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Perennials of War

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Is Anderson a gallant knight? Can he recover Shan

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Comment from Sasha
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It seems Anderson has his hands full, finding a qualified lawyer and helping Emily adjust to living with him. She has clearly been spoiled and needs some readjusting to his expectations.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 28-Jan-2018
    I have a feeling things will come to a head. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Excellent part, Barbara, I'm in Spain so short and sweet. I'm glad Anderson is going to continue helping and I hope Shana let's him! Be back next week xxx Sandra

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
    I have a great vacation. Thank you for taking time to review.
Comment from Walu Feral
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G'day Barbara.

"One question at a time." After a short pause, he said," (lol)

"Tiramisus." (Yum! I tried that in Australia last time I was there and it's very nice. Haven't been able to find it here though.)

"Can Aunt Helen put some chocolate in it? It tastes like milk." (Hahaha! I like the way you add her to the story.)

"White milk is fine." Emily pouted, as he continued, "That's why I want to hire an attorney who specializes in these types of situations." (Funnily, to me that sounds like he's hiring an attorney about the milk/chocolate situation. Maybe it's just me though.)

Well, it seems they are getting closer. The woman in Cal. is a great find and hopefully it can help.

Another very good chapter, mate. Well done.

Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
    Thank you for your personal comments on my post. I love them. LOL
Comment from mmonaghan777
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I love the banter between parents and child in between the adult conversation attempting to solve the receipt and lawyer problem.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
    Thank you for the kind review. Raising four boys, we had similar conversations.
Comment from MTF1955
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Story flowed nicely even though I'm catching it in the middle. The characters feel real and the dialogue true. Just this sentence: "I agree, since he specializes in divorce and custody and they in business deals. Nice job Mary

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Barbara, this is a great continuation to the story. I suppose he could have bought it legally without knowing it was actually stolen goods. Well, I'll have to read more of this fascinating story. All the best. Ulla;)xx

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
    I hope we find out soon. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mbroyles2
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I love reading this exciting take and the interactions between so many characters in the penthouse adds to the pleasure. Great suspense!
You pack so much in short snappy chapters
Michael

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
    Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
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Oh yes my friend this is well written the clue will be in the receipt that's if there is one anything could happen he could try to forge a receipt I enjoyed look forward to the next chapter sorry I am behind regards Jill

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
    Hopefully we find out soon about the receipt. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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It's quite likely that he bought it and has a receipt. He would not know it was stolen and thought it was a legitimate deal. Still, he loses all that money. I guess someone has to lose in this dispute. But he won't want to be the one and will fight for "his" property, I think.

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
    We'll find out, someday. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from apky
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Excellent, well written and enjoyable.

My suggestions, for what they're worth, are below.

"I agree, since he specializes in divorce and custody and they (are?) in business deals.

"I'll see you at breakfast." Shana went to her room. "I doubt I'll get much sleep." ~ since she adds that second sentence, it would probably be better to say she "headed to" instead of "went to her room".

Unless she spoke to herself.

"Tiramisus." Are you sure tiramisu has a plural form?

"I can't afford a specialized attorney(,) or any(,) for that matter."

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
    I have made some of the corrections you suggested. You're correct tiramisu does not have a plural. I had to look that one up. Thank you for the catches.