Perennials of War
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Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
"It won't look quite so obvious." Philip followed behi (missing some letters)
No, but thank you."
p
"Would you like me to sit with you?" (remove p)
Interesting chapter as always. Enjoy your vacation, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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"It won't look quite so obvious." Philip followed behi (missing some letters)
No, but thank you."
p
"Would you like me to sit with you?" (remove p)
Interesting chapter as always. Enjoy your vacation, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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I don't know what happened. The last time I checked those areas were correct. I'm so glad you caught those.
Comment from smbau
The plot and setting of the story is based in the den. Flow of content is organized well. Like your play with suspense elements in the story.
"Philip followed [behi]" you probably mean "Philip followed behind"
""No, but thank you."
[p]
"Would you like me to sit with you?"" - I do not know the role of letter p in this sentence.
Overall, the story still leaves the reader in suspense and looking forward to read the next chapter.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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The plot and setting of the story is based in the den. Flow of content is organized well. Like your play with suspense elements in the story.
"Philip followed [behi]" you probably mean "Philip followed behind"
""No, but thank you."
[p]
"Would you like me to sit with you?"" - I do not know the role of letter p in this sentence.
Overall, the story still leaves the reader in suspense and looking forward to read the next chapter.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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I don't know what happened. The last time I checked those areas were correct. I'm so glad you caught those.
Comment from Lilol
Nice work. So far this is pretty nice. I did as you asked and read some parts before and overall nice. You're a good writer, but you forgot to mention the parts about the Nazis gassing prisoners to death.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Nice work. So far this is pretty nice. I did as you asked and read some parts before and overall nice. You're a good writer, but you forgot to mention the parts about the Nazis gassing prisoners to death.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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I didn't mention that on purpose because it doesn't move the story along. Thank you for the review.
Comment from Sisco Molinas
"No, but thank you."
p
"Would you like me to sit with you?"
The "p" between lines seems out of place.
she's trying to get her families painting back
families should be family's
This is the first I read of the story and I feel like I am missing a lot of back story so it was hard to get into.
And "Chapter Elf part drei" ??? is that a typo or a different language for Chapter Eleven part 3?
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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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"No, but thank you."
p
"Would you like me to sit with you?"
The "p" between lines seems out of place.
she's trying to get her families painting back
families should be family's
This is the first I read of the story and I feel like I am missing a lot of back story so it was hard to get into.
And "Chapter Elf part drei" ??? is that a typo or a different language for Chapter Eleven part 3?
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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I don't know what happened. The last time I checked those areas were correct. I'm so glad you caught those. I have already used all versions of Chapter number and part number. FS won't allow a person to repeat it even if it was years ago.
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing this latest chapter in spite of your technology issues. I did spot a few places where there are stray characters, but I imagine you will go back and clean up the copy when you are back on your PC.
The story continues to move along, and I'm glad Shana was able to share why the painting is important to her,
~patty~
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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thank you for sharing this latest chapter in spite of your technology issues. I did spot a few places where there are stray characters, but I imagine you will go back and clean up the copy when you are back on your PC.
The story continues to move along, and I'm glad Shana was able to share why the painting is important to her,
~patty~
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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This post has been cleaned up. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Asyraf N. Jamsari
This is a well written chapter. I find the use of characters is so interesting, I can see you are very creative and imaginative as well. The dialogues are simple but well thought. Nice choice of words and nice flow. Looking forward for the next one. Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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This is a well written chapter. I find the use of characters is so interesting, I can see you are very creative and imaginative as well. The dialogues are simple but well thought. Nice choice of words and nice flow. Looking forward for the next one. Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
"Earlier this evening Philip asked why this painting was so important to me when it wasn't to my father."
Philip nodded. "I did."
"I have a roundabout answer but it's the only answer I have. My ancestors went through so much to make sure I had freedom and not have to live under tyranny. The very least I can do to repay them is to recover what was stolen." Shana wiped away tears in her eyes. Such a moving piece of writing as always Ms. Wilkey, you have such talent for bringing your characters to life with immense pathos. Well done this is als always up to your very high standards Kindest regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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"Earlier this evening Philip asked why this painting was so important to me when it wasn't to my father."
Philip nodded. "I did."
"I have a roundabout answer but it's the only answer I have. My ancestors went through so much to make sure I had freedom and not have to live under tyranny. The very least I can do to repay them is to recover what was stolen." Shana wiped away tears in her eyes. Such a moving piece of writing as always Ms. Wilkey, you have such talent for bringing your characters to life with immense pathos. Well done this is als always up to your very high standards Kindest regards Meia xx
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Well, there it is. Her reason, although it still doesn't really explain yet why it's so important to her but not her father - maybe he just doesn't care as much...lol
"It won't look quite so obvious." Philip followed behi - behind.
"No, but thank you."
p
"Would you like me to sit with you?"
- delete the 'p' from the clear line.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Hi there,
Well, there it is. Her reason, although it still doesn't really explain yet why it's so important to her but not her father - maybe he just doesn't care as much...lol
"It won't look quite so obvious." Philip followed behi - behind.
"No, but thank you."
p
"Would you like me to sit with you?"
- delete the 'p' from the clear line.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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I don't know what happened. The last time I checked those areas were correct. I'm so glad you caught those.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, it's nice to find out you were able to post while on vacation and I could get my regular Barbara Wilkey story fix. Hope you are having another wonderful vacation. :-)
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Well, it's nice to find out you were able to post while on vacation and I could get my regular Barbara Wilkey story fix. Hope you are having another wonderful vacation. :-)
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from bookishfabler
Another good chapter. I found a few little nits.
"It won't look quite so obvious." Philip followed behi ( think you meant "behind.")
"No, but thank you."
p
"Would you like me to sit with you?" (A stray letter P here.)
"I have a roundabout answer(,) but it's the only answer I have.
hugs Heidi
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Another good chapter. I found a few little nits.
"It won't look quite so obvious." Philip followed behi ( think you meant "behind.")
"No, but thank you."
p
"Would you like me to sit with you?" (A stray letter P here.)
"I have a roundabout answer(,) but it's the only answer I have.
hugs Heidi
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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I don't know what happened. The last time I checked those areas were correct. I'm so glad you caught those.
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I'm very sorry. It has been a crazy month. Lots going on. I also haven't had time to come on site. I see 47 messages and there is no way I can read all these. Life gets in the way of enjoyment. My apologies for being absent for a while.