Drifting Snow
Rondeau34 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
Terrific Rondeau! I love the repeating line,
"as snow drifts down"
You cause me to think of my own childhood memories,
"Remembering my childhood where,
we threw snowballs with zeal and flair,
dear memories return en masse
as snow drifts down."
My pals and I would build snow forts, and suddenly the snowballs flew through the air, back and forth. We'd dig tunnels in 12-foot snowbanks like little moles. Our socks would slink from our feet, and gather in the toes of our boots. Our scarves would hang loosely from our red necks. And our mitts would be soaking wet. But we were having too much fun to notice.
And now I'm too old to have that kind of fun anymore. I can't even remember the last time I used a sled or toboggan, or skates for that matter.
" time is flitting by.. alas,
aged sand sifts through my hourglass;
each moment is unique and rare...
as snow drifts down."
I do have a pair of snowshoes though, and I even used them once... in 2014, I think. Maybe it's time to bring them out of the closet again. We just had a big snowstorm yesterday. So finally lots of snow on the ground. I'm pooped from shoveling... (getting too old for that, too).
"I'm nestled in my easy chair,
I watch fat flakes through frosted glass
I'm mesmerized."
Really nice poem, Melissa. I'm going to put it in my library!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Hi Melissa,
Terrific Rondeau! I love the repeating line,
"as snow drifts down"
You cause me to think of my own childhood memories,
"Remembering my childhood where,
we threw snowballs with zeal and flair,
dear memories return en masse
as snow drifts down."
My pals and I would build snow forts, and suddenly the snowballs flew through the air, back and forth. We'd dig tunnels in 12-foot snowbanks like little moles. Our socks would slink from our feet, and gather in the toes of our boots. Our scarves would hang loosely from our red necks. And our mitts would be soaking wet. But we were having too much fun to notice.
And now I'm too old to have that kind of fun anymore. I can't even remember the last time I used a sled or toboggan, or skates for that matter.
" time is flitting by.. alas,
aged sand sifts through my hourglass;
each moment is unique and rare...
as snow drifts down."
I do have a pair of snowshoes though, and I even used them once... in 2014, I think. Maybe it's time to bring them out of the closet again. We just had a big snowstorm yesterday. So finally lots of snow on the ground. I'm pooped from shoveling... (getting too old for that, too).
"I'm nestled in my easy chair,
I watch fat flakes through frosted glass
I'm mesmerized."
Really nice poem, Melissa. I'm going to put it in my library!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 08-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Hello KB. I so hope you get those snowshoes out so I can read poems about your adventures as you use them :). Thank you for your wonderful stories that you share as you review... I love them! Hugs, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Debbie Pope
I'm catching up on my reviews, and I am so glad that I did not miss this one. It's so pretty. It makes me want to nestle in a chair and not move until winter is over. The repeats fall gently on the ear, much as the snow fall out the window.
Just lovely, Melissa.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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I'm catching up on my reviews, and I am so glad that I did not miss this one. It's so pretty. It makes me want to nestle in a chair and not move until winter is over. The repeats fall gently on the ear, much as the snow fall out the window.
Just lovely, Melissa.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Thank you, my friend. I love watching snowfalls and I was in the moment as I wrote this one. We have had lovely snow this week.. I'm so glad you enjoyed it, Debbie.
Melissa
Comment from Carol Clark2
I like this rondeau, and you've worked the form quite well. I especially enjoy the repeated phrase, and the ethereal white love affair. You made a good transition, in the last stanza, to thoughts of time, with unique and rare moments, as the snow continues to drift. Thanks for sharing. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2022
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I like this rondeau, and you've worked the form quite well. I especially enjoy the repeated phrase, and the ethereal white love affair. You made a good transition, in the last stanza, to thoughts of time, with unique and rare moments, as the snow continues to drift. Thanks for sharing. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 05-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2022
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Thank you very much Carol. Your points and review really encourage me!!
Melissa
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You're welcome. Glad you feel encouraged! Blessings. Carol
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I love this poem--the rhyme, the alliteration, the meter, the imagery. You captured it all with beauty, to even include memory and a thought for the future.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2022
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I love this poem--the rhyme, the alliteration, the meter, the imagery. You captured it all with beauty, to even include memory and a thought for the future.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2022
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Hi Verna. I am delighted that you enjoyed this Rondeau. Thanks so much.
