Perennials of War
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36 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
A nice relaxing Chapter to read
I'm putting together.
Shana wants to find her family's stolen relics
or is it just a plaiting that her parents had.
So Anderson is the one who is doing the search?
Gert
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Hello Barb
A nice relaxing Chapter to read
I'm putting together.
Shana wants to find her family's stolen relics
or is it just a plaiting that her parents had.
So Anderson is the one who is doing the search?
Gert
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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There are numerous more relics, but she has only found the painting so far.
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Good the painting is found
Gerrt
Comment from rtobaygo
Good afternoon, Barbara
Per usual, excellent dialogue and flow. The former helps the reader gain insight regarding your characters personalities. Love where Romeo follows Shana everywhere. I have two dogs that do the same. As I'm writing I have one behind me in the chair while the other is on my lap. Well done!
Take care and stay safe, Ray
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Good afternoon, Barbara
Per usual, excellent dialogue and flow. The former helps the reader gain insight regarding your characters personalities. Love where Romeo follows Shana everywhere. I have two dogs that do the same. As I'm writing I have one behind me in the chair while the other is on my lap. Well done!
Take care and stay safe, Ray
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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I have Harley, my dachshund, right behind me. He follows me every where too. LOL Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, I like the story a lot and this chapter brings it along a bit further. So the Sabbath is being observed, but what is to happen now? I'm looking forward to that. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Hi Barbara, I like the story a lot and this chapter brings it along a bit further. So the Sabbath is being observed, but what is to happen now? I'm looking forward to that. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from giraffmang
Good solid continuation of the plot here.
You didn't need to wait breakfast for me. - perhaps you didn't need to wait for me for breakfast? or wait on breakfast for me?
"You're apartment's very secure - Your.
"Shana, would you like some." - needs a question mark here.
I had to laugh at the bacon quip as I once worked with a lad of fourteen who seriously asked us where chicken came from!
lol
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Good solid continuation of the plot here.
You didn't need to wait breakfast for me. - perhaps you didn't need to wait for me for breakfast? or wait on breakfast for me?
"You're apartment's very secure - Your.
"Shana, would you like some." - needs a question mark here.
I had to laugh at the bacon quip as I once worked with a lad of fourteen who seriously asked us where chicken came from!
lol
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. I 've rewritten your first suggestion over and over again. LOL Thank you maybe this one will work. I have made the corrections.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
After everyone was served(,) Jane
Ha, it's easy to forget where certain foods come from (talking about the bacon in this case) I have to put my thinking cap on regularly as one of my daughter-in-laws is a Vegan - not an easy one to cook for.
A good chapter, Barbara - moving the story on.
Margaret
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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After everyone was served(,) Jane
Ha, it's easy to forget where certain foods come from (talking about the bacon in this case) I have to put my thinking cap on regularly as one of my daughter-in-laws is a Vegan - not an easy one to cook for.
A good chapter, Barbara - moving the story on.
Margaret
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello,
This story is very suspenseful and it's an interesting topic about the stolen art. You did a good job with all that research. Ending the Shabbat with the three stars was a good touch.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Hello,
This story is very suspenseful and it's an interesting topic about the stolen art. You did a good job with all that research. Ending the Shabbat with the three stars was a good touch.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sis Cat
I love nosy Jane and Helen with her bacon. I feel your story coming together here as a classic quest narrative not only to find the whereabouts of the painting, but is importance, And why Shana is being chased. I see Jane, Helen, and even Romeo as potential allies in Anderson's and Shana's quest, as Jane said, "Who knows what other valuable information I might be able to share." These characters delight me.
Thank you for sharing your engaging read. I look forward to more.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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I love nosy Jane and Helen with her bacon. I feel your story coming together here as a classic quest narrative not only to find the whereabouts of the painting, but is importance, And why Shana is being chased. I see Jane, Helen, and even Romeo as potential allies in Anderson's and Shana's quest, as Jane said, "Who knows what other valuable information I might be able to share." These characters delight me.
Thank you for sharing your engaging read. I look forward to more.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from barkingdog
A little transitional chapter is fine to fill us in on the Sabbath.
Delicious breakfast.
And then he's off to the museum.
It was nice of Drew to suggest buying Shana some more clothes, but she's practical and said she was fine and would launder what she had with her.
(A little insight into his generous and her frugal character.)
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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A little transitional chapter is fine to fill us in on the Sabbath.
Delicious breakfast.
And then he's off to the museum.
It was nice of Drew to suggest buying Shana some more clothes, but she's practical and said she was fine and would launder what she had with her.
(A little insight into his generous and her frugal character.)
Comment Written 09-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. The two different characters are going to struggle finding a common ground.
Comment from kriver
Hi Barbara,
I am coming into
the middle of this story.
I probably would read it
just because the
German shepherd dogs are involved.
However the chapter it self didn't have any action/ conflict that is what make s the read want to see what is going to happen. The more conflict the more excitement equals holding interest and keeping the reader turning pages. Maybe have a kid hit a baseball through the window and ball lands on Shana plate Romeo and the other dog see it and go after the ball taking breakfast with them
Best regards,
K River
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Hi Barbara,
I am coming into
the middle of this story.
I probably would read it
just because the
German shepherd dogs are involved.
However the chapter it self didn't have any action/ conflict that is what make s the read want to see what is going to happen. The more conflict the more excitement equals holding interest and keeping the reader turning pages. Maybe have a kid hit a baseball through the window and ball lands on Shana plate Romeo and the other dog see it and go after the ball taking breakfast with them
Best regards,
K River
Comment Written 09-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. If it doesn't add to the story, I don't write it in.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Looks like the group is settling in and finding a way to get to know each other, to find a sort of comfort zone. Poor Helen just doesn't seem to know how to make or understand food without pork. Great feel to the story,
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Looks like the group is settling in and finding a way to get to know each other, to find a sort of comfort zone. Poor Helen just doesn't seem to know how to make or understand food without pork. Great feel to the story,
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 09-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.