Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a good job with this chapter, Tony. It read smoothly with some good details added. I did not think Madame would check herself out of the hospital. I thought she would just leave. Interesting that Helen found her waiting. The newspaper article added some intrigue to your story. Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan

enquiries--UK spelling? or inquiries

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019

Thanks, Jan. I'm beginning to get back in the swing of writing again, after a bit of a break. I appreciate your positive comments. All the best, Tony

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Tony,

Looks like you're doing a fine job of continuing through with this story. I am looking forward to seeing what you have in store next.

Only one tiny nit:
1.) "I took a sip of coffee before continuing,
--> remove the q mark at the opening of this sentence, please

Thanks!

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019

Thanks, Robyn. I'm beginning to get back in the swing of writing again, after a bit of a break. Thanks for picking up the spag. Appreciated! All the best, Tony

Comment from Jaye Bennett

Excellent

I am new into your work, so don't understand all of the story. However, I'm supposed to be reviewing the writing. I don't think I'll need a glossary of British slang, as I have been a fan of Sir Arthur Conan Doyle and Agatha Christie. I guess I would be lacking in modern slang.
I like your casual style. The Napoleon quote is super. You have imparted a tremendous amount of information here. It helps me get a grasp of the story. Good job.
Within the Link from #32: The tale end reads like the table with the sun shining on it was in the bathroom.

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019

Thanks, Jaye. I'm beginning to get back in the swing of writing again, after a bit of a break. I appreciate your comment about the link to Chapter 32. I've made a small alteration to clarify. All the best, Tony

reply by Jaye Bennett on 11-Jan-2019

I'll be on the lookout for you.

Comment from Artasylum

Excellent

This is a page turner and very interesting phrasing... I like:
"wrapped around the shoulder of my question mark." A page turner and good character development... yours, diana

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019

Thanks, Dianne. I'm beginning to get back in the swing of writing again, after a bit of a break. I appreciate your positive comment. All the best, Tony

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I'm glad you managed to get your writing muse working again, Tony, this was really worth the wait. Sorry I'm out of 6s.
It's funny how all of a sudden Helen is all sweetness and light again, after finding the allusive Jeanne. I'm sure Charles is well pleased!!!
So, what is with the drugs swoop in Paris? Is that going to effect our trio from getting to England? I will be waiting to find out. Funny about that Alain! Excellent, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

"I took a sip of coffee before continuing ,,, remove quotes.

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019

Thanks, Helen. I'm beginning to get back in the swing of writing again, after a bit of a break. Thanks for picking up the spag. All the best, Tony

Comment from TheStoryMan

Excellent

Good chapter. This is a very interesting story you're writing. I shall have to find the previous chapters. One correction...it should be Helen's face clouded otherwise a great chapter.

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019

Many thanks for dropping by to review this chapter, also for picking up my punctuation error. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

Hi Tony. I see you're writing a book. I've been off for so long, I missed most of this, but here's my thoughts on this chapter.

You set a realistic environment, and casual conversation with underpinnings well suggested. Loved the woman's antenna comment.

I smiled at the boobs and bottoms imagery.

Colorful imagery -the pernicious old viper, milk her of her venom,milk her of her venom; and lots of intrigue in a Parisian setting. Delightful.

I like the tension between Charles and Helen.

Your character descriptions are wonderful and funny.

A good read, indeed.

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019

Many thanks for your review, Tom. I haven't posted any poetry since I started this at the beginning of August. I don't want to lose my focus and fall by the wayside! However, I did have another book of 80 poems (Brindled Words) published last month - mainly ones that I wrote in 2017. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from melodymavic

Good

I noticed that these characters are in a hurry. Well that's the beauty of the story. Saying what the heck is going on before creating happy ending or open ending. Your chapter, Reminds me from a book called Round the world in eighty days.

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019

Many thanks for your review, Melody. I appreciate your time to read and respond to this chapter. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Graybærd

Excellent

This is put together very well and I like the interaction between the characters. It does start off slow in my opinion but does pick up nicely at the end. Overall though, I enjoyed it very much

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019

Many thanks for your review, Greybeard. I'll have a look at the pacing of the first part, in relation to the book as a whole. I appreciate your comment. Best wishes, Tony