Perennials of War
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Comment from Heidi M
Benjamin is uncomfortable with the living situation so it was nice of Jane to show him how far away Shana's room was from Anderson's. However, they are still under one roof and as he stated, 'Modern ways are not our ways.'
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2017
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Benjamin is uncomfortable with the living situation so it was nice of Jane to show him how far away Shana's room was from Anderson's. However, they are still under one roof and as he stated, 'Modern ways are not our ways.'
Comment Written 13-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, :)
I found one error: "Mom is on a bacation (vacation). I think she's going to Figgy." I like the description of the bedroom.
I hope you have a good week :)
Rasmine :)
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2017
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Hello, :)
I found one error: "Mom is on a bacation (vacation). I think she's going to Figgy." I like the description of the bedroom.
I hope you have a good week :)
Rasmine :)
Comment Written 13-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2017
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Bacation is on purpose. It's corrected in the next sentence. Thank you for the kind review.
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Okay, I thought so, but the 'b' and 'v' key are right next to each other.
Comment from mbroyles2
Shana papa is a little skeptical of her living arrangements but he can argue that they aren't grand.
Emily is a cute character and steals the scene.
Superb job so far with this one.
Michael
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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Shana papa is a little skeptical of her living arrangements but he can argue that they aren't grand.
Emily is a cute character and steals the scene.
Superb job so far with this one.
Michael
Comment Written 13-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from kriver
Hi
Good story line
But it sure it seems like it is taking aloooooooooonnnnnnng
time to get to any real action.
Then I realized several of the writes posted
really must make up just one chapter in the book.
Is that assumption correct?
Best regards,
K River
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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Hi
Good story line
But it sure it seems like it is taking aloooooooooonnnnnnng
time to get to any real action.
Then I realized several of the writes posted
really must make up just one chapter in the book.
Is that assumption correct?
Best regards,
K River
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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Yes, three or four posts go into one chapter. I divide it up for easier read and more pumps on FS. That's why I label the parts. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend you move this story along well with the tour of the building Shana fathers and brothers concern are true to life any family would be concerned by this situation. I enjoyed well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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Hello my friend you move this story along well with the tour of the building Shana fathers and brothers concern are true to life any family would be concerned by this situation. I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from lalajovanoski
This is excellent!! I must keep on reading for more! Worthy of a sis star rating for sure!! Good flow throughout and excellent use of imagery. Great dialogue. Thanks for sharing this
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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This is excellent!! I must keep on reading for more! Worthy of a sis star rating for sure!! Good flow throughout and excellent use of imagery. Great dialogue. Thanks for sharing this
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Ben Colder
Now lets see what happens since Poppa shows up on the scene. A tour of the place. Sounds interesting. You were lost with a great imagination here for sure. LOL. Good one Barb.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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Now lets see what happens since Poppa shows up on the scene. A tour of the place. Sounds interesting. You were lost with a great imagination here for sure. LOL. Good one Barb.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. I want my house to be that large. LOL Oh yeah, somebody to clean and cook.
Comment from royowen
I love the expression, "our ways are not the modern ways" very Jewish, but very sensible! Poor dad Benjamin, he doesn't like travel, but he's handing the niceties well, hasn't really been filled in yet, but a bit alarmed by the "divorcee" with small child, he'll work it out, it does complicate things however. Fascinating to see you write the next episode, dear Barbara, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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I love the expression, "our ways are not the modern ways" very Jewish, but very sensible! Poor dad Benjamin, he doesn't like travel, but he's handing the niceties well, hasn't really been filled in yet, but a bit alarmed by the "divorcee" with small child, he'll work it out, it does complicate things however. Fascinating to see you write the next episode, dear Barbara, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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Well done
Comment from Curly Girly
Hi, Barbara. This is a well-written chapter.
Yes, one has to be careful of what society thinks:
Benjamin avoided eye contact. "I'm sure you know how it looks, don't you? You're staying alone with a divorced man."
Poor Emily. She might be coming to live with her father. It appears her mother is a woman of ill-repute:
"I've met her briefly. My first impression is that no child should be with that woman."
Nicole
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hi, Barbara. This is a well-written chapter.
Yes, one has to be careful of what society thinks:
Benjamin avoided eye contact. "I'm sure you know how it looks, don't you? You're staying alone with a divorced man."
Poor Emily. She might be coming to live with her father. It appears her mother is a woman of ill-repute:
"I've met her briefly. My first impression is that no child should be with that woman."
Nicole
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from bookishfabler
Oh yes, the strict Jewish traditions. I worked for three Orthodox Jewish Brothers for over 7 years. Best years of work ever. Nicest bosses.
Helen carried in a tray with corned beef on rye sandwiches, fresh fruit, and vegetables and set it on a table. "I hope these will work." (Oh, I want some.)
Now I'm surprised they took her food since she is not orthodox or this is not kosher.
hugs Heidi
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Oh yes, the strict Jewish traditions. I worked for three Orthodox Jewish Brothers for over 7 years. Best years of work ever. Nicest bosses.
Helen carried in a tray with corned beef on rye sandwiches, fresh fruit, and vegetables and set it on a table. "I hope these will work." (Oh, I want some.)
Now I'm surprised they took her food since she is not orthodox or this is not kosher.
hugs Heidi
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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My research said they could eat corned beef on rye and long as it wasn't on the Sabbath. That was the point Philip was trying to slyly make in the previous post. Because she served Jeremy ham and cheese. Thank you for the kind review.
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Now ham I know is a no no. LOL.