My Personal Tower of Fame
Making America Safe For Democracy29 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Jay,
We need someone to make America safe again now. It seemed that you thought you might die climbing that tower. DId Kay love you back?
This story is so appropo at this time too.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on the honorable mention in the reviewing contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
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Jay,
We need someone to make America safe again now. It seemed that you thought you might die climbing that tower. DId Kay love you back?
This story is so appropo at this time too.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on the honorable mention in the reviewing contest.
Joan
Comment Written 02-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
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Thank you for reading, Joan. This was my least understood post. It was based on an actual event. However, out of my boredom in the tower, I devised a prank the understanding of which depended on a scatological pun. Kay didn't exist. Her name was the only one I could have possibly used because "Kay" pronounced the 11th letter of the albhabet. The same with "you" which substituted for the 21st letter, and "see" the third letter. The "if" had no direct corollary, but pronounced with the other three following it ... that teenage locker room pun should come to life. [If U C K]
Its purpose was two-fold: to embarrass the DJ who could not un-say what he broadcasted to hundreds of listeners and ... it was to give me the notoriety that we teens so craved.
I achieved both.
Thank you also for the kind words about the honorable mention.
Jay
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You?re welcome, Jay. Maybe it was a little bit too coded. I?m glad the purposes were served
Joan
Comment from lauralumummu
Hi, JayThis does take me to that tower. I am not sure I really get it, but it is an interesting read and well written. Have a terrific day, Laura-----------------
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Hi, JayThis does take me to that tower. I am not sure I really get it, but it is an interesting read and well written. Have a terrific day, Laura-----------------
Comment Written 19-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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That's funny. If you did understand it, you'd be in a very large minority. It was one of those things I pointed out to you. I knew exactly what I meant. In this case, though, I wasn't allowed enough words to say it. Thank you so much for reading it!
Comment from Senyai
Jay,
Yes, the hopeful youth is what keeps democracy alive! Heart beating in the chest of fifteen year old boys putting their love out there ...waiting for a response, is where the country's fate lies. I'm serious. Rugged individualism is at the heart of all successful endeavors not the collective.
What a challenge to write a meaningful story is only 101 words but you did in originality plus!
Great piece and good luck!
Always,
Senyai
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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Jay,
Yes, the hopeful youth is what keeps democracy alive! Heart beating in the chest of fifteen year old boys putting their love out there ...waiting for a response, is where the country's fate lies. I'm serious. Rugged individualism is at the heart of all successful endeavors not the collective.
What a challenge to write a meaningful story is only 101 words but you did in originality plus!
Great piece and good luck!
Always,
Senyai
Comment Written 16-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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Now ... say aloud, and very slowly, word for word, the first part of his dedication to "Kay" and imagine the DJ reading it out loud over the airwaves. Here, let me help you: "iF yoU see Kay ... tell her I love her.
In reality, the DJ did air it, and had a number of angry calls back to the station, after which I called me back and chewed me out.
LOL, thanks, Senyai!
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Hahaha!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I love your examples of allusion. This will draw the reader in. You have used strong metaphors. This is a great image. It develops a glorious scene in the readers' imagination as if they were viewing a movie. I could hear the song playing. This was delightful. Nice work. This has to be A+
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021
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I love your examples of allusion. This will draw the reader in. You have used strong metaphors. This is a great image. It develops a glorious scene in the readers' imagination as if they were viewing a movie. I could hear the song playing. This was delightful. Nice work. This has to be A+
Comment Written 10-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much, Liz. It was fun to write and to reminisce those innocent years.
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***smile***
Comment from Bill Schott
You threw me for a minute, Jay, with the dates and the name of the song, which I first heard in 1982. Then I researched and found that gag used by Soupy Sales on television with White Fang. It's been around for a while. You were on the cutting edge way back when, Jay. So much fun to crank call. I still remember the scene from 'The Simpsons' where Bart called Moe's and asked for Amanda Hugginkiss.
Moe calls out, "Call for Amanda Hugginkiss? I need Amanda Hugginkiss. Why can't I find Amanda Hugginkiss?"
