Bread on water
A haiku6 total reviews
Comment from forestport12
Fun and clever last line. From what I recall, that's what you want to achieve, something that has an interesting thought provoking play on words. Nice contrast on calm and clear versus disturbed and fowl.
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Fun and clever last line. From what I recall, that's what you want to achieve, something that has an interesting thought provoking play on words. Nice contrast on calm and clear versus disturbed and fowl.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, love your last line and alliteration in the second, I can imagine the state of the water after feeding, though it is fun, very well written and presented****kahpot
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Excellent, love your last line and alliteration in the second, I can imagine the state of the water after feeding, though it is fun, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL! Oh, I just love when a haiku catches me off-guard... great one here, Sir Roy!! ;) Thanx for that little (but oh so needed!) chuckle this evening, my friend! ;) Yvette
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LOL! Oh, I just love when a haiku catches me off-guard... great one here, Sir Roy!! ;) Thanx for that little (but oh so needed!) chuckle this evening, my friend! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
That is a very cute poem, Roy! Nice, light hearted and downright funny!! I loved the pun. Also loved the artwork. I could picture kids feeding the ducks and watching the water smoothly disturbed.
Take care,
Rhonda
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That is a very cute poem, Roy! Nice, light hearted and downright funny!! I loved the pun. Also loved the artwork. I could picture kids feeding the ducks and watching the water smoothly disturbed.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Roy,
I love this poem. It's witty and I love the play on words in the last line. The picture is a good match for the poem. Those three lines are very powerful.
Great job
Cecilia
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Roy,
I love this poem. It's witty and I love the play on words in the last line. The picture is a good match for the poem. Those three lines are very powerful.
Great job
Cecilia
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
Comment from DonandVicki
I raise ducks so your minimalist haiku is meaningful to me. Ducks are indeed fowl/foul, I change their pond water (Kiddy pool) several times a week and they love to eat mud.
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I raise ducks so your minimalist haiku is meaningful to me. Ducks are indeed fowl/foul, I change their pond water (Kiddy pool) several times a week and they love to eat mud.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024