Collection of Writer's Tips # 2
Facial Features30 total reviews
Comment from Esther Brown
Six if I had it. Sally, wow. I just happened on this "recognized" story. Seriously, I loved it. I spent a lot of time thinking of ways to describe walking: striding, strutting, mincing, shambling...just thinking. There is so much in a word. I adore the descriptions of characters. Do you teach writers by any chance? Esther
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Six if I had it. Sally, wow. I just happened on this "recognized" story. Seriously, I loved it. I spent a lot of time thinking of ways to describe walking: striding, strutting, mincing, shambling...just thinking. There is so much in a word. I adore the descriptions of characters. Do you teach writers by any chance? Esther
Comment Written 04-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Esther. I'm glad you found this post helpful.
I am a recognized writer of FanStory. The honor was bestowed on me in December of 2020. I have just published my seventh crime fiction book with Amazon Books and Amazon Kindle: Murder By Chocolate. My first three books are on Audible for the blind and sight impaired. (I have a rare case of retinitis pigmentosa and have only 2% of my central vision in each eye.) I review on FS and that's the extent of my teaching. Writing is my PLAN B since my blindness onset in 2009.
I hope to finish The Signs of Christ's Return but have parked it for now. I'm turning my attention to poetry and back to short stories. A single book chapter takes me anywhere between 30-40 hours to write.
Thank you again for checking this out and for your kind words.
Sal Xoxo's
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I am saddened that your sight is challenged. Do you have a dictation voice recognition system? However do you manage? Esther
Comment from sammielwf
Sally,
No doubt about my intent here. I am serving up up six glittering stars for your work here today on a silver plated serving platter of some significance.
I have conjured up in my minds eye- a Cheshire cat's grin as that evokes a wider one in response- just because this piece made me grin and grin and grin. It is a wonder that my grinning doesn't run off the page and end in a loud laughing gaffaw!
Very wittily written my friend- and may we all see our craft through the eyes of one that sees so clearly....now...still...and beyond.
Sammielwf
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Sally,
No doubt about my intent here. I am serving up up six glittering stars for your work here today on a silver plated serving platter of some significance.
I have conjured up in my minds eye- a Cheshire cat's grin as that evokes a wider one in response- just because this piece made me grin and grin and grin. It is a wonder that my grinning doesn't run off the page and end in a loud laughing gaffaw!
Very wittily written my friend- and may we all see our craft through the eyes of one that sees so clearly....now...still...and beyond.
Sammielwf
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Dear Sammie, thank you for this wonderful review and generous star shine. You lit me up, big time. I'm thinking of you even now as I'm writing my third chapter of this collection of writer's tips. I'm so glad you enjoyed this and find it helpful and entertaining at the same time. Sending you my best today as always and blessings for your day,
Sally XOs....
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You are welcome Sally.....warm thoughts from a chilly New England. Sammielwf
Comment from poetwatch
Writers are thanking you for your knowledge, Sally. :) I'm learning to write. I can write even took special classes, but I have never been as decriptive as most writers are. Your lessons are treasued and will be uses when I write something... What? I don't know. :) I might rewrite. Thank you for sharing. Take care.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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Writers are thanking you for your knowledge, Sally. :) I'm learning to write. I can write even took special classes, but I have never been as decriptive as most writers are. Your lessons are treasued and will be uses when I write something... What? I don't know. :) I might rewrite. Thank you for sharing. Take care.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the wonderful review and insightful comments, dear poet. Both a greatly appreciated. Sending you my best today,
Sal XOs.....
Comment from Y. M. Roger
I find that the adjectives/adverbs that I use actually depend sometimes on my mood as well.... you find that? :) Yeah, I know, nutty blonde again! ;) :) Anyway, great advice column here, my lady -- thanx for sharing your expertise!! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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I find that the adjectives/adverbs that I use actually depend sometimes on my mood as well.... you find that? :) Yeah, I know, nutty blonde again! ;) :) Anyway, great advice column here, my lady -- thanx for sharing your expertise!! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the excellent review and support in my work. It is so appreciated. Sending you my best today as always and blessings for your day. Sal XOs.....
Comment from WalkerMan
Thank you for this collection of descriptive words and phrases for facial features, saving research time for each aspect. Your examples are especially helpful -- particularly about your grandfather.
Yes, Karl Malden was memorable.
However, I don't see how a hooked nose could touch a drooping chin. :)
Anyway, I like this series of posts.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Thank you for this collection of descriptive words and phrases for facial features, saving research time for each aspect. Your examples are especially helpful -- particularly about your grandfather.
Yes, Karl Malden was memorable.
However, I don't see how a hooked nose could touch a drooping chin. :)
Anyway, I like this series of posts.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the superb review and glorious stars, dear Mike. I am honored. I'm so glad to see you on this lovely Tuesday. I appreciate the encouragement and for staying with me.
Sending you my best today as always, and blessings for your day,
Sal :))
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You are most welcome, Sal. I'm not surprised that your other reviewers also find the posts in this series helpful. -- Mike
Comment from Mr. Green
Once again you have expanded my knowledge of writing and its possibilities. Your dscriptions and examples provide inseration for many future writings. The six stars are well earned. There is one example that I have not been able to visually see in my head, and therefore I am having trouble thinking of how to use it. It is the Cheshire grin, do you have any suggestions. Very well written, thank you.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Once again you have expanded my knowledge of writing and its possibilities. Your dscriptions and examples provide inseration for many future writings. The six stars are well earned. There is one example that I have not been able to visually see in my head, and therefore I am having trouble thinking of how to use it. It is the Cheshire grin, do you have any suggestions. Very well written, thank you.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the wonderful review and generous stars, Mr. Green. I'm delighted you have found this helpful to your writing. I am blessed k owing I encouraged you.