"Maybe your standards are too high," someone jokes.
Loved your story, Jay.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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You threw me for a minute, Jay, with the dates and the name of the song, which I first heard in 1982. Then I researched and found that gag used by Soupy Sales on television with White Fang. It's been around for a while. You were on the cutting edge way back when, Jay. So much fun to crank call. I still remember the scene from 'The Simpsons' where Bart called Moe's and asked for Amanda Hugginkiss.
Moe calls out, "Call for Amanda Hugginkiss? I need Amanda Hugginkiss. Why can't I find Amanda Hugginkiss?"
"Maybe your standards are too high," someone jokes.
Loved your story, Jay.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Ah, thanks Bill. You were one of about 5 reviewers who understood the prank call. I had more people writing about how proud I should be of my patriotism. Several thought it was a touching love story. The six was over the top! I'm so happy to hear from you for another reason. Every day that you didn't post (It's been over a week now), I was beginning to feel concern. I was imagining you lying in the hospital, hooked up to a ventilator. It's good to hear your voice again! Thanks for the review.
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Thank you, Jay. Thankfully the hospital won't even admit you without proof of oxygen depletion. I am okay, just bad cold symptoms. My wife rotates six or seven lung medicines to keep the pneumonia from winning.
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, too funny. Your young boy antics likely inspired the creation of Bart Simpson who loved to call Moe's Bar asking for Hugh Jass. These little pranks seemed so harmless, although they may have caused a wee bit of trouble once they were deciphered.
Great telling of your true story flash, Jay and I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021
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Ha, too funny. Your young boy antics likely inspired the creation of Bart Simpson who loved to call Moe's Bar asking for Hugh Jass. These little pranks seemed so harmless, although they may have caused a wee bit of trouble once they were deciphered.
Great telling of your true story flash, Jay and I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 06-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021
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Ha! Thank you, Gloria for the six and for the Bart Simpson quip. Believe it or not, you are one of 4 people (of the 24 reviews) who got the joke. I had more people than you could image thank me for my patriotism, and more for my touching young love for Kay.
Comment from Sherry Asbury
My cats did not appreciate your humor and went to hide. I, on the other hand, got a nosebleed and when I laughed - blood flew everywhere. Very funny!! What's next, short-sheeting an old lady's bed? Too late, I am down to 5' even.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021
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My cats did not appreciate your humor and went to hide. I, on the other hand, got a nosebleed and when I laughed - blood flew everywhere. Very funny!! What's next, short-sheeting an old lady's bed? Too late, I am down to 5' even.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021
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You are the one with the humor, Sherry ... in spades! Thank you for reading and for your kind words.
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Great entry on the true story flash context my friend! This piece was enjoyable and well written;-)
Thank you for sharing and many blessings to you and your family;-)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021
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Great entry on the true story flash context my friend! This piece was enjoyable and well written;-)
Thank you for sharing and many blessings to you and your family;-)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much, Melody. Your kind words mean a lot to me.
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;-)
Comment from amahra
You naughty boy. And I'm not even going to deceive you by making you think I'm brilliant. Ha ha ha! I totally missed it Jay and had to read several reviews to get it. Ha! Ok, so I'm slow--so sue me! LOL!
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021
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You naughty boy. And I'm not even going to deceive you by making you think I'm brilliant. Ha ha ha! I totally missed it Jay and had to read several reviews to get it. Ha! Ok, so I'm slow--so sue me! LOL!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021
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Not the reader's fault that you missed it, Amahra. It was on me. It had to be short, so I cut too many corners in setting the ending up.
Comment from Halfree
First read, well not much here ... left for greener fields. Came back ... different reaction... I liked it .... third read ... good work. Enjoyed the posting. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2021
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First read, well not much here ... left for greener fields. Came back ... different reaction... I liked it .... third read ... good work. Enjoyed the posting. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2021
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I applaud your persistence, Halfree. My writing and mold tend to grow on you! Thanks for reading, Friend.