Perennials of War
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Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, Barbara
I like how you explained the different aspects of Judaism. In a few short paragraphs, it feels like you've given a good over-all perspective. Anderson is getting a good idea of what his life would be like married into a conservative Jewish family.
Very well done!
:) Bev
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Hi, Barbara
I like how you explained the different aspects of Judaism. In a few short paragraphs, it feels like you've given a good over-all perspective. Anderson is getting a good idea of what his life would be like married into a conservative Jewish family.
Very well done!
:) Bev
Comment Written 17-May-2018
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Thank you for the kind review. I doubt Anderson is too worried. LOL
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb here is a virtual six rating for this chapter
How clever and talented you are to be able to write three different conversations between the two families.
Gert
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Hello Barb here is a virtual six rating for this chapter
How clever and talented you are to be able to write three different conversations between the two families.
Gert
Comment Written 17-May-2018
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Thank you very much for the virtual six. I appreciate all reveiws.
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, Barbara, :)
Good chapter. I thought the misunderstanding of what Shana said was hilarious!
Happy Belated Mother's Day to you too. I'm a cat mother, but... I guess that is a mother in a way.
Take care,
Nome
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Hello, Barbara, :)
Good chapter. I thought the misunderstanding of what Shana said was hilarious!
Happy Belated Mother's Day to you too. I'm a cat mother, but... I guess that is a mother in a way.
Take care,
Nome
Comment Written 17-May-2018
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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It's a Mother is a huge way. We have two cats and they are fun but interesting.
Comment from kathleenspalding
LOL, poor Shana (at the end)! Cute chapter has a little of everything, with some interesting info in the beginning, and also moves the story along. I saw no errors and only have a couple minor suggestions -
"I agree." Susan set her fork next to her plate. "Are you going to sell the penthouse?" - "... penthouse[[, Anderson]]?" (to let us know who she's talking to?)
"That being said, Dad, I was hoping [[you had - you'd have some?]] suggestions."
How many bedrooms[[, - delete comma]] do you think...
Well done!
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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LOL, poor Shana (at the end)! Cute chapter has a little of everything, with some interesting info in the beginning, and also moves the story along. I saw no errors and only have a couple minor suggestions -
"I agree." Susan set her fork next to her plate. "Are you going to sell the penthouse?" - "... penthouse[[, Anderson]]?" (to let us know who she's talking to?)
"That being said, Dad, I was hoping [[you had - you'd have some?]] suggestions."
How many bedrooms[[, - delete comma]] do you think...
Well done!
Comment Written 16-May-2018
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Thank you for the help. I will check each area.
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You're welcome.
Comment from meeshu
a very good segment in your story, Barbara. your character's discussion of Judaism was interesting and accurate but gave Orthodoxy short shrift. not intended as a pun.........meeshu
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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a very good segment in your story, Barbara. your character's discussion of Judaism was interesting and accurate but gave Orthodoxy short shrift. not intended as a pun.........meeshu
Comment Written 16-May-2018
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Thank you for the kind review. I didn't want to spend too much time discussing Judaism. I was afraid I'd loose readers.
Comment from ciliverde
I like the fact that you had some explanation of the Jewish faith in your story, it's interesting to me and not something I know very much about. Your story is flowing well, Shana is certainly kind of an innocent but she is an engaging character.
Carol
reply by the author on 15-May-2018
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I like the fact that you had some explanation of the Jewish faith in your story, it's interesting to me and not something I know very much about. Your story is flowing well, Shana is certainly kind of an innocent but she is an engaging character.
Carol
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 15-May-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
hey, barbara:
I know I'm jumping into this really, really late, but now that I'm back and
trying to carve out at least an hour a day for fanstory, I wanted to be sure
to support my favorite writers. I love the Mother's Day card, also. You are
right - it is a very complex job.
love,
jan
reply by the author on 15-May-2018
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hey, barbara:
I know I'm jumping into this really, really late, but now that I'm back and
trying to carve out at least an hour a day for fanstory, I wanted to be sure
to support my favorite writers. I love the Mother's Day card, also. You are
right - it is a very complex job.
love,
jan
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 15-May-2018
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I am so glad you're back. I hope you're not too lost in my post. If you have questions, please ask.
Comment from Artasylum
I know from jews barbara... I am a shiksa married to a jewish man 21 years now... I've been fully indoctrinated. This was especially fun for me to read. thanks. diana
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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I know from jews barbara... I am a shiksa married to a jewish man 21 years now... I've been fully indoctrinated. This was especially fun for me to read. thanks. diana
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Thank you for the insight. I appreciate it.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
"It should take care of the security guards. It has a guest house and a foreman's house." Zachery tapped his fork. "Shana wouldn't have to share a room." He grinned. I love the humour you add to your dramatic works Barbara, you are very talented and I always enjoy your skillful work well done as always love and regards Meiax
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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"It should take care of the security guards. It has a guest house and a foreman's house." Zachery tapped his fork. "Shana wouldn't have to share a room." He grinned. I love the humour you add to your dramatic works Barbara, you are very talented and I always enjoy your skillful work well done as always love and regards Meiax
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Sasha
Zachery is definitely a thorn in Anderson's side and enjoys it too. Thanks for the background information, it helps to keep everything clear. Nice work with this chapter and as always, I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Zachery is definitely a thorn in Anderson's side and enjoys it too. Thanks for the background information, it helps to keep everything clear. Nice work with this chapter and as always, I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Drew an Zack are normal brothers. LOL Thank you for the kind review.