The Trip
When GPS doesn't give good directions.4 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
An excellent build-up to your finale, this story has all the horror features of being lost, is clearly expressed and a delightful, albeit tense, read. Well done and good luck! Debbie
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An excellent build-up to your finale, this story has all the horror features of being lost, is clearly expressed and a delightful, albeit tense, read. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, the is good but it seems to be missing needed elements to make the story compelling and for the reader to care about Sandy. I suggest, finding a reason for Sandy's trip. A good one, so the readers will understand her purpose and why she does just immediately turn around. Also, we don't know her, or anything invested in her. So, no connection is formed. You also should have a stronger ending.
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Hmm, the is good but it seems to be missing needed elements to make the story compelling and for the reader to care about Sandy. I suggest, finding a reason for Sandy's trip. A good one, so the readers will understand her purpose and why she does just immediately turn around. Also, we don't know her, or anything invested in her. So, no connection is formed. You also should have a stronger ending.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Lost Flash Fiction writing prompt. Well that was unexpected and fun. A bit of scariness this evening is just what I needed. I enjoyed your flash story and the ending had a good surprise twist to it. Thanks for sharing.
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An excellent entry for the Lost Flash Fiction writing prompt. Well that was unexpected and fun. A bit of scariness this evening is just what I needed. I enjoyed your flash story and the ending had a good surprise twist to it. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Even though this is flash fiction, it should still have appropriate paragraph breaks for the reader/thought processes... could even be used to give your ending more of an impact.. Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
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Even though this is flash fiction, it should still have appropriate paragraph breaks for the reader/thought processes... could even be used to give your ending more of an impact.. Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
