The Incomparable Fanny Barnwarmer
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Comment from Bill Schott
This dialogue is utterly spellbinding, Jay. I cannot even imagine anyone other than this ancient lady speaking these lines. ........................................................
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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This dialogue is utterly spellbinding, Jay. I cannot even imagine anyone other than this ancient lady speaking these lines. ........................................................
Comment Written 11-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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She's not THAT ancient, Bill. She only has a few years on me. As far as the dialect goes, I think I channeled someone from Missouri to have it flow the way it did. LOL, Ancient! Harumph!
Jay
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I may have channeled Jane Pittman as a white woman.
Comment from Haylee Hemphill
Hello!
This is a well written script. A script is a challenge I have not yet tried to accomplish. Thank you for sharing this as well as teaching a little history lesson.
One Love
Haylee
reply by the author on 06-May-2022
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Hello!
This is a well written script. A script is a challenge I have not yet tried to accomplish. Thank you for sharing this as well as teaching a little history lesson.
One Love
Haylee
Comment Written 06-May-2022
reply by the author on 06-May-2022
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Many thanks, Haylee. You'll have to try a script. Once you get the formatting down, it's a piece of ... cowpie.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Jay,
It was worth the waiting, even though we're still not much closer to learning the "rest of the story". The reporter is doing his best to pry it out of Fanny. But not much luck there. She shoots so much slang his way. I don't know how he can decipher it all, and still keep plugging away. It's tense. And his time is running out. He doesn't want to take the train back home without the whole story, without the truth. He wants what the trial didn't reveal.
Nicely penned, Jay, as usual. Keep up the good work!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 06-May-2022
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Hi Jay,
It was worth the waiting, even though we're still not much closer to learning the "rest of the story". The reporter is doing his best to pry it out of Fanny. But not much luck there. She shoots so much slang his way. I don't know how he can decipher it all, and still keep plugging away. It's tense. And his time is running out. He doesn't want to take the train back home without the whole story, without the truth. He wants what the trial didn't reveal.
Nicely penned, Jay, as usual. Keep up the good work!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 06-May-2022
reply by the author on 06-May-2022
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You'll have a few links added to the chain next time ... though it won't likely be Saturday since I need to earn more funny money to promote it. Much obliged to have you read it, Kimbob. Please don't feel you need to give it a six, though.
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You don't write anything that isn't a six, Jay!
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Woe, powerful stuff. I appreciate you taking liberties with the English language to make Fanny more real than just a flat, one-dimensional character on a page.
The great depression was 1929 - 1939, so this fits in well with how people were thinking and feeling just before the bottom fell out.
spek-you-latin; took me a bit, but I finally got it. So many neat abortions of words; it makes it difficult but extremely fun to read: Pope Pius Ex-One, colat'rul, 'Mericas, persedins and far too many more for me to list. But I loved it, if only for the twisted vernacular.
You wrote like they spoke. That must have been difficult, if for no other reason than to come up with a spelling that would present the word in the manner you imagined it being said.
I kept getting confused about Mr. Allbright versus Fanny's Daddy. I know they are not the same person, but I think I would have to have had some exposure to the material prior to Act III to make better sense of it all. No problem, the story still gets through.
I thought at first that Mr. Albright was a 'Nigra" who had gotten lynched, and Fanny's Daddy was a man who could have prevented it but did nothing to try to. But the when I discover that leader Flourney wanted an introduction to Mr. Albright, I changed my mind.
There is a rather long speech by Fanny, in the middle of the piece, that describes how the "nigras' viewed fear and what they had to do to survive it. That throws the impact of this story right in my face. That must have been a terrible, terrible time in 'Merica's history.
I would like to read Acts I and II, if possible. are they on FanStory?
Good job Squires. I absolutely loved it and deeply appreciated all the obvious work that must have went into it just in creating another new dialect.
I have run out of 6 stars for this week otherwise this piece would certainly have gotten one.
