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Perennials of War

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Is Anderson a gallant knight? Can he recover Shan

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Comment from Sasha
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This is another great chapter with a superb explanation of the problem between Shana and Anderson developing a relationship. The nurses were foolish and rude to gossip about Anderson and I understand Shana's feeling of not being in his social group. Clearly, this is not a problem for Anderson and he will have to find a way to address this issue with her. I am sorry I have taken so long to get to this post, I am having my eye exam tomorrow and, hopefully will have glasses within a day two.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
    I am do happy that you are back and feeling like review. I so missed your insight. After I review some more, I will post.
Comment from Curly Girly
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Hi, Barbara!
This is a well-written chapter in which I spotted no spags.
Shana was upset after hearing the nurses talk. Life can be complicated and she's young and emotional but things will come right.
Nicole

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
    I heard a rumor that Anderson gently takes care of the nurses. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Realist101
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Hi Barbara...What impressive dialogue! I'm always amazed by those who can 'tell' a story like this. I enjoyed the part where the elderly had to leave. I have cataracts and am due for surgery and always try to get home before dark because of the lights. :/ No fair. Scary. But as a victim of gossip I can really appreciate this chapter. S.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
    Thank you for the kind and realistic review.
Comment from Jay Squires
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An excellent chapter, Barbara. I like the subtle tension between Anderson and Shana, especially the way you use Hannah as a sort of lens.

A solid 6 chapter.

He's not be from around here." [I'm assuming an intended colloquialism here. Correct?]


 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
    Oh so true. I always appreciate hearing from you.
Comment from mbroyles2
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Looks like Drew is getting ready to face Shana's father.
Good for him!
You have presented this romance inside a suspenseful drama.
Not always an easy thing to do, but you've done it well.
I've enjoyed reading it.
Michael

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
    Michael, I really appreciate hearing from you. Thank you.l
Comment from Writingfundimension
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Hi, Barbara

The 'Cinderella' position of Shana and the handsome billionaire she doesn't feel would honestly find anything attractive about her is romance fiction at its finest! Especially after she hears all the things the nurses, etc. are saying about him. Shana obviously feels being pragmatic is the best way to keep her heart from being broken. I'm really rooting for this couple. Excellent chapter.

:) Bev

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
    I'm cheering for them too. I hope they can pull it off. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Writingfundimension on 15-Feb-2018
    Always a pleasure, Barbara. :) Bev
Comment from Mustang Patty
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Hi, Barbara;
Another great chapter and a good explanation of the problem of a nice Jewish girl dating outside of her faith. Too many people think this is just old-fashioned, but do not see the issue has to do with bloodlines, religion, and tradition.

Great job and I look forward to more,

~patty~


 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
    Thank you for understanding. I received a review pretty much stating that Shana needs to tell her dad to get lost. I tried to explain, gently, that Shana can't do that because of the way she was brought up.
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hi Barb fun to read the dialogue between the nursed
Nurses should know not to gossip I have learned its like grape vine when it gets to the end of the grape vine isn't the same story.
Gert

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
    Oh so true. Your wisdom shines through even with reviews. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Gert sherwood on 13-Feb-2018
    You are welcome Barb
    Gert
Comment from George Jr
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I like the way this is written. Its easy to follow, very descriptive and allows for a connection to the characters. Well done, thank you for posting.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
    Thank you for the encouragement.
reply by George Jr on 13-Feb-2018
    Thank you for the work. I've written a couple poems but not yet ready to attempt a book. I applaud the commitment.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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That would be so upsetting for anyone who overheard gossip like that. Poor Shana. I think she will have to start developing a thicker skin. Now what is Anderson up to? Something that Shana isn't too happy about, whatever it is. Excellent part again, my friend. Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
    Thank you for the encouragement. I think Benjamin will add to the suspense.