The Incomparable Fanny Barnwarmer
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Comment from Terry Broxson
This is another well-done continuation of Fanny's story. Another layer of the onion peeled away. Jay, you may or may not know I do like to check facts. It does not really make any difference to the story, but in 1889 Brady's population was less than 600. Exceptional work! Terry.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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This is another well-done continuation of Fanny's story. Another layer of the onion peeled away. Jay, you may or may not know I do like to check facts. It does not really make any difference to the story, but in 1889 Brady's population was less than 600. Exceptional work! Terry.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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I'm happy that you check facts, Terry. When Brady City was incorporated under the simplified name of Brady, Texas (If I remember without re-looking it up), had a population of about a thousand. I don't know that Fanny, in 1929, would have known what the population had been, or not. Certainly, The reporter would have merely been guessing. By the way, I made a horrible mistake in the previous chapter, and the ones prior to that, of showing Juniper's age at the time of her father's lynching as three, instead of what it should have been, five. I went back, after the fact, and changed all the threes back to fives. See how blithely I cover my tracks while burying old clumps of manure? Now when the alert reader comes across Juniper's age as five, they may ponder, "I thought she was only three when her papa was lynched." But sure enough, when they go back, they'll find how mistaken they were! And I will be sitting nearby with a knowing smile on my lips.
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LOL, Outstanding about the age difference! I knew the reporter was guessing, and if I were not a 4th generation Texan, and familiar with Brady, I would not have looked it up.
Comment from Annmuma
This play continues to grab my attention from word one! I can see and feel the atmosphere of sitting the audience as the play unfolds. I don't feel Broadway, I feel West Texas, small town, sharing an experience that every audience member can relate to their own lives in some way, via parents, grandparents, neighbors or even themselves.
As I have said before, I am not much on reading scripts, but the way you present your script is different. i am not sure why or how -- I just know I'm leave every post with a desire to see the next one!
Good writing. ann
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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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This play continues to grab my attention from word one! I can see and feel the atmosphere of sitting the audience as the play unfolds. I don't feel Broadway, I feel West Texas, small town, sharing an experience that every audience member can relate to their own lives in some way, via parents, grandparents, neighbors or even themselves.
As I have said before, I am not much on reading scripts, but the way you present your script is different. i am not sure why or how -- I just know I'm leave every post with a desire to see the next one!
Good writing. ann
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Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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Oh, Ann, you've made my day! Thank you, thank you, thank you!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It's all leaking out now. So Fanny's daddy was involved, but didn't want to do it in the end. But he did want to stop Junipers daddy from being hung. Robert really does keep up with the questioning, and slowly he's getting it all out of Fanny. She obviously loved Juni, and was saddened by her long imprisonment and subsequent death. Life was awful in those days for the black people. Can't say much has changed. Another excellent part, Jay. I really like our Miss Fanny. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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It's all leaking out now. So Fanny's daddy was involved, but didn't want to do it in the end. But he did want to stop Junipers daddy from being hung. Robert really does keep up with the questioning, and slowly he's getting it all out of Fanny. She obviously loved Juni, and was saddened by her long imprisonment and subsequent death. Life was awful in those days for the black people. Can't say much has changed. Another excellent part, Jay. I really like our Miss Fanny. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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Awwww, thank you so much, Sandra. Fanny kinda sends a mixed message. Either the reader likes her or hates her. No one thinks of her as a comedian. (In fact, I had an act all ready to post of her act with the reporter in the audience. But I had to abandon it because it was a distraction from the true thrust of the storyline.) Sandra, thank you so much for your six stars and your always warm and kind words.
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I think she's great. Perhaps that idea with Robert in the audience can be done at a later date? You are very welcome for the sixth star, my friend. xx
Comment from amahra
LOL! I feel like I'm the reporter. He's asking all the questions I want to ask Fanny myself. There was a lot in this chapter, Jay. This is one heck of a story within a story. It's kind of like when I dream I'm dreaming and I have to wake up once in my dream and finally in my bed. Great writing, Jay.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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LOL! I feel like I'm the reporter. He's asking all the questions I want to ask Fanny myself. There was a lot in this chapter, Jay. This is one heck of a story within a story. It's kind of like when I dream I'm dreaming and I have to wake up once in my dream and finally in my bed. Great writing, Jay.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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Oh, God, Amahra, your words do so much for me at this rather odd juncture in the storyline. Part of me is saying, "Jay, get on with it!, while another part of me is saying, "No, Fanny is letting the information out at the pace she wants. This is her story. And the Reporter is no more than a dogged inciter, determined to keep Fanny's eyes always on the target, while he respects her too much to speed up her intended pace. You said it all when you said, "He's asking all the questions I want to ask Fanny myself." You are the bomb, Amahra! Thank you so much for the six stars and your generous and kind words.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
So many questions and so little time to get answers, especially with Ms. Fanny not really wanting to tell all. I am so enjoying reading this. You are doing a good job telling us this story.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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So many questions and so little time to get answers, especially with Ms. Fanny not really wanting to tell all. I am so enjoying reading this. You are doing a good job telling us this story.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Barbara. Yeah, there's no speeding up Fanny, is there?