Thank You
reply by the author on 06-May-2022
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Woe, powerful stuff. I appreciate you taking liberties with the English language to make Fanny more real than just a flat, one-dimensional character on a page.
The great depression was 1929 - 1939, so this fits in well with how people were thinking and feeling just before the bottom fell out.
spek-you-latin; took me a bit, but I finally got it. So many neat abortions of words; it makes it difficult but extremely fun to read: Pope Pius Ex-One, colat'rul, 'Mericas, persedins and far too many more for me to list. But I loved it, if only for the twisted vernacular.
You wrote like they spoke. That must have been difficult, if for no other reason than to come up with a spelling that would present the word in the manner you imagined it being said.
I kept getting confused about Mr. Allbright versus Fanny's Daddy. I know they are not the same person, but I think I would have to have had some exposure to the material prior to Act III to make better sense of it all. No problem, the story still gets through.
I thought at first that Mr. Albright was a 'Nigra" who had gotten lynched, and Fanny's Daddy was a man who could have prevented it but did nothing to try to. But the when I discover that leader Flourney wanted an introduction to Mr. Albright, I changed my mind.
There is a rather long speech by Fanny, in the middle of the piece, that describes how the "nigras' viewed fear and what they had to do to survive it. That throws the impact of this story right in my face. That must have been a terrible, terrible time in 'Merica's history.
I would like to read Acts I and II, if possible. are they on FanStory?
Good job Squires. I absolutely loved it and deeply appreciated all the obvious work that must have went into it just in creating another new dialect.
I have run out of 6 stars for this week otherwise this piece would certainly have gotten one.
Thank You
Comment Written 06-May-2022
reply by the author on 06-May-2022
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You made my evening, Gary ... even my week! Mr. Albright was a wealthy Britisher who came to America, married a "nigra" and treated her like a queen. Mr. Albright was lynched and Fanny's Daddy was coerced to to get Mr. Albright to open his door (since he recognized his neighbor) ... which allowed the mob to overpower him. If you would like to read the previous Acts you will find them under my portfolio: https://fanstory.com/chapterdetails.jsp?id=40757 You'll have to paste the link to your browser, but it will get you all the previous chapters.
I am stoked by your virtual six, Gary!
Comment from tfawcus
I love the richness in the way you render Miss Fanny's accent as in spek-you-latin! You've woven the history into this chapter cleverly and Miss Fanny's description of the coming Depression as a storm works beautifully in the context, with her father storing up the harvest against hard times to come, just as the Israelites did before the coming of the great plagues.
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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I love the richness in the way you render Miss Fanny's accent as in spek-you-latin! You've woven the history into this chapter cleverly and Miss Fanny's description of the coming Depression as a storm works beautifully in the context, with her father storing up the harvest against hard times to come, just as the Israelites did before the coming of the great plagues.
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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I'm glad you got the connection between Fanny's daddy and the Israelites in Egypt. I'm surprised you have a six left to give this late in the week. I'm lucky if I get through the week-end with 'em. Yours is very much appreciated, though.
Comment from Ulla
Oh, Jay, when you posted this, I had no sixes left, and I still don't have any to give this lovely write.
It is so interesting what is being revealed in this part. The truth is coming out little by little. Fanny is a hard nut to crack. It was a place full of tension in that part of the US, and it still is to a certain extent. The big depression is looming. Now what? Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Oh, Jay, when you posted this, I had no sixes left, and I still don't have any to give this lovely write.
It is so interesting what is being revealed in this part. The truth is coming out little by little. Fanny is a hard nut to crack. It was a place full of tension in that part of the US, and it still is to a certain extent. The big depression is looming. Now what? Ulla:)))
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Don't worry about the six. It's just important to me that you read it. Thank you for that. I'm pretty sure you're gonna like the next scene.
Comment from amahra
Great, Jay...this story within a story is really heating up nicely. However, this chapter made me want to yell at Fanny..."JUST TELL US ALREADY! LOL! I agree with the reporter. She really is dancing around telling us about the trail. Hurry up with the next chapter. Oh, love your picture. Who's the pretty lady?
