Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Football Chapter 4 part 3"A mother faces life's struggles.
21 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
I like that so many people are coming to support Katherine, but Mr. Frost is scary. He has a screw loose and needs some serious help. Let's hope he gets it, one way or another. Love the dogs even get along and are supportive.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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I like that so many people are coming to support Katherine, but Mr. Frost is scary. He has a screw loose and needs some serious help. Let's hope he gets it, one way or another. Love the dogs even get along and are supportive.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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I am sorry you had to read this with no money attached.
Comment from seaglass
So this would be scary. And the thought a man this irrational has responsibility...he needs to go...there's some deranged people in the world, I've had my share of experience with them. Your narrative describes one well.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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So this would be scary. And the thought a man this irrational has responsibility...he needs to go...there's some deranged people in the world, I've had my share of experience with them. Your narrative describes one well.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the kind review. I'm sorry you had to read it with no money attached.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Wow, that Mr. Frost isn't a nice gentleman. Will he change? Unless, he keeps thinking negative thoughts which aren't true. Good thing Katherine stand on her ground and sticks up for herself.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Wow, that Mr. Frost isn't a nice gentleman. Will he change? Unless, he keeps thinking negative thoughts which aren't true. Good thing Katherine stand on her ground and sticks up for herself.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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I'm glad you enjoyed.
Comment from AJ McCall
My gosh this chapter made me upset! What is wrong with Frost? I'm definitely siding with Katherine. And living in TX, I know charges can be pressed for threats. What's so sad is that Katherine is trying to convince herself that Gabriel is just like every other guy when he's not. I hope she realizes soon that she's wrong. I found a few flaws among the beauty of this chapter:
Thud! (his) fist hit the car's roof.
"Mr. Frost, your car needs to be to moved (your). You're coming down to the station."
Can't wait for the next chapter!
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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My gosh this chapter made me upset! What is wrong with Frost? I'm definitely siding with Katherine. And living in TX, I know charges can be pressed for threats. What's so sad is that Katherine is trying to convince herself that Gabriel is just like every other guy when he's not. I hope she realizes soon that she's wrong. I found a few flaws among the beauty of this chapter:
Thud! (his) fist hit the car's roof.
"Mr. Frost, your car needs to be to moved (your). You're coming down to the station."
Can't wait for the next chapter!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Both of those sentences I made corrects in yesterday and still messed up. OH MY!! Thank you for the catches.
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You're welcome!!!
Comment from Sanku
That is another well crafted chapter. The action and the conversation were spot on .This crazy man will appear again I am sure to torment her.That his son did not get this job is a silly reason to resent her. He has to have a problem.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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That is another well crafted chapter. The action and the conversation were spot on .This crazy man will appear again I am sure to torment her.That his son did not get this job is a silly reason to resent her. He has to have a problem.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Well done! Gripping confrontation--Frost is a dick--I look forward to his comeuppance--dialog is spot-on--glad I took a chance--not into football--I see that is peripheral to the story. Fine piece of work.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Well done! Gripping confrontation--Frost is a dick--I look forward to his comeuppance--dialog is spot-on--glad I took a chance--not into football--I see that is peripheral to the story. Fine piece of work.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Bill Pinder
I really enjoyed reading this chapter in your book. I like that your story is believable, with good values and presents a healthy way of dealing with a tough situation. I appreciate your development of the characters personalities and interactions. Bill
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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I really enjoyed reading this chapter in your book. I like that your story is believable, with good values and presents a healthy way of dealing with a tough situation. I appreciate your development of the characters personalities and interactions. Bill
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Every chapter is a six in my mind, but as with everyone, we just don't get enough to give one whenever they are deserved. So, I just scatter them like dipping dots, here and there, and I would send some ice cream too. But, it would melt. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Every chapter is a six in my mind, but as with everyone, we just don't get enough to give one whenever they are deserved. So, I just scatter them like dipping dots, here and there, and I would send some ice cream too. But, it would melt. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the kind review. DARN!!! and I love ice cream.
Comment from djsaxon
There is an honesty about the write that I really enjoy. It could easily become "soapy" but never does. The dialogue is terrific. Minimal use of speech tags which for me is always a plus. I like the economy of the write. DJ
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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There is an honesty about the write that I really enjoy. It could easily become "soapy" but never does. The dialogue is terrific. Minimal use of speech tags which for me is always a plus. I like the economy of the write. DJ
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
This guy Frost must be on something. He's a nut. I would have bashed him beyond identity.
OOPs, here I go getting to in to this story deeper than I should. LOL
Roll em. Roll em.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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This guy Frost must be on something. He's a nut. I would have bashed him beyond identity.
OOPs, here I go getting to in to this story deeper than I should. LOL
Roll em. Roll em.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.