Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "Football Chapter 21 part 1"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
It's a good thing that this lady has some close friends to keep an eye out for her. Does she have a dog who barks when someone is near? She was smart to get help....
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
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It's a good thing that this lady has some close friends to keep an eye out for her. Does she have a dog who barks when someone is near? She was smart to get help....
Comment Written 07-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
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Yes, she does, but the dog was with her children then. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
It seems the plot is thickening. This was a good read from beginning to end. I do not see any room for improvement. Your pictures always match your stories.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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It seems the plot is thickening. This was a good read from beginning to end. I do not see any room for improvement. Your pictures always match your stories.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction in continuation having captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
"...but you jumped to conclusions and left. I didn't kiss her and didn't return it. I stopped the kiss and sent her away. I came looking for you."
As a matter of fact, such tricky sentences work as a booster to the story.
Interesting!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction in continuation having captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
"...but you jumped to conclusions and left. I didn't kiss her and didn't return it. I stopped the kiss and sent her away. I came looking for you."
As a matter of fact, such tricky sentences work as a booster to the story.
Interesting!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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Barbara.Wilkey, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from estory
I thought it was a great chapter. There was plenty of suspense, and this shadowy, mysterious figure prying into Kate's house with a flashlight early in the morning is a new twist to the story, possibly something from her past, and somehow maybe tied to Frost, which makes for a complicated plot with plenty of possibilities. I like the dialogue, as always, nice and real, and we see Gabe edging closer and closer to Katherine. He is protective of her, and she seems to reach out to him when she needs help. The insinuation that this might have something to do with catching Gabe and Katherine together makes me think of a past lover or maybe Frost somehow. We await your next chapter. estory
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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I thought it was a great chapter. There was plenty of suspense, and this shadowy, mysterious figure prying into Kate's house with a flashlight early in the morning is a new twist to the story, possibly something from her past, and somehow maybe tied to Frost, which makes for a complicated plot with plenty of possibilities. I like the dialogue, as always, nice and real, and we see Gabe edging closer and closer to Katherine. He is protective of her, and she seems to reach out to him when she needs help. The insinuation that this might have something to do with catching Gabe and Katherine together makes me think of a past lover or maybe Frost somehow. We await your next chapter. estory
Comment Written 30-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Poor Katherine, she can't have a day of peace and if the in-laws are involved in this incident then it's shame since their daughter-in-law have taken care of the kids since day one. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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Poor Katherine, she can't have a day of peace and if the in-laws are involved in this incident then it's shame since their daughter-in-law have taken care of the kids since day one. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from amahra
I hate that Daisey wasn't there to warn Katherine. And it sounds like the in-laws could have plotted this. Unfortunately, I fear so many people questioning Katherine and Gab's relationship that their true feelings may be discovered.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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I hate that Daisey wasn't there to warn Katherine. And it sounds like the in-laws could have plotted this. Unfortunately, I fear so many people questioning Katherine and Gab's relationship that their true feelings may be discovered.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from ShirleyT1
You are a great story-teller and writer. This is my first chapter, so I can't wait to go back and read some earlier chapters. Having a list of the characters really helped. Your dialogue is balanced and well written. I felt like I was eavesdropping on the conversations. Great job!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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You are a great story-teller and writer. This is my first chapter, so I can't wait to go back and read some earlier chapters. Having a list of the characters really helped. Your dialogue is balanced and well written. I felt like I was eavesdropping on the conversations. Great job!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Brenda Henderson
Very well written story. I enjoyed reading this very much. The characters are likable and you have crafted them in such a way that the reader gets invested in the characters as the story progresses. Good job!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Very well written story. I enjoyed reading this very much. The characters are likable and you have crafted them in such a way that the reader gets invested in the characters as the story progresses. Good job!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're Welcome!
Comment from AJ McCall
I HATEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE THE P.I AND FROST!!!! Man, is there a wicked world or what. I did not know what that word meant until now. Geeze, Frost's determined and maybe Katherine's in-laws were in on it? I'm not sure. I did notice a couple typos:
"Katherine's explaining what happened(?")
They travel most (of) the time."
I can't wait to read the next chapter. And I forget to mention in the last review that I'm glad Kenny and those boys were removed. SIX STARS!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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I HATEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE THE P.I AND FROST!!!! Man, is there a wicked world or what. I did not know what that word meant until now. Geeze, Frost's determined and maybe Katherine's in-laws were in on it? I'm not sure. I did notice a couple typos:
"Katherine's explaining what happened(?")
They travel most (of) the time."
I can't wait to read the next chapter. And I forget to mention in the last review that I'm glad Kenny and those boys were removed. SIX STARS!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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I just changed that area about 30 minutes ago and still didn't get it just right. Thank you for the catches.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Sanku
The PI, the in-laws and Frost -looks like a vicious triangle. This is a pivotal chapter bringing in the in-laws and leading to the resolution perhaps. It is well written .I especially like the cautious way the couple move forward.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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The PI, the in-laws and Frost -looks like a vicious triangle. This is a pivotal chapter bringing in the in-laws and leading to the resolution perhaps. It is well written .I especially like the cautious way the couple move forward.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.