Perennials of War
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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi (*>*)
= Leave it to little ones to ask questions.
= It will take me a bit to get the drift of the story again, since I've been gone a while.
= I enjoyed this chapter--informative.
= Nice to be back, but will be here and there in limited time-frames.
= I'm still editing to publish.
= I will happily review those who follow me, but because of limited time-frame,
will not be able to review ALL of each person posts.
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Cheers ... Jax (*>*)
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017
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Hi (*>*)
= Leave it to little ones to ask questions.
= It will take me a bit to get the drift of the story again, since I've been gone a while.
= I enjoyed this chapter--informative.
= Nice to be back, but will be here and there in limited time-frames.
= I'm still editing to publish.
= I will happily review those who follow me, but because of limited time-frame,
will not be able to review ALL of each person posts.
= => LATEST PUBLISHING <= =
= 1 = Heartfelt II - Heart and Soul (Poetry)
= 2 = Dare To Dream (Book 1 of 'The Allister Saga)
= 3 = Lethal Deception (Contemporary Novel)
= => TO BE RELEASED in a few days <= =
= 4 = Maybe Someday (Book II of Allister Saga)
Cheers ... Jax (*>*)
Comment Written 08-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017
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I'm glad you found time to review my story. I always enjoy hearing from you.
Comment from Rasmine
I hadn't found any mistakes. Yay! School's out. Have a wonderful summer.
I never heard the hat with the star of David called a kippah, only yarmulke. I had a female friend that used to wear the hat all the time.
:)
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2017
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I hadn't found any mistakes. Yay! School's out. Have a wonderful summer.
I never heard the hat with the star of David called a kippah, only yarmulke. I had a female friend that used to wear the hat all the time.
:)
Comment Written 07-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from MelB
Hi Barb, a nice continuation of the story. It's nice to meet the family. A good description of the Kippah, and I like that he made her wash her hands before touching it.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Hi Barb, a nice continuation of the story. It's nice to meet the family. A good description of the Kippah, and I like that he made her wash her hands before touching it.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Heidi M
I liked Emily's innocent question about the yarmulke and I really liked Benjamin's gentle response. I also thought Shana's exuberant welcome of her father was a nice touch.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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I liked Emily's innocent question about the yarmulke and I really liked Benjamin's gentle response. I also thought Shana's exuberant welcome of her father was a nice touch.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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I try to make my characters real. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sis Cat
Wow, Shana's father and brother! Now this story is getting sticky like syrup on Emily's fingers. It came as a surprise to me that Benjamin said, "I don't know why she thinks we need that painting back. She should have just left well enough alone," because I assumed he would want the painting back as much as or even more than his daughter wants it returned. But you make it clear that he is concerned about the safety of his daughter above all else. It will be quite interesting to see what father and daughter say on this matter.
SPAG wise, I only suggest you add a comma: "No(,) sir, . . ."
Thank you for sharing another thrilling, well-paced chapter.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Wow, Shana's father and brother! Now this story is getting sticky like syrup on Emily's fingers. It came as a surprise to me that Benjamin said, "I don't know why she thinks we need that painting back. She should have just left well enough alone," because I assumed he would want the painting back as much as or even more than his daughter wants it returned. But you make it clear that he is concerned about the safety of his daughter above all else. It will be quite interesting to see what father and daughter say on this matter.
SPAG wise, I only suggest you add a comma: "No(,) sir, . . ."
Thank you for sharing another thrilling, well-paced chapter.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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I have added that comma. I am horrible with those little stinkers. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mbroyles2
Such a great continuation of this story. We get to meet Shana's brother and father.
Even Emily was intrigued.
Love the pace of this story and the wonderful dialogue.
Michael
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Such a great continuation of this story. We get to meet Shana's brother and father.
Even Emily was intrigued.
Love the pace of this story and the wonderful dialogue.
Michael
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from light
Now we are meeting the family. And it will get more interesting. I can't wait to hear their story. Nice touch with the Kippah. It brings realism. Good job
Elaine
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Now we are meeting the family. And it will get more interesting. I can't wait to hear their story. Nice touch with the Kippah. It brings realism. Good job
Elaine
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written my friend and a very enjoyable chapter I like the detail about the Jewish gentle mans clothing and religion this story is building nicely regards Jill
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Yes this is well written my friend and a very enjoyable chapter I like the detail about the Jewish gentle mans clothing and religion this story is building nicely regards Jill
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, I loved the touch of Emily being curious about how the religions work and what the dress code is. If you don't ask,how will you ever learn? I loved it. I'm looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Hi Barbara, I loved the touch of Emily being curious about how the religions work and what the dress code is. If you don't ask,how will you ever learn? I loved it. I'm looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
What a nice touch you put into this chapter about Emily and her curious little mind about the Jewish visitors
( now are they new in your story?)
I found you chapter well written and why do you keep finding mistakes?
Gert
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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Hello Barb
What a nice touch you put into this chapter about Emily and her curious little mind about the Jewish visitors
( now are they new in your story?)
I found you chapter well written and why do you keep finding mistakes?
Gert
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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Yes the visitors are Shana's father and brother. Thank you for the kind review.