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Football - A Novel

Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Football Chapter 10 part 3"
A mother faces life's struggles.

29 total reviews 
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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Katherine is reluctant whether or not Gabriel is a good fit for her. In so many way, I wonder if they will even be just friends because they each are used to their own ways.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
    The verdict is still out of Gabriel.
Comment from AJ McCall
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Yup. Katherine is definitely falling for him, lol. And I ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT!! After all that denying she had to stop, she just had to... I almost couldn't read it lol. But the story's intriguing! And don't worry about making mistakes... it happens to us all. :) Going to read the next chapter!

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 11-Feb-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by AJ McCall on 11-Feb-2021
    You're welcome!
Comment from Sanku
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Katherine is slowly softening. The 'date' would be good for them .The dialogues were easy flowing ,the characters seem very realistic and the atmosphere a happy one.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Another feel good week, brisket, and tempted with a bucket of fish for the fryer. Good times and food, it doesn't get much better than this. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from seaglass
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I've been away again for a while. Sounds like these two are finally moving towards one another. I agree with Katherine...I eat fish,no cook fish, but I don't clean them.
..trying to get my muse to wake up. This pandemic is a mood killer

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Erika Seshadri
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Nicely written. I'll have to go back and read the previous chapters. I'm relatively new to this site but enjoying it so far. Feel free to take a look at some of the things I've posted. Feedback is always welcome.

Looking forward to reading more of your work.
Cheers!

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
    Thank you for the kind review. Right now my paying job takes priority. I'm retiring in June and will have more time to review.
Comment from estory
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The dialogue continues to be realistic and we get a warm feeling from this portrait of family and aquaintances making that usual small talk while something more serious is going on under the surface. Namely, Gabriel is slowly but surely becoming more and more of a fixture to the mom here. He is endearing himself into her life and family. He seems like a nice guy, she seems a bit apprehensive, understandably so after the pain she has been through. But springtime seems to be melting the ice in this relationship. estory

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wendy G
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It's a great story with just the right amount of detail to keep it interesting, and if you are also working full time, then well done to you!! Looking forward to ongoing chapters.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
    Thank you for the kind review. I am working full time.
Comment from RetroStarfish
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This is a lovely sequence. No patience needed, it was a pleasure to read.
I like the way it ended, awkwardly arranging a not-a-date dinner.
The repartee between the two of them is becoming more comfortable.
My only suggestion is that you bring back the mystery of her 'being watched' or what ever it was that was upsetting the dogs a few chapters back. The romance is simmering.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
    Thank you for the kind review. It's still there.
Comment from robyn corum
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Barb,

Except maybe it is. hahahaha I don't think either one of them has a clue what's going on in their heads at the moment. Just let it play out you goofs! hahaha Enjoyed!

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
    Thank you for the kind review. LOL