Perennials of War
Viewing comments for Chapter 67 "Chapter Zwanzig part veir"Is Anderson a gallant knight? Can he recover Shan
25 total reviews
Comment from NaughtieScribe
He wiped this nose. - his nose.
Oh I can't stand you. Now I'm hooked on another of your works. Best lunch time ready in a long while. I only noticed the one SPAG, everything else was simply addictive. Now I have to book mark the previous chapters. Too many questions rolling around my head. Until next we meet...
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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He wiped this nose. - his nose.
Oh I can't stand you. Now I'm hooked on another of your works. Best lunch time ready in a long while. I only noticed the one SPAG, everything else was simply addictive. Now I have to book mark the previous chapters. Too many questions rolling around my head. Until next we meet...
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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I can't believe you are the only reviewer who caught that typo. Thank you.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, Barbara
I like reading about a character (Anderson) who can respect the virginal aspects of the lady he's protecting and helping. It is rare for a man of that eco/social status to even give a second thought to someone that old-fashioned...at least by today's standards. It's makes the relationship that much more special. I hope they still go after the painting!
Very well done!
:) Bev
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Hi, Barbara
I like reading about a character (Anderson) who can respect the virginal aspects of the lady he's protecting and helping. It is rare for a man of that eco/social status to even give a second thought to someone that old-fashioned...at least by today's standards. It's makes the relationship that much more special. I hope they still go after the painting!
Very well done!
:) Bev
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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I like to believe there are still innocence around. Thank you .
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Yes, Indeed!
Comment from Sasha
Don't fret, you did a superb job with the action in this chapter. You had me holding my breath and then you actually added some humor to lighten the load. Great job with this chapter. I enjoyed it very much.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Don't fret, you did a superb job with the action in this chapter. You had me holding my breath and then you actually added some humor to lighten the load. Great job with this chapter. I enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Beck Fenton
I could watch the action taking place and I didn't need anything more as you leave the reader to his/her imagination to fill in the blanks.
"He tilted his head at the cadence of brat tat, brat tat, brat tat. " is an example. The tilting of his head is enough to let me "see" the tension and find myself right next to him, listening for any sounds. Good job!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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I could watch the action taking place and I didn't need anything more as you leave the reader to his/her imagination to fill in the blanks.
"He tilted his head at the cadence of brat tat, brat tat, brat tat. " is an example. The tilting of his head is enough to let me "see" the tension and find myself right next to him, listening for any sounds. Good job!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mbroyles2
Your rewrite is much better. It draws us in and gets us inside Drew's head.
This chapter shows us a still awkward Shana and an extremely patience Drew.
But I sense she is started to ease up.
Slowly but surely.
It's exciting to see how this couple is drawn to each other.
Michael
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Your rewrite is much better. It draws us in and gets us inside Drew's head.
This chapter shows us a still awkward Shana and an extremely patience Drew.
But I sense she is started to ease up.
Slowly but surely.
It's exciting to see how this couple is drawn to each other.
Michael
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Thank you for understanding Shana. I took a hit on her earlier. This reviewer wanted Shana to take action. That's not who she is.
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Your reviewer is just getting impatient.
Great things take time.
Comment from Zue65
Nothing is wrong here, as always you did an excellent job exploring the theme of cultural differences between the Jews and the West as presented in this story, where I supposed a love story will soon bloom, to give way for the marriage of the East and West, is truly an exciting plot to look forward to. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Nothing is wrong here, as always you did an excellent job exploring the theme of cultural differences between the Jews and the West as presented in this story, where I supposed a love story will soon bloom, to give way for the marriage of the East and West, is truly an exciting plot to look forward to. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Drew?" After he turned around, Shana continued, "While I was hiding from the gunfire, I thought this is what my ancestors must have felt like hiding from the Nazi's." She blew out a deep breath. "Thank you for all you've done for Sarah and me."
"I don't know what to say."
"There's nothing to say. You had nothing to do with the genocide." Her lips formed a slight smile. "Again, thank you."
Anderson took a step toward her and stopped. "You're welcome. It's nothing special. Anybody would've done it. It's the right thing to do." He continued to the bathroom and closed the door. ' I was just reading about the horrors of the Nazi regime. This is a wonderful moving write Barbara thankyou so much for sharing your talent. Kindest regards Meia x
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Drew?" After he turned around, Shana continued, "While I was hiding from the gunfire, I thought this is what my ancestors must have felt like hiding from the Nazi's." She blew out a deep breath. "Thank you for all you've done for Sarah and me."
"I don't know what to say."
"There's nothing to say. You had nothing to do with the genocide." Her lips formed a slight smile. "Again, thank you."
Anderson took a step toward her and stopped. "You're welcome. It's nothing special. Anybody would've done it. It's the right thing to do." He continued to the bathroom and closed the door. ' I was just reading about the horrors of the Nazi regime. This is a wonderful moving write Barbara thankyou so much for sharing your talent. Kindest regards Meia x
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, I think you handled the action scene just fine. Not too much was said, but for what was actually going on.
I love the interaction between Drew and Shana. She certainly doesn't do much by way of being seductive. I'm still waiting for the romance to commence. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Hi Barbara, I think you handled the action scene just fine. Not too much was said, but for what was actually going on.
I love the interaction between Drew and Shana. She certainly doesn't do much by way of being seductive. I'm still waiting for the romance to commence. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sugarray77
I think you are doing a fine job in scene, sequence and character development. Your book, any book, is a moving and living thing until it is complete. I wish I had the courage and knowledge, as you do, to write at length. Well done!!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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I think you are doing a fine job in scene, sequence and character development. Your book, any book, is a moving and living thing until it is complete. I wish I had the courage and knowledge, as you do, to write at length. Well done!!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
It's nothing special. Anybody would've done it.
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Nobody I know COULD HAVE done that. Talk about false humility, Drew. You like that she's impressed with you--admit it.
Shana wears pajamas? Not a nightgown, at least mildly feminine. She is determined to chase away the most incredible man in the world. LOL! I love it. They will have such fun together WHEN they finally get together. :)
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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It's nothing special. Anybody would've done it.
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Nobody I know COULD HAVE done that. Talk about false humility, Drew. You like that she's impressed with you--admit it.
Shana wears pajamas? Not a nightgown, at least mildly feminine. She is determined to chase away the most incredible man in the world. LOL! I love it. They will have such fun together WHEN they finally get together. :)
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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They will have fun. I just need to be careful how i present it. I have to keep Shana in character. LOL Thank you.Dre