Perennials of War
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Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Barbara. You know adding that first little bit helps to get right to the story. It makes things a bit clearer if one hasn't read the entire story. Conversation and dialog is always my first impression. Does it make sense? Absolutely. You are a talent and I enjoyed this chapter. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Hi Barbara. You know adding that first little bit helps to get right to the story. It makes things a bit clearer if one hasn't read the entire story. Conversation and dialog is always my first impression. Does it make sense? Absolutely. You are a talent and I enjoyed this chapter. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from kriver
Hi,
The story line is ok but
You need to make a correction
1. (to) Peoria
Other than that it is ok
Best regards,
K River
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Hi,
The story line is ok but
You need to make a correction
1. (to) Peoria
Other than that it is ok
Best regards,
K River
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. I have made the correction.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I don't think Shana has come to the understanding of what exactly the picture could be worth. Maybe none of us have. But I'm willing to bet she'll be more nervous than ever when she does. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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I don't think Shana has come to the understanding of what exactly the picture could be worth. Maybe none of us have. But I'm willing to bet she'll be more nervous than ever when she does. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. Me too.
Comment from Sasha
Excellent dialogue in this one. I understand Shana's concerns but she does have to accept that Anderson is a nice guy and only interested in her welfare. You ended with with a scary moment, I cannot wait to find out what happened...did Anderson come back early? And if so, why?
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Excellent dialogue in this one. I understand Shana's concerns but she does have to accept that Anderson is a nice guy and only interested in her welfare. You ended with with a scary moment, I cannot wait to find out what happened...did Anderson come back early? And if so, why?
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Great chapter once again. Leaving us hanging as usual. Just a couple of spags this time around.
he('s) really a down to earth person
sent men (to) Peoria
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Great chapter once again. Leaving us hanging as usual. Just a couple of spags this time around.
he('s) really a down to earth person
sent men (to) Peoria
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. I've made the corrections
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Barb
= Cool line the way you ended it: Shana laughed. "No, just a rock, slingshot, and God. That's all he needed."
= Another well written chapter I enjoyed reading.
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings <> Jax
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Hi, Barb
= Cool line the way you ended it: Shana laughed. "No, just a rock, slingshot, and God. That's all he needed."
= Another well written chapter I enjoyed reading.
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings <> Jax
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Poor Shana is slightly ashamed of her father and Aaron dropping in unannounced, they make a plan to ask Kuznetsov to hand over the painting...as if. There is a helicopter flying awfully close to the art meant, is there cause for concern? Well done, Barbara, great episode, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Poor Shana is slightly ashamed of her father and Aaron dropping in unannounced, they make a plan to ask Kuznetsov to hand over the painting...as if. There is a helicopter flying awfully close to the art meant, is there cause for concern? Well done, Barbara, great episode, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Welcome, Barbara
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend. I like your story. In this chapter, we get to see Phillip explain to Emily how a slingshot was made and how it worked.
There is some envy about Drew Sharp's wealth that should not be expressed in front of a child with swear words.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Hello my friend. I like your story. In this chapter, we get to see Phillip explain to Emily how a slingshot was made and how it worked.
There is some envy about Drew Sharp's wealth that should not be expressed in front of a child with swear words.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a smooth flow of word, making for a very interesting read. There is danger in the closeness of the Closeness of the helicopter. Very good job.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of word, making for a very interesting read. There is danger in the closeness of the Closeness of the helicopter. Very good job.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from Lilol
I think that this story is nice, but I don't really understand the plotline. It seems modern but then starts off in an old time with the main characters. It even mentions many things about Knights in the beginning while the rest of the story doesn't support it due to the fact that helicopters are mentioned.
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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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I think that this story is nice, but I don't really understand the plotline. It seems modern but then starts off in an old time with the main characters. It even mentions many things about Knights in the beginning while the rest of the story doesn't support it due to the fact that helicopters are mentioned.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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I fail to see because YOU haven't read the first 10 chapters, why I should be penalized. It makes NO sense to me. Please read my other reviews.
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Please don't reply so rudely even if I haven't read the other chapters