Melissa
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Comment from Eternal Muse
Your lovely Rondeau made me miss the snow so much. I lived on the East Coast for over 30 years and now live in Florida.
I love Rondeau and other French forms for their musicality and elegance. Superb rhyming, imagery and visuals.
I love that artwork!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2022
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Your lovely Rondeau made me miss the snow so much. I lived on the East Coast for over 30 years and now live in Florida.
I love Rondeau and other French forms for their musicality and elegance. Superb rhyming, imagery and visuals.
I love that artwork!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2022
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Hello there! Thank you very much for the lovely review!
Melissa
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice and well written Rondeau poem you have penned about the drifting snow. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery that goes with your words so well. Thank you for the notes of how to write a Rondeau. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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This is a very nice and well written Rondeau poem you have penned about the drifting snow. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery that goes with your words so well. Thank you for the notes of how to write a Rondeau. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, Teri!! So glad you liked it.
Melissa
Comment from Patty Palmer
An enjoyable read about the snow drifting down and covering the ground. It can snow as long as I can sit by the fireplace and stay toasty warm. I saw a sweater at the store and it said. "Let it snow! Let it snow! Let it snow... Someplace Else!" LOL Stay healthy~
Patty
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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An enjoyable read about the snow drifting down and covering the ground. It can snow as long as I can sit by the fireplace and stay toasty warm. I saw a sweater at the store and it said. "Let it snow! Let it snow! Let it snow... Someplace Else!" LOL Stay healthy~
Patty
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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Hi Patty. Hahaha, your review made me chuckle... glad you liked this Rondeau!!
Melissa
Comment from lyenochka
A beautiful rondeau, Melissa! And congrats on the #1 for the month! I enjoyed your peaceful description of the snowfall and the acceptance of the passage of time.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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A beautiful rondeau, Melissa! And congrats on the #1 for the month! I enjoyed your peaceful description of the snowfall and the acceptance of the passage of time.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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I'm so glad you liked my Rondeau... we had that type of day here yesterday and it was lovely to look out my window at the pristine white! Thank you, Helen.
Melissa
Comment from lauralumummu
I love this one it is reminiscent of the old master poets and beautifully presented with lovely imagery. The Rondeau is not something I would tackle, bravo to you, Happy New Year, Laura.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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I love this one it is reminiscent of the old master poets and beautifully presented with lovely imagery. The Rondeau is not something I would tackle, bravo to you, Happy New Year, Laura.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Hello Laura. I am delighted you liked the Rondeau, and I appreciate your encouraging comments!! Thank you!
Melissa
Comment from Tina Crute
This is so pretty and reflective, like snow, actually! Here in Virginia, we had 73 degree weather for a few days and now several inches of snow, so as I read and admire your poem I am looking at our snow and enjoying both:) What I like most about your poem:
Your adjectives! Nestled, fat, ethereal, soft, subtle, aged, etc. They set the stage for great imagery.
Your specific imagery of your own sands of time compared to falling snow that you are watching. Genius!
Your poem adheres to a definite rondeau scheme but comes off loose, comfy, thoughtful and special. It's so smooth.
I haven't done a rondeau but you make me want to try!
Your poem is well done and enjoyed very much.
Tina
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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This is so pretty and reflective, like snow, actually! Here in Virginia, we had 73 degree weather for a few days and now several inches of snow, so as I read and admire your poem I am looking at our snow and enjoying both:) What I like most about your poem:
Your adjectives! Nestled, fat, ethereal, soft, subtle, aged, etc. They set the stage for great imagery.
Your specific imagery of your own sands of time compared to falling snow that you are watching. Genius!
Your poem adheres to a definite rondeau scheme but comes off loose, comfy, thoughtful and special. It's so smooth.
I haven't done a rondeau but you make me want to try!
Your poem is well done and enjoyed very much.
Tina
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Hi Tina. Thanks so much, my friend. I live in Virginia too. Chester ~ 3 miles south of Richmond. We are having a lovely snow day here too :) I am really glad to see you liked the rondeau. I would love to read yours too!!
Melissa
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That's cool! Literally, lol. My adult kids used to do gymnastics' competitions near there, I think. I live in Roanoke, VA, near the Blue Ridge Mountains. The snow on the mountains is beautiful! I will attempt a rondeau this evening!
Tina