A Cheshire grin comes from Alice in Wonderland. It's a cat with a wide, mischievous grin; or more deeply contrived from the grinning lions painted on the signs of inns seen in 1860s Cheshire, England, when the book Alice in Wonderland was written. A bit of history for you.
Sending you my best today as always, and blessings for you writing endeavors,
Sal XOs....
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
So much great advise. I'm going to keep this in my messages so I can look back on it. Thank you for taking the time to help us under descriptive writers. =] Rox
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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So much great advise. I'm going to keep this in my messages so I can look back on it. Thank you for taking the time to help us under descriptive writers. =] Rox
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for the lovely review and generous stars, dear Rox. I'm so glad to hear this helps you in your writing and creative expression. I already use this for myself and had references marked when I was publishing my book. It really is handy to have them all in one place. It saves so much time!
Sending you my best today as always and blessings for your writing endeavors,
Sal XOs....xo.....
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Sally Law
As a new writer this was a powerful piece to help others.
I truly appreciate it
From a thin lipped, runny nose. rosy cheeks and a brown bottled job with thinning hair writer.
Best regards,
Mary
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Sally Law
As a new writer this was a powerful piece to help others.
I truly appreciate it
From a thin lipped, runny nose. rosy cheeks and a brown bottled job with thinning hair writer.
Best regards,
Mary
Comment Written 26-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Dear Mary, thank you so much! It's reviews like yours that make this so worthwhile. I am honored by your kindness and stars. I wish you all the best in your writing endeavors.
Sending you my best today as always, and blessings for your day,
Sally XOs.....
Comment from Father Flaps
This is so kind of you, Sally, to help blossoming writers find their way in the dark. It reminds me of when I was a little boy. My father worked for the CPR, and until I started Grade One, we moved with him to Montreal in the summer and back to Saint John in the winter. One particular occasion, we had just moved into a house in Verdun. First night, I woke up out of a nightmare. I was, perhaps, 4 years old. And I couldn't find the door in the darkness. It wasn't where it was supposed to be, and I felt along the wall, hopelessly lost and afraid. I was remembering my bedroom back in Grand Bay, New Brunswick.
I loved the part about the bulbous nose of Karl Malden. Isn't it something how a nose or ears or even bushy eyebrows can define a person's personality?
I especially liked your line from "Double Blind",
"Tine slid into his arms, like the last piece of a jigsaw puzzle as it snaps into place." I can almost hear that "snap"!
and the titbit about your grandfather,
"My grandfather, Thomas, was a portly fellow, always balancing a book on his protruding stomach in the dim light of our Antebellum home."
I've been a member of Fanstory since June of 2010. It was my retirement present to myself. I didn't know then that I'd continue working part-time at a pet store and then at a drug store until this past March. Almost 10 years! It took a pandemic to get me to stop working. I've always written poetry, except for a very few short articles, and the novel I was writing for a woman at church. But I think I'll try to get back into prose in the New Year, maybe the life & times of a brewery worker. (I worked at Moosehead Breweries for 39 years.)
Anyway, getting off target a bit. Your Tips are valuable, and it's so good of you to share your talent.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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This is so kind of you, Sally, to help blossoming writers find their way in the dark. It reminds me of when I was a little boy. My father worked for the CPR, and until I started Grade One, we moved with him to Montreal in the summer and back to Saint John in the winter. One particular occasion, we had just moved into a house in Verdun. First night, I woke up out of a nightmare. I was, perhaps, 4 years old. And I couldn't find the door in the darkness. It wasn't where it was supposed to be, and I felt along the wall, hopelessly lost and afraid. I was remembering my bedroom back in Grand Bay, New Brunswick.
I loved the part about the bulbous nose of Karl Malden. Isn't it something how a nose or ears or even bushy eyebrows can define a person's personality?
I especially liked your line from "Double Blind",
"Tine slid into his arms, like the last piece of a jigsaw puzzle as it snaps into place." I can almost hear that "snap"!
and the titbit about your grandfather,
"My grandfather, Thomas, was a portly fellow, always balancing a book on his protruding stomach in the dim light of our Antebellum home."
I've been a member of Fanstory since June of 2010. It was my retirement present to myself. I didn't know then that I'd continue working part-time at a pet store and then at a drug store until this past March. Almost 10 years! It took a pandemic to get me to stop working. I've always written poetry, except for a very few short articles, and the novel I was writing for a woman at church. But I think I'll try to get back into prose in the New Year, maybe the life & times of a brewery worker. (I worked at Moosehead Breweries for 39 years.)
Anyway, getting off target a bit. Your Tips are valuable, and it's so good of you to share your talent.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 26-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review and generous six stars once again, dear Kimbob. I'm so honored by this. I actually started this for myself as a reference guide as I've been writing What The Blind Girl Saw and Double Blind. It's nice to have an easy reference right at my fingertips in my bookcase. Many have already thanked me and have it in their bookcases ready to go. If I don't do anything else on FS, I feel like I've accomplished much with these. I have a few more to go and working my way towards a book. If I don't get it published, at least I will have it here for my FanStory family and friends. Hopefully I will have these done by Christmas. My Christmas gift to everyone. :))
Sending my best today as always, and blessings for your day,
Sally XOs......
Comment from Ric Myworld
I couldn't be more aware that I need all the help I can get when sizing up a person's description since I have a tendency to just hit the high points and move on. Now maybe I'll take heed and tone down my bluntness. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2020
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I couldn't be more aware that I need all the help I can get when sizing up a person's description since I have a tendency to just hit the high points and move on. Now maybe I'll take heed and tone down my bluntness. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2020
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Thank you, dear Ric. You're always so encouraging. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...