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Football - A Novel

Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Football Chapter 17 part 1"
A mother faces life's struggles.

28 total reviews 
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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Like the jogging in your story. I also like to watch track so its right up my alley. I'm glad that you're holding the story to your own thoughts and not the annoying teacher Mr. Frost.

 Comment Written 23-May-2021


reply by the author on 29-May-2021
    Thank you for catching up with the posts. I appreciate it and am sorry you are reading when no moneys attached.
reply by Rosemary Everson1 on 01-Jun-2021
    I'm following your story.....catch up time.
Comment from Sanku
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You are a brilliant writer and because of the fluidity of the words flowing from your hands ,I could read from Chapter 28 onwards in one go.

I was down with our corona virus

Katherine's encounter with the towel -clad Gabriel, her unusual embarrassment , and the touching explanation - all were beautifully portrayed. The games ,coaching of the girls and finally the shocking incident of an abused girl.. I have enjoyed reading this ....

 Comment Written 17-May-2021


reply by the author on 22-May-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
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This is another great installment. You moved the story along nicely and it was an interesting read from beginning to end. The picture definitely matches the story. There is no room for improvement.

 Comment Written 12-May-2021


reply by the author on 13-May-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tfawcus
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I like the way you use dialogue so naturally to bring out the various anxieties and concerns of your characters and to have them talk things out, one with the other. Good chapter.

 Comment Written 12-May-2021


reply by the author on 13-May-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Glad to see them partnering nicely on a routine and off-school schedule. The easiest way get married and stop any nonsense rumors. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.

 Comment Written 12-May-2021


reply by the author on 13-May-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
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Things are warming up a bit. Katherine is starting to admit to herself she really likes this man. I'm wondering what Frost is hoping to so with all the pictures he is have someone snap of the two of them.

 Comment Written 11-May-2021


reply by the author on 13-May-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from DentedSyke
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This is eerie! I was a high school math teacher here in Texas, and I also coached cross country. Damned small world, Barbara.

ANYWAY...

I'm not much on romance pieces, but this one was good. You kept the story varied and interesting; the action moved right along. I can see why you're a published author. Nice work with the characters, by the way. Distinctive personalities. Keep writing!

 Comment Written 11-May-2021


reply by the author on 13-May-2021
    Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
reply by DentedSyke on 13-May-2021
    :)
Comment from Dilettante junior
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Dear Barbara,

Great job with your chapter! Thanks for adding a lil of the last bits to catch up. This is a fine chapter. The plot, the setting, the dialogues, the vision you have are all incorporated well within. The conversation fits right in too.
I would like to read more.
Well done.
DJ

 Comment Written 11-May-2021


reply by the author on 13-May-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
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Dear barbara, I am so glad that you have these two major protagonist being able to be upfront and discuss what's on their mind. Because I think communication right from the beginning certainly helps any relationship, particularly, if this one is headed in the direction that the romantic in me wishes.

 Comment Written 10-May-2021


reply by the author on 13-May-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from estory
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A nice realistic dialogue between Katherine and Gabriel. We feel the tentativeness of their dance around each other, but towards the end, she admits she would miss him too, along with the boys. It seems they are creating this feeling of having to watch appearances to cover their own trepidations in getting closer together. But they are coming together. estory

 Comment Written 10-May-2021


reply by the author on 10-May-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.