks, Pam. I know that things are going OK when I get a six star award from you! Glad that this episode worked more or less as intended. All the best,Tony
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You are very welcome and deserving, Tony. I appreciate your reply, and things are going well; you keep us guessing what the next situation will be.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
You've handled this action scene quite nicely.
Henri adds a touch of humor and local flavor, plus much needed assistance for Charles.
At last, someone named Bonaparte wins an important battle.
Charles seems to always appear just in the nick of time to save Helen,
that's very good for both of them.
It appears M Durant didn't think Helen would appear, hence the two suits to persuade her.
It will be interesting to learn the relationship between Helen and Durant, and the letter and painting.
Perhaps, MD is only interested in the painting.
Since she's a literary agent, maybe she can publish your book. lol
Well done
Robert
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2018
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Hello Tony,
You've handled this action scene quite nicely.
Henri adds a touch of humor and local flavor, plus much needed assistance for Charles.
At last, someone named Bonaparte wins an important battle.
Charles seems to always appear just in the nick of time to save Helen,
that's very good for both of them.
It appears M Durant didn't think Helen would appear, hence the two suits to persuade her.
It will be interesting to learn the relationship between Helen and Durant, and the letter and painting.
Perhaps, MD is only interested in the painting.
Since she's a literary agent, maybe she can publish your book. lol
Well done
Robert
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2018
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By the time I?ve finished with Madame Durand, she may be willing to pay me not to publish! Thanks for another fine review. Tony.
Comment from Swampfox1
Well written, I did not find any errors and there is adventure in here and it plays out well. Your French is alright but you can not always translate directly from English to French. It should be "Arrête , ou je te tire!" Of course you did have a direct translation for "Stop or I shoot". Of course, that could go either way. Either way, a good story well written
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Well written, I did not find any errors and there is adventure in here and it plays out well. Your French is alright but you can not always translate directly from English to French. It should be "Arrête , ou je te tire!" Of course you did have a direct translation for "Stop or I shoot". Of course, that could go either way. Either way, a good story well written
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Very many thanks for that, Swampfox. My French is abysmal, dredged up from schooldays half a century ago, and supplemented by the notoriously unreliable on-line translators. I very much appreciate your correction. All the best, Tony
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You're welcome
Comment from apky
This was another tightly knit chapter the clipped along at a racy pace. There's suspense galore and the incredible feeling of danger careening to the protagonists like an express train. I thoroughly enjoyed this read. The chapters seem to get better and better. Another definite six stars, which, alas, I don't have.
Frankly, I had not got a clue. ~ Tony, I find this sounds rather awkward. Why not a simple: Frankly, I hadn't a clue? But that's just me - you're the creator.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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This was another tightly knit chapter the clipped along at a racy pace. There's suspense galore and the incredible feeling of danger careening to the protagonists like an express train. I thoroughly enjoyed this read. The chapters seem to get better and better. Another definite six stars, which, alas, I don't have.
Frankly, I had not got a clue. ~ Tony, I find this sounds rather awkward. Why not a simple: Frankly, I hadn't a clue? But that's just me - you're the creator.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Thanks very much for your enthusiastic review, apky. Appreciated.
You are the third or fourth reviewer to have commented on 'Frankly, I had not got a clue'. I wrote it that way for emphasis, to indicate that Charles articulated each word slowly while thinking. However, I'm beginning to think perhaps I should change it!
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Try warning the ready about the articulation; I don't know - something like: Frankly, I. had. not. got. a. clue
It's done a lot these days.
Comment from BeasPeas
A wonderful chapter, Tony. Action mixed in with your wonderful descriptions and dialogue. I got a chuckle out of this glimpse into human nature:
"He waved the money aside. "No need for that, monsieur." Thinking perhaps I had offended him, I started to put the notes back. As soon as the money began to vanish, I saw a look of dismay on his face. He was obviously wrestling with his better nature, and losing. I hesitated for a moment, giving him an opportunity to revise his answer. This time, with evident relief, he said, "Well, if you insist."
Marilyn
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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A wonderful chapter, Tony. Action mixed in with your wonderful descriptions and dialogue. I got a chuckle out of this glimpse into human nature:
"He waved the money aside. "No need for that, monsieur." Thinking perhaps I had offended him, I started to put the notes back. As soon as the money began to vanish, I saw a look of dismay on his face. He was obviously wrestling with his better nature, and losing. I hesitated for a moment, giving him an opportunity to revise his answer. This time, with evident relief, he said, "Well, if you insist."
Marilyn
Comment Written 23-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Thanks, Marilyn. Glad you enjoyed it! Tony
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
A good continuation here and a nice piece of action thrown into the mix. very nice.
"Bravo, mon ami! That will teach those pigs not to swear at Henri Caron." - I highlighted this as to ask the question - why did the rag and bone man speak in English? I don't recall them conversing before so how would he know?
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Hi there,
A good continuation here and a nice piece of action thrown into the mix. very nice.
"Bravo, mon ami! That will teach those pigs not to swear at Henri Caron." - I highlighted this as to ask the question - why did the rag and bone man speak in English? I don't recall them conversing before so how would he know?
Comment Written 23-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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I hadn't thought of that. Will have to find a way round it. Thanks for your sharp eye. Tony
Comment from Spitfire
Helen is a sassy little lady. She seems to know where to hit a man and get away. Love the humor bit about money exchange. Seems the rag and bone man and his dog may have had to protect themselves before.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Helen is a sassy little lady. She seems to know where to hit a man and get away. Love the humor bit about money exchange. Seems the rag and bone man and his dog may have had to protect themselves before.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Thanks, Shari. I had fun writing this chapter. Glad you enjoyed it. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from estory
This was a pretty strong chapter, the rescue of Helen goes off with plenty of action and determination and cooperation with the man with the dog. Everything swirls around, dogs chasing guys, Helen running out of the house after kicking one of her abductors in the crotch, and then Charles sweeping her into the car. It was very visual, and I could see this happening as if on TV. Pretty good scene definition there. Its a heart pounding scene and we are rewarded with a happy ending, Charles and Helen in each other's arms. Very romantic. estory
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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This was a pretty strong chapter, the rescue of Helen goes off with plenty of action and determination and cooperation with the man with the dog. Everything swirls around, dogs chasing guys, Helen running out of the house after kicking one of her abductors in the crotch, and then Charles sweeping her into the car. It was very visual, and I could see this happening as if on TV. Pretty good scene definition there. Its a heart pounding scene and we are rewarded with a happy ending, Charles and Helen in each other's arms. Very romantic. estory
Comment Written 22-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Thanks for your review of this action-packed chapter. Glad you enjoyed its graphic quality. Best wishes, Tony