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Great, Jay...this story within a story is really heating up nicely. However, this chapter made me want to yell at Fanny..."JUST TELL US ALREADY! LOL! I agree with the reporter. She really is dancing around telling us about the trail. Hurry up with the next chapter. Oh, love your picture. Who's the pretty lady?
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Ah, Amahra, thank you. I realize your impatience for Fanny to get on with it. You'll begin to see the reporter's persistence doubling down next scene. Your sixth star is lovely!
The pretty lady's my daughter. It was the afternoon of my granddaughter's (her daughter's) wedding. It's hard to believe her prettiness came partly from me.
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Yes, you're quite dashing. :))
Comment from Annmuma
WOW! I continue to hang on every word -- thinking I know where the story goes, and then there's a little turn here and another one there! Really, truly, great writing.
I feel as if I know these people and have a kinship with one and then with another.
Can you tell I am enjoying the story and each for scene two! ann
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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WOW! I continue to hang on every word -- thinking I know where the story goes, and then there's a little turn here and another one there! Really, truly, great writing.
I feel as if I know these people and have a kinship with one and then with another.
Can you tell I am enjoying the story and each for scene two! ann
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Ann, you make me so happy! I'm thrilled my play has some entertainment value for you. I think you'll like the next scene.
Comment from Cass Carlton
This is a commentary on a subject I know
little about. As such, I found it intensely
interesting. I know very little about the financial aspects of history, and the causes of the Great Depression are a closed book. To read of Charles Mitchell's bank is a revelation to me. The rest of the conversation about a lynching is horrific, as it describes in cold, clear detail what Fanny saw as a child. Her feelings about the cruelty of segregation and the bigotry of those opposed to integrated marriage are plain to see. The conversation between Fanny and a reporter from The New York Times is fascinating. She has all her faculties and she knows the reasons behind the things that happened back in 1929.It is a most interesting piece. I think I might read further. cheers Cass
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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This is a commentary on a subject I know
little about. As such, I found it intensely
interesting. I know very little about the financial aspects of history, and the causes of the Great Depression are a closed book. To read of Charles Mitchell's bank is a revelation to me. The rest of the conversation about a lynching is horrific, as it describes in cold, clear detail what Fanny saw as a child. Her feelings about the cruelty of segregation and the bigotry of those opposed to integrated marriage are plain to see. The conversation between Fanny and a reporter from The New York Times is fascinating. She has all her faculties and she knows the reasons behind the things that happened back in 1929.It is a most interesting piece. I think I might read further. cheers Cass
Comment Written 04-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Bless you, Cass. I sincerely hope you plan to continue on with my play. The next chapter promises to be revealing, and I hope entertaining. Cass, it sounds as though you spent a lot of time on this. That makes me so happy.
Comment from judiverse
I enjoyed Fanny's comments about reading the financial section. Fanny's father was pretty wise. Even if you've got the crops in, you can't let up. You never know what's ahead, like the tornado that took the roof off the barn. You can't always count on the government, either. Fanny had such a roundabout way of telling her story. Maybe she needs more prodding. Her recall of events is amazing, considering her age. Very memorable character. judi
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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I enjoyed Fanny's comments about reading the financial section. Fanny's father was pretty wise. Even if you've got the crops in, you can't let up. You never know what's ahead, like the tornado that took the roof off the barn. You can't always count on the government, either. Fanny had such a roundabout way of telling her story. Maybe she needs more prodding. Her recall of events is amazing, considering her age. Very memorable character. judi
Comment Written 04-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Yes, indeedee, Fanny needs a little prodding. She, and perhaps her creator, is in no particular hurry. We've got nowhere to go. Thanks, Judy for the six stars. That means something when it comes from a fellow playwright.
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You're welcome. It seems typical of Fanny to take her time in telling a story, but I believe that's the privilege of old age. judi