Perennials of War
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29 total reviews
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Barbara;
it seems as though the path to getting the picture back is paved with danger and some intrigue. I was hoping you were leading up to something like this.
Looking forward to reading more,
~patty~
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Hi Barbara;
it seems as though the path to getting the picture back is paved with danger and some intrigue. I was hoping you were leading up to something like this.
Looking forward to reading more,
~patty~
Comment Written 15-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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There will be different areas that will have danger and intrigue, but it's still a romance with a plot. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello BARBARA.WILKEY,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction moving ahead with live dialogues!
Impressive and matching the theme phraseology.
Smooth, spontaneous, and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end leading to more interesting parts.
Undoubtedly, worth enjoying.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Hello BARBARA.WILKEY,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction moving ahead with live dialogues!
Impressive and matching the theme phraseology.
Smooth, spontaneous, and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end leading to more interesting parts.
Undoubtedly, worth enjoying.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good write with great storyline and imagery, The story a joy to read and needs no edit.
A well d
. A well descipted
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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A good write with great storyline and imagery, The story a joy to read and needs no edit.
A well d
. A well descipted
Comment Written 14-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from pbomar1115
I got interested right away because the story moves. I couldn't decide if the three guys were the law or what, but I look forward to more. Also, I love the writing, it is clean with no unnecessary words.
Phillip
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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I got interested right away because the story moves. I couldn't decide if the three guys were the law or what, but I look forward to more. Also, I love the writing, it is clean with no unnecessary words.
Phillip
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome.
Phillip
Comment from jadapenn
Very interesting so far. I have just popped in to see what some of my good friends are doing. It's been a long time.
You're doing well with this, Barbara. No suggestions for improvement.
Luv jada
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Very interesting so far. I have just popped in to see what some of my good friends are doing. It's been a long time.
You're doing well with this, Barbara. No suggestions for improvement.
Luv jada
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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I have missed you and have wondered about you and said prayers. Thank you
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Barbara.
"When Philip bent to check the last man for an ankle weapon, the man attempted to grab Philip's gun." (Oops! Could be a big mistake.)
(Yep, lucky he wasn't shot.)
"Let's go. I need (to) talk to your boss." Anderson nodded toward the restaurant. "Move!" he yelled."
"You'd better tell Kuznetsov to come out (to the) sidewalk to talk with us."
"As he pressed it against the(-the +his) nose, he pointed at Philip. "That moron broke my freaking nose. I need a doctor."
"Gentlemen, there's no need for guns. We're all friends." (You think... Rusky? I don't.)
A wonderful, suspenseful chapter with great dialogue and action. I don't think any money will be changing hands somehow though.
Great work.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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G'day Barbara.
"When Philip bent to check the last man for an ankle weapon, the man attempted to grab Philip's gun." (Oops! Could be a big mistake.)
(Yep, lucky he wasn't shot.)
"Let's go. I need (to) talk to your boss." Anderson nodded toward the restaurant. "Move!" he yelled."
"You'd better tell Kuznetsov to come out (to the) sidewalk to talk with us."
"As he pressed it against the(-the +his) nose, he pointed at Philip. "That moron broke my freaking nose. I need a doctor."
"Gentlemen, there's no need for guns. We're all friends." (You think... Rusky? I don't.)
A wonderful, suspenseful chapter with great dialogue and action. I don't think any money will be changing hands somehow though.
Great work.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the catches, I have made the corrections.
Comment from bob cullen
Barbara, your writing never disappoints. I must also comment on your comment regarding Irma. That says a lot about you. It shows you as a caring and thoughtful person.
In the sixth paragraph commencing: 'You'd better tell Kuz...' I think you've missed a couple of words between 'come out' and 'sidewalk.'
Have you published anything other than 'Two Tattered Hearts?'
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Barbara, your writing never disappoints. I must also comment on your comment regarding Irma. That says a lot about you. It shows you as a caring and thoughtful person.
In the sixth paragraph commencing: 'You'd better tell Kuz...' I think you've missed a couple of words between 'come out' and 'sidewalk.'
Have you published anything other than 'Two Tattered Hearts?'
Comment Written 12-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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I have made the correction. I am about ready to publish Savannah Love. I think it will titled Secretes of my Confederate Soldier. I need to make a few more corrections, but time is an issue, then it will be out on Kindle and hard copy. I appreciate you asking.
Comment from Caveman1
Very well written piece of historical fiction. I could not seem to find any misspellings. My grammar skills are not that great yet, but I did not find any errors in terms of grammar. Word usage seems to be your strong suite. I enjoyed very much reading this chapter of your book. Please by all means keep on being creative and write more!!!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
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Very well written piece of historical fiction. I could not seem to find any misspellings. My grammar skills are not that great yet, but I did not find any errors in terms of grammar. Word usage seems to be your strong suite. I enjoyed very much reading this chapter of your book. Please by all means keep on being creative and write more!!!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging words.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Barbara,
Nice piece of action described in this instalment. Swift and brutal. Very nice.
"Let's go. I need talk to your boss." - need to talk?
"You'd better tell Kuznetsov to come out sidewalk to talk with us - to the / out on the sidewalk?
Anderson has always been very well spoken to I doubt he'd clip words like this.
the night November 9, 1938 - would it be November 9th?
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Hi Barbara,
Nice piece of action described in this instalment. Swift and brutal. Very nice.
"Let's go. I need talk to your boss." - need to talk?
"You'd better tell Kuznetsov to come out sidewalk to talk with us - to the / out on the sidewalk?
Anderson has always been very well spoken to I doubt he'd clip words like this.
the night November 9, 1938 - would it be November 9th?
Comment Written 12-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for the catches. I appreciate the help. I was wondering about the 9th. I had been corrected on it and changed i t.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Everyone has an opinion, and that's simply what it is, someone's opinion, neither right nor wrong. But as a fan of your stories, and in appreciation of the standards in which you write, I would like to offer my humble opinion on something. Of course, I'm assuming you have never been in such a situation; but unfortunately, I have, more than once. Two men with guns can't contain five armed men, and especially, when one goes to pat down the five. This would be the best chance they could hope for to overtake the point man and tackle the searcher. Maybe three men could be detained in this manner, but no more. Besides, they never would have all came out together to follow them. The tails would have been in place before the pursued exited the restaurant. Three separate, or six in with groups of twos, all from different directions or staked out in opposite areas. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
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Everyone has an opinion, and that's simply what it is, someone's opinion, neither right nor wrong. But as a fan of your stories, and in appreciation of the standards in which you write, I would like to offer my humble opinion on something. Of course, I'm assuming you have never been in such a situation; but unfortunately, I have, more than once. Two men with guns can't contain five armed men, and especially, when one goes to pat down the five. This would be the best chance they could hope for to overtake the point man and tackle the searcher. Maybe three men could be detained in this manner, but no more. Besides, they never would have all came out together to follow them. The tails would have been in place before the pursued exited the restaurant. Three separate, or six in with groups of twos, all from different directions or staked out in opposite areas. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
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I had three men, against five, does that make a difference. I appreciate your help.
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Three men could contain five. However, why would anyone send followers right out behind those they are wanting to follow? Maybe one might follow them out, and two sets of two having vantage points from different angles and to avoid being noticed? Not all together. I'm sure you are probably thinking, what a nutcase, what does it matter? Wanting me to just shut up and let you tell your story. LOL! Thanks for always being so nice and polite, and for sharing your enjoyable stories. :-)
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I post my posts for the reason to get honest answers. I always appreciate them. I am thinking about it and wondering how to handle it.