Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 54 "Football Chapter 28 part 1"A mother faces life's struggles.
34 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Sorry for having read ass-backwards--I suspected as much when I read the next chapter and hadn't recalled the passionate kiss, nor prior mention of your broken wrist. Brilliant lead-up here. Wonderful chapter.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Sorry for having read ass-backwards--I suspected as much when I read the next chapter and hadn't recalled the passionate kiss, nor prior mention of your broken wrist. Brilliant lead-up here. Wonderful chapter.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding. I just rechecked. It's there.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I'm so sorry to hear about your fall. This story is about perseverance. We must have patience that's for sure in whatever we succeed....a wrist break will heal slowly; if you are careful. I had a break many years ago.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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I'm so sorry to hear about your fall. This story is about perseverance. We must have patience that's for sure in whatever we succeed....a wrist break will heal slowly; if you are careful. I had a break many years ago.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nora arjuna
Hi Barb, sorry to hear about your wrist. Hope it's healing well.
Now I can't really comment on the story this being so many chapters ahead already. Nice to know you're still here writing and doing well as one of top rank novelists. As expected the chapter's well written. A smooth read.
Best wishes, nora.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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Hi Barb, sorry to hear about your wrist. Hope it's healing well.
Now I can't really comment on the story this being so many chapters ahead already. Nice to know you're still here writing and doing well as one of top rank novelists. As expected the chapter's well written. A smooth read.
Best wishes, nora.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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Thank you for dropping by. Please come by again. I normally post on Sunday's and try to attach good money to it.
Comment from estory
What I really like about this chapter is that you paint a very realistic picture of a relationship, with all the imperfections; the kids not doing their homework, the coach trying to lean in and back up Katherine, and some romantic feelings weaving in as well. Super realistic dialogue as always, and it is even more impressive that you juggle multiple characters in the same scenes. estory
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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What I really like about this chapter is that you paint a very realistic picture of a relationship, with all the imperfections; the kids not doing their homework, the coach trying to lean in and back up Katherine, and some romantic feelings weaving in as well. Super realistic dialogue as always, and it is even more impressive that you juggle multiple characters in the same scenes. estory
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Tpa
I so much enjoy reading your chapters. The characters are so lifelike when her son feels he can't trust her. I also like your dialogue that moves the scene along, and, of course, a good description of that kiss Gabriel made before leaving for the night. Looking forward to the next installation.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2021
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I so much enjoy reading your chapters. The characters are so lifelike when her son feels he can't trust her. I also like your dialogue that moves the scene along, and, of course, a good description of that kiss Gabriel made before leaving for the night. Looking forward to the next installation.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Hi Barbara, I'm so sorry you have broken your wrist just as you were going on your vacation to see your family, that's a bit of a blow.
This was a nice romantic part, Gabe and Katherine are getting closer, and it looks like Gabe has a good lawyer friend in Troy. I can't wait to see Katherine's in-laws to get told where they can go! Greedy couple. Excellent part, my friend. Well done. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2021
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Hi Barbara, I'm so sorry you have broken your wrist just as you were going on your vacation to see your family, that's a bit of a blow.
This was a nice romantic part, Gabe and Katherine are getting closer, and it looks like Gabe has a good lawyer friend in Troy. I can't wait to see Katherine's in-laws to get told where they can go! Greedy couple. Excellent part, my friend. Well done. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 28-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Football Chapter Part 1 of the Romance Fiction speaks slowly but steadily and progressively about Katherine and Gabriel close closer; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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This Football Chapter Part 1 of the Romance Fiction speaks slowly but steadily and progressively about Katherine and Gabriel close closer; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 28-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. It's nice of you to drop by again. I've missed you.
Comment from Cogitator
You certainly have a gift. Although I seldom read fiction, I do check on your work. This piece is definitely one of your best. I cannot suggest anything resembling an improvement...John
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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You certainly have a gift. Although I seldom read fiction, I do check on your work. This piece is definitely one of your best. I cannot suggest anything resembling an improvement...John
Comment Written 28-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Barb
Oh no, you broke your wrist. As always your writing is great Now you don't fall and take care of your wrist. Will be waiting for your next chapter
Gert
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Barb
Oh no, you broke your wrist. As always your writing is great Now you don't fall and take care of your wrist. Will be waiting for your next chapter
Gert
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
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smiles Barb
How is your wrist?
Gert
Comment from lancellot
Very good. They seem to be settling into family life and everyone is
(so far) okay with the assumed roles being taken. This is working out well like a Y14 Slice of Life anime. I wouldn't worry about the the Length. I think 1300 words is a good length for getting out needed details.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Very good. They seem to be settling into family life and everyone is
(so far) okay with the assumed roles being taken. This is working out well like a Y14 Slice of Life anime. I wouldn't worry about the the Length. I think 1300 words is a good length for getting out needed